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Abandoned Room Of Requirements by Fission25 - NC17

Discussion in 'Restricted Section' started by MysterioX, May 18, 2007.

  1. MysterioX

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    Title: Room Of Requirements
    Author: Fission25

    Rating: NC-17
    Genres: Action/Adventure, Erotica
    DLP Category: Resticted Section
    Pairing: Harry/Mutiple Female Characters
    Chapters: 5
    Words: 28,721
    Updated: July 7, 2008
    Published: June 18, 2008
    Status: Abandoned

    Summary: In Order of the Phoenix Harry declines Dobby's offer of seeing the Room of Requirements that first night. Here's an idea of what might have happened if he'd accepted the offer.

    Link:
    - http://www.ficwad.com/story/85565
    - http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4332854/1/Room-of-Requirement

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    Only two chapters so far, featuring a Harry that has a true teenage personality. Meaning he thinks not with his head but his dick, most of the time.
    A fun read.


    Checked: Nov. 12, 2012
    Fixed broken link, added fanfiction.net
     
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  2. Bukay

    Bukay Professor DLP Supporter

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    Well, almost literally... especially his main reason not to use the RoR. Well, in the end he is portrayed as a 15 year old teenager, but still...

    I'll give it 2.5/5 for decent grammar and poor plot. It will be either a harem story or a story of Harry's love life... not for me...
     
  3. slasheh

    slasheh Seventh Year

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    to be honest i don't even know what to think of this story.
    is it pwp? if yes were is the smut....
    is it supposed to have a plot? if yes where in the blazes is he hiding :p
     
  4. thisperson

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    I saw this yesterday and actually thought about posting it...

    Apart from OK writing, I found nothing more for liking this story.

    I saw no real plot, no smut (even though it says it is a smut fic), and Harry is still a pussy...won't even grab a chick and just bang the fuck out of her if he is so damn horny.

    Unless the author manages to do a 180 to where this seems to be going...
    2.5/5 Harry is portrayed as another horny teenager, (what's so different then?) He has no powers, or an incentive for learning more magicks
     
  5. Richard

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    And he also got the title wrong. Its "Room of Requirement", not requirements. I hate it when they do that shit, its annoying.

    Richard.
     
  6. ZanyMuggle

    ZanyMuggle Third Year

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    Oh, come on, Richard. You're going to flame Fission because of the use of the letter S? The use of one character summarizes everything you have to say about this story? Did you even read the story?

    I'll have to admit, the few reviews of this story fit the DLP norm: pan everything that might be original in the hopes of appease the DLP Powers-That-Be. Brown-nosing at its finest.

    Fission's story seems to be a bit unfocused and unbeta-ed, but it is original and interesting. That alone should grant it an above-average rating.
     
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  7. Cell

    Cell Gunner of The Black Poison DLP Supporter

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    If you can't think of anything to say don't,save us the time of not having to read your post.

    If you're that desperate for smut,go read Yarrgh's 'Incubus' fic or go wank off to porn..

    Oh and about Harry,that's canon Harry.

    This shit is annoying when you come on here and bitch about an extra letter that's not supposed to be up there. Read the story first for future reference.


    4.5/5. I kinda like this story. Voyeuristic Horny Harry who is trying to get some pussy. Pretty amusing.
     
  8. ZanyMuggle

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    I'm sorry. I had thought this thread was intended for sentient conversation. Cell has proven otherwise. I withdraw everything I said on this thread.

    All hail DLP!
     
  9. slasheh

    slasheh Seventh Year

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    why? just because it is original should it have an above average rating?
    It has no plot (yet, might develop that) except harry being a horny teen. So what excactly should we rate as good? The writing style? sorry not polished enough to rate more than 2/5 alone.
    I don't mind smutfics (though tbh i don't really read them except if the author has a good writing style too e.g. Incubus), but normal fics need something to make them worthy of being read.
    That can either be a decent plot, or some element of humour/parody.
    This fic isn't really anything, which i tried to express with my short 3 line post before i went to bed.

    Ps: Cell if you can't even bother to understand what i wrote in 3 lines why excactly are you trying to review? I thought my post was pretty clear, that being that this story lacks all the things i personally require to make it a decent piece of fiction.
     
  10. ZanyMuggle

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    Thank you, slashesh. With this post, you have shown a little more review capability than "it's popular to insult people on DLP so I'll do it to make the DLP Admins think I'm cool". Unortunately, Cell is far too deep into this belief to be asked to review a story objectively. How much of Cell's review (which was a picture-perfect clone of the BioPlague norm) had to do with the story?

