The will of the majority is stronger than the will of the minority. Even the mighty Dumbledore can't do much unless he causes a civil war.

 

I see two possibilities.
Voldemort and/or his DE managed to do something to break Dumbledore's will, and the old man is nothing more than a puppet, or (a happier possibility)
the rejected children would be escorted out of the castle - without magic, they would have no reason to be there - and AD and Hagrid have established some sort of Underground Railroad to get them out of the country.

(it's the only way I can deal.)

 

About Dumbledore: there was some discussion with my alphas whether to make him into the Minister (thus instigator of this light-obsessed world) or a helpless observer (by spiking up the 'sadness' part). In the end, I decided to leave his role a bit ambiguous. You can (or should be able to) interpret his short appearance and tacit approval of Malfoy's "banishment" however you wish.

My personal preference is that he started this Light sect, served as its figurehead for a while and then it sort of got out of his hands, leaving him a guilt-riddled observer of the hell he had created. But that's just me.

 

Very nice and very creepy. I hadn't thought that anything on DLP would have ever made me feel sorry for Draco. You have proved me wrong.
5/5

 

Damn. I would love to read a continuation of this fic wherein there's a real bloody revolution.

 

QFT. I'll give this one a 4/5

 

Ugh I hate that. "If lots of people use it, it must suck!" mentality.

I don't give a shit if something is canon or not. See IP82's post for that, I completely agree.

You'll notice it isn't all law abiding wizards. It's Order members.

And after winning against a Dark Lord I can see them classifying themselves as 'The Light'

 

Mate, they are a group of fanatics- you know, psychos, loonies, fundamentalist Christians. They call themselves 'Guardians of the Light' (I think. I read it a bit back) in the same way that Bush calls the war, 'The War on Terror.'

Both are rather ambiguous, open-ended, emotionally stimulating terms that really mean nothing in the long run. But a group of fanatics use them to make their actions seem reasonable.

It wasn't the old, worn 'Good guys use phoenixes and bad guys use DARK phoenixes' cliche.

 

Let's not forget that bad guys use the killing curse and good guys use reducto.

"Light" is only lame when it's endorsed by the narrative of the fic. Having it adopted by the characters as propaganda is not at all cliche, and is actually pretty sweet. Great one-shot.

The ironic thing is that this is actually the logical ending place for a lot of the mediocre indy-Harry stories out there.

 

Well, there is one less Horcrux to worry about...or is there?

Awfully short sighted of the 'winners', don't you think?

Let's just forcibly reduce an already low population by about 1/4...(not quite, because some snakes will go to other houses). I can't see a group that would do what they are doing to children allowing them to grow up and 'breed'.

I would put Dumbledore on the sidelines, he may have started it, but if Crouch is Minister, then I can see this as being a very possible scenario.

Also, I can see why the ending point is great...but I think this could make a really good short fic...5-10 chapters. No need to do a total canon redo or anything, but...

 

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Excellent story with compelling horror tones in it. Full marks.

5/5

Regards,
Maidros

 

As for a second chapter, Harry and Hagrid's first tea party?

It would be hard to top what has been written, but it could be fun.

Or not?

 

Excellent premise, showing that there is more to the Wizarding world than the idiotic Gryffindor good, Slytherin bad concept introduced by JKR. This works well as a one-shot, but could be expanded with more background and foreshadowing of events.

5/5 from me.

 

I stay away from One-Shots on pure principle, usually. However, the amount of approval made me curious. So I took a peek. It took my fancy rather quickly, I must admit, though I was readily confused for a moment at McGonagall’s character. I suspended disbelief for a moment and found myself simply reading along.​

Creepy.​

As that was no doubt the point, it was very well done. The character whom I though remained mostly the same, was Ron. I always thought he and Draco were interchangeable and that Ron was always more of an ass. Glad to see his characterization in this one-shot agrees. ​

Light turns Dark. ​

I enjoyed it, gave me something to think about. I always enjoy reading what stimulates my creativity and you did it well. I don’t think you should take it further though. It’s brilliant as a one-shot, as a chaptered story I’m afraid it would lose its sparkle.​

4.2 from me, It still lacks something... if it comes to me, I’ll edit the post.​

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5/5 for a shocking read, -1 for a few things already mentioned above = 4/5 - good one altogether.

 

Oh...to tell the truth, I was quite sick after I´ve read this.
(This is a good thing, because it means that the story has gone deep under my skin *shudder*)
My overproductive imagination worked overdrive and I couldn´t stop thinking about WW2 and other awfull things.
I love children and even if they can be nasty little monsters, they don´t deserve this. To destry them because of something they are or they parents have done...
What kind of sick world is this place...
They are just as bad as Voldemort.

Really well written, but if I got a Hogwarts letter, I would just say NO and go to Durmstrung or Salem or some other place far, far away.

Splendid Oneshot!
Original, well written etc.
5/5

 

You got sick from reading this? WOW. This is pretty tame actually.

I hope you never read The Jungle, 1984, and other such literature. Or a few short stories ala The Pit and the Pendulum.

 

No shit. I actually found this one quite tame, especially when measured against a few of the DLPérs work. As always IP82 delivered with a storyline that's different and helps weed out the wusses.

 

Much of the stuff on DLP has far more graphic violence and so forth, but I feel that this one shot proves that graphic =/= more disturbing. I've read a load of fics with torture and so forth in, and none of them got to me - they were just words on a page.

This one really manages to pull at the heart strings, though I think that it would have been more effective if Malfoy had been executed, since all the comparisons to an electric chair made me think that was what was coming, and so when he "only" lost his magic it seemed like he had got off lightly in comparison.