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Old 05-21-2008, 05:58 PM   #1
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Anything but Slytherin by IP82 - M (ONE SHOT)

Title: Anything but Slytherin
Author: IP82 (me)
Genre: Drama/Horror/AU
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Published: May 21, 2008
Words: 3,500 (ONE SHOT)
Summary : How could have Harry's sorting ceremony looked like if the first war against Voldemort went down a bit differently.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4269983/1/
http://www.patronuscharm.net/s/122/1/

Just a quick oneshot, spurred from a image that popped in my head yesterday.


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Old 05-21-2008, 06:04 PM   #2
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Very dark. This would be an awesome setting for a later-era story where Voldemort returns. Bet some of the populace are chafing under this rule of "Light". Maybe even thinking, "Hey, the Death Eaters weren't so bad..."

And I lulz'd at Ron's noble ancestry.
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Old 05-21-2008, 06:19 PM   #3
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That was splendid. I certainly think it should end where it did.

That was definitely 5/5.
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Old 05-21-2008, 06:22 PM   #4
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Wonderful. 5/5 for a one shot. Definitely deserves to go in the library.
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Old 05-21-2008, 06:32 PM   #5
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McGonagall tapped the Hat with her wand, muting its words
Nice one you shut the bloody thing up, 8 out of 10 author's alway's write out that stupid song word for word.

As for this being a one-shot Harry saw an abused Draco being killed just for being a Slytherin this could be a good starting point for a dark Harry.

5/5

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Old 05-21-2008, 06:42 PM   #6
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Definitely one of the best stories I've seen in a long while, mostly because of its quick pace, vivid imagery and unexpected characterisations.

Quite a few plot points could have been expanded, but it might be more beneficial to keep readers in suspense about them, all things considered.
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Old 05-21-2008, 06:47 PM   #7
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Masterfully done, and it ended perfectly.

5/5

EDIT: Lol, Banner came.

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Old 05-21-2008, 06:57 PM   #8
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I especially like Malfoy having to curse his parents. 'Curse on his black soul.' There's something insidious about that.

The Light won, but became in their own way worse than the Dark.
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Old 05-21-2008, 07:19 PM   #9
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Nicely done, dude.
As someone said above, this would be a nice start of an AU story.
4/5
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Old 05-21-2008, 07:22 PM   #10
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Old 05-21-2008, 07:23 PM   #11
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Very well done, quite the disturbing thought that a child could have their livelihood ripped from them before they even reach their teens.

Interestingly enough, a very clear argument could be made that the world is a better place with Draco stuck as a squib. Having the actual dilemma elevates this story to a 5-star one.
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Old 05-21-2008, 08:42 PM   #12
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4.9/5

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I want this continued. So very, very badly.

Fucking awesome.
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Old 05-21-2008, 08:52 PM   #13
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This is masterful. 5/5 It was interesting to think that the Light could in a way be worse than Voldemort.
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Old 05-21-2008, 08:59 PM   #14
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The general concept is the only one that made me regret not coming up with it first.

Well done.
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Old 05-21-2008, 10:29 PM   #15
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It's a bit too over-the-top for my taste; however, the writing is very good and the concept is rarely used. 4.5 stars.
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It's a bit too over-the-top for my taste; however, the writing is very good and the concept is rarely used. 4.5 stars.
Rarely? Try "Never"...

Unless you've seen a story with a similar premise? If so, a link is needed immediately.

Back on topic: Awesome story, definitely for the library. 5/5
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Old 05-21-2008, 11:09 PM   #17
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This is a very interesting fic, I like the idea it presents about the light side going too far sort of like Lord Methene's fic but that whole magic stripping thing for Slytherin's was a touch over the top.

4.5/5 for me just cause I think the magic stripping chair was over the top
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Rarely? Try "Never"...

Unless you've seen a story with a similar premise? If so, a link is needed immediately.

Back on topic: Awesome story, definitely for the library. 5/5
Shirley Jackson's classic short story "The Lottery" has a somewhat similar general concept. It was the first thing that came to my mind after I read IP82's piece.
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I loved the nervous Hagrid, the blood lusting crowd, and the oppressive 'guardians'. The ambiguous ending with the hat was a good choice.

You've outdone yourself ip82.
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Warhammer 40k level xenophobia meets Harry Potter. I kind of wonder why the Sorting Hat didn't see anything related to the fate of the Slytherins though. It'd be fun to see a continuation of this, because I can't imagine a way for Voldemort to out-evil the Light Side. Without doing something nightmarish on the level of 40k itself, like submerging the planet in a Warp storm or something.

5/5.
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