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The Art of War by Contempt - M

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Contempt, May 14, 2006.

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  1. Contempt

    Contempt Third Year

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    May 14, 2006 #1
    Title: The Art of War
    Author: Me (or Contempt if you prefer)
    Rating: M
    Genre: General
    Pairing: N/A
    Status: Work in Progress
    Summary: During the summer of fourth year, Harry finds a particular aged book. Opening it, he discovers the ancient way of war, and with it, he will learn to win the coming war on his own terms...
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2938061/1/

    Well, here's my revised Chapter one. Its not too long, but I hope to increase my chapter sizes as summer approaches, and my evil school teachers give me less and less homework. Hopefully you'll enjoy my story, but if not, constructive critism is helpful.
     
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  2. Silke

    Silke Second Year

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    May 14, 2006 #2
    Your link doesn't work Contempt, however this one does: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2938061/1/

    Roughly 1800 words, i'll wait a couple of chapters before i judge it however it's a good start.
     
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  3. Myst

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    May 14, 2006 #3
    Yea it is a good start, i'll keep following it. Hopefully you will increase chapter size as time goes on.
     
  4. bmatsea

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    May 14, 2006 #4
    so far it looks to be a great start.
     
  5. Patrik f

    Patrik f Guest

    May 14, 2006 #5
    its a very good start, hopefully will future chapters be longer.
     
  6. Aekiel

    Aekiel Angle of Mispeling ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    May 14, 2006 #6
    Didn't tridentwatch try to steal this fic and got kicked out for it?
    Glad to see you're back Contempt, loved this fic when I first read it. Wonder if its been changed?...
     
  7. Rain

    Rain Pirate Navigator of the 7 Seas

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    May 15, 2006 #7
    Again, I also loved this fic when it was posted on DLP. First one I read on here, actually. :D It's nice to see it active again.

    I look forward to reading more of the refined/revised version. ^_^
     
  8. Niffler Lord

    Niffler Lord Headmaster

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    May 15, 2006 #8
    Good to see you back. I really enjoyed the chapters you posted on DLP and am looking forward for more.
     
  9. matthiasblack

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    May 20, 2006 #9
    I think this is a great lead into an independent harry fic and can't wait to see more.
     
  10. cu_cullen9

    cu_cullen9 Second Year

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    May 25, 2006 #10
    I'm looking forward to see where this leads as well.
     
  11. Lord Osiris

    Lord Osiris Auror

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    May 27, 2006 #11
    I think i rememeber reading this on here? if it's the same fic then i really look forward to reading more of it, what you had was fantastic so chop-chop lets get more updates up.
     
  12. KANE

    KANE Groundskeeper

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    May 27, 2006 #12
    Pretty good story, but i probably wont really get into it until you post a few more chapters. kEEP IT UP!
     
  13. Contempt

    Contempt Third Year

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    Update planned hopefully for monday, but graduation parties for friends, exams, and SAT IIs are getting in the way. Thankfully its memorial day on monday, so I should have a decent amount of time to finish the work I have on the second chapter (which will be a bit different than the original chapter 2 here on DLP).
     
  14. Contempt

    Contempt Third Year

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    Second chapter posted.
     
  15. Fuegodefuerza

    Fuegodefuerza Minister of Magic

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    May 30, 2006 #15
    Very good installment, this is turning into a great independent!Harry story. The only words of advice that I have for you is to keep the same pace that you have at the moment...don't make Harry understand this whole book in one week, turn into uber-badass #363859 the next week and get married with kids at 16. (Not that you would do any of that, I was just ranting a bit, it felt good ;) ) Right now, the pace you have set, and Harry's gradual plan, seems perfect, and if you can stick to that plan, then this story will get up there with the best.
     
  16. Myst

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    May 30, 2006 #16
    Brilliant Story, you just need Length.
     
  17. 3rdeye

    3rdeye Looked into the void

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    When i weren't a member and i went around the site, this was 1 of my favs! Lovely to see it back up and running, and even better to see Tridentwatch isn't doing it! So, cheerio!:banana: :banana: :banana: :banana: Watch the bannas party! thats how happy they are!
     
  18. carvell

    carvell Professor DLP Supporter

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    Jun 2, 2006 #18
    already leaft a review on ff this is great

    and to answer 3rdeve question ( how many ways can gw die )

    answer NOT ENOUGH
     
  19. 3rdeye

    3rdeye Looked into the void

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    Absolutely true!:) :GDie1:mid6 i got two ways at least!
    And after reading the second post, the story looks like it's going to do what might soon be impossible for it! Get even better!
     
  20. Hellsing Boy

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    Looks really good so far. I think I read this or something similar some time ago; independent, no-cliché Harry are rare!:banana:
     
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