I've posted on here a few times in regards to a Harry Potter themed fangame I'm creating for fun. I'm not much of a writer/reader (unless it's writing code for software), but I ended up having to create a plot structure for the game story and was convinced by someone to expand that into a readable fanfic.

As a noob, I'm sure my writing isn't up to the same standard as a lot of people on here and other sites. But I'd be interested to get any feedback from people.

I can't change the structure much, as it follows the game. But the writing itself can be improved if anyone flags up any issues. I wrote out the plot over Christmas and I'll try to publish the full writing for each chapter by the end of Feb.

It's a sequel to the book series that takes place between the last chapter of DH and the epilogue, immediately after the battle ends. The main POV is Hermione, but other characters are involved.

https://www.wattpad.com/story/376258725-chapter-thirty-six-and-a-half

The game info is at: https://snoopix.itch.io/hpbackrooms if you want a better idea of the setting (I've put a few 1-2 min demo videos on the forum). Note: the images/clips look darker if you watch them on a phone vs normal screen (not sure why).