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Oneshot Two Weeks in the Alley by BajaB

Discussion in 'Humor' started by Heather_Sinclair, Mar 11, 2008.

  1. Archer

    Archer Fourth Year DLP Supporter

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    So, I read it... it was a decent read and somewhat funny. I'll give it a 3/5.
     
  2. Illnill

    Illnill First Year

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    It made me laugh. That's all I need.

    4/5
     
  3. Mage

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    Made me laugh a few times, and kept a smile on my face most of the time. Very light, which I find refreshing since there really aren't that many fics like it our there. Nobody else found hiring Hedwig a hooker funny? Personally that was one of the highlights of the fic for me. I also found the running cart joke to be pretty fun too though, and unlike so many of you didn't find it tedious by the end. 4.5/5
     
  4. Big D on a Diet

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    Pretty average, but I made it all the way through (skimmed a little). With my attention span, that's reasonably impressive.

    3/5 Couple of chuckles, not much else.

    EDIT: I may be in the minority, but "Death of a Nobody" didn't do much for me at all.
     
  5. White Rabbit

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    Fun read. Not really my type, but made me laugh.
     
  6. parselmaster

    parselmaster Sixth Year DLP Supporter

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    I found it amusing, but I was under a lot of stress lately so this was nice. The jibes towards some of the older cliche' at the site were interesting. Not the best one-shot I've ever read but definitely not the worst. The goblin body-guard was my favorite character, and his introduction the funniest thing I found in there, at least in my current mentality. Harry, though, was out of character and though that usually is a good thing, I found it annoying after awhile. The ending was abrupt, and could have been done differently.

    3.5/5
     
  7. LegalAlien

    LegalAlien Denarii Host

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    I actually found it quite funny in parts, but that might just be that evil spicy thai chicken talking which we had for lunch... :)

    Nah, seriously, the humour in this story is definitely not for everyone, but it got a few chuckles out of me, so I give it a 4/5, especially since it isn't bad written.
     
  8. Oz

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    Mildly entertaining and it gave me few chuckles. Not something I'd bother rereading though...
    3/5
     
  9. PapaMidNite