    As I said, I'm in the wrong place at the wrong time, so ignore anything I say, and go back to insulting me and everyone else. Happy happy, joy joy.
     
  11. Stalicon

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    Wtf mate, why are you so defensive? Yes, he didn't really have to tell us that he didn't like people screwing up the name to the room of requirement, but let it alone. There is no reason to jump his ass for it, he's just expressing his honest opinion. That was not a flame by a longshot.

    And whats this shit about panning to the DLP norm? So far people have only expressed honest reviews.

    They didn't like it because it had no plot, It didn't have an interesting writing style, and it's not really that new. Because I'll tell you what, Harry being horny isn't really that big of a twist. Just see some of Vash's works, or maybe a few of Yarrghs, and Cloneserpents is good too. The list goes on and on and on.


    Now your just asking for a smack-down. Cut the DLP shit, if you're that unhappy get the hell out, I dont' want to hear your whining.

    Dude you're being a bloody hypocrite. What in any of that crap you just said, had anything to do with the story. If I can read as well as I think I can, it looks more like a flame at DLP then a review.

    Slashesh only stated what he already had in a previous review, which you complained about because he was being a 'brown-nosing DLP norm' for not agreeing with you.

    Obviously if no one agrees with you right off it must be opression by the Staff! It has nothing to do with you having posted a story with no plot! Or one without good smut to make up for it!

    All Hail DLP!
     
  12. i like boats

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    The voyeurism angle is interesting, but I couldn't stand too many more chapters without either significant plot development or an increase in smut. It's really too early to judge, but it's a promising enough start that I'll give it a 4. For now.
     
  13. ZanyMuggle

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    You're right. I was being a hypocrite by bringing non-review crap into this thread. I'll try to make this the last such post.

    I was frustrated because another good author and decent story that I like are being flamed, and I didn't feel there was any solid justification for it.

    I apologize to the other folks on this thread and to the DLP staff, who have not done anything offensive to me to warrant my ire.

    Last thing: I certainly have no ill will for the flames of my own work. Most of the reviews were quite informative and funny.
     
  14. Richard

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    Yes well, getting a title wrong from a book is pretty lame. It says it right there in the book. There is no S! Authors should spell it right or fix it.

    Richard.
     
  15. Aekiel

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    As has been said, it lacks plot and interesting writing style, and didn't really spark my interest. Though you bitches should quit whining, Richard does have a point - the name of the room is in the book, its like getting Voldimort's name wrong :D, or Snap's.

    I give it a 2/5, just cause of the spelling/grammar in story.

    Aekiel
     
  16. thisperson

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    It is not that I wanted to read smut, more of the fact that if you say it is a smut story and it is not, then it has no point in being smut...huh?


    this is like going to the theatres and paying for a WWII Action film, then seeing a romance instead.

    Why are you so defensive over this story anyways?

    Edit: Scrap the last question.
     
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  17. Dark Magic

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    I agree with the above comments. No plot, Harry is a pussy, blah, blah, blah. I give it a 2.5/5, only because I could understand what was being written (grammar/spelling).
     
  18. Richard

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    lol Stories with Harry being a pussy totally suck. Unless its for kids, well, yeah, but oh well. One of my favorites is still "Shake Me", he's a badass independent character, which most of you probably remember from reading it. Should try an find some good crossovers...if there are any good ones not added that is.

    As for the "book" comment. Yes, authors really should get it spelled right, or fix it when they're able to. The books are basically almost a reference. I own all 6 HP books (although I stopped re-reading them after I found Fanfiction). When I first read the books, I thought they were totally cool shit to read, so I re-read 1-5 three or four times each. Which reminds me about spells...and languages...Where could I find an English to Latin translator? I'll search Google...

    Edit: And where is the thread of telling what spells you created? Can't find it.

    Richard.
     
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  19. thisperson

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    I think you mean this one...

    The DLP Spell List

    I'm not sure, but that is the only Spell List I have seen on the forums.
     
  20. MysterioX

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    No body here likes pussy Harry that’s for sure. Just give it time I’m sure he will get some action soon, after all its only two chapters.
    I have read two other works of his/her, one still on net “Unknown Memories” and the other I think by the name “Harry Potter and the time of learning” one of the first Honks fics. Both well written and good plots. Just don’t expect regular updates.
    i give it a 3.8/5 for now, for coming up with a original use for the ROR.