Title: Blissful Amnesia
Author: FFML Tim
Rating: T
Genre: Romance/Adventure
Pairing: H/Fleur
Status: WIP
Summary: Harry seems to lose his memory after being beaten by his uncle and ends up staying with the Delacours.

Only two chapters at the moment but seems to be a Powerful!Harry (possibly super) who "remembers" magic that he never remembers learning and is quite good at it.

Relationship with Fleur was rushed and the author seems to not like dialogue much.

3/5 So far good to pass some time but nothing great.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4228409/1/Blissful_Amnesia

 

If the author suddenly pulled a "don't fuck with timetravel" excuse out of their ass, I might give it more than a 3 out of five.

Everything feels too rushed for me to get into the story. But the style of writing is good, even if the author doesn't seem very concerned with dialogue. It's told in a very passive tense so I don't think there will be a lot of action anytime soon.

I'll keep an eye on it, but I'm not impressed.

 

It was a pretty good story, but too short for rating. It feels like the 2 chapters are only an introduction so the pace doesn't bother me too much, but it should slow down in the next few chapters. 4/5 so far.

 

The Harry/Fleur relationship felt extremely forced, and Harry's super-knowledge didn't sit well with me at all. Apparating to France just to be found by Fleur's dad was a bit of a stretch also.

2.5/5 at the moment, hope it gets better soon.

 

Doesn't say that he apparated to a safe house which was being monitored by Fleur's Dad. I happened to like the story but I do wish there was more for me to judge on.

 

Until I know what exactly happened to Harry (timetravel + amnesia??) I just have this wtf reaction... I mean what's going on? Hopefully the author will explain it soon.

As to the rating of the story, it's nothing outstanding so far, and it does feel a bit rushed. I'd say that it's good, but not library-worth good, so:

3/5

 

...no.

^^Okay, it was better written, but thats what the story seems like. It should have been:

I sincerely doubt this is planned; the stuff in this story just happens. 2/5, and only because of writing.

EDIT: I'm all for a lack of dialog, as long as its done at all correctly. Can't say that, for this.

 

Readers of chapter 4: beware. Take sunglasses or it might burn your eyes. I won't say more or I'll risk puking, but my advice is to not continue. *shivers*

 

If you want to get to the real story, do it in one chapter. He fucking proposed, which totally ruined any possible potential I saw in this story. I thought he was going to propose sex, or maybe butsecks, not a freaking wedding when he is 14 years old...

 

It has been updated (Chapter 5).

The Author has managed to do the unexpected in taking an exciting event, Harry dueling Death Eaters at the Quidditch World Cup and killing several, and transforming it into boring tripe. Fleur in this story is at best an empty caricature, a part human who is a babe but gets discriminated against, who lacks every semblance of actually being a character. Harry has all the depth of so much balsa wood, his emotions are empty and trite. When Fleur (who in another crap occurrence is his wife to be) is lead to him in iron shackles, he feels "rage" and then promptly does nothing. For all his vaunted training and ability, in an earlier scene he is stunned in the back of a head by a ministry employee. Every possible bit of action in this story is written with a sense of drama more fit to depict a person taking a shit.

The technical mastery of the story, English wise, combined with the lack of ability when it comes to story-telling seem to suggest an individual with long practice of English non-fiction essay writing but who lacks the talent or inclination to apply that ability to fiction writing.

2/5

 

I read the first few chapters and then took it off of my updates. FFML Tim had a few decent ones, once upon a time. This isn't one of them. 3/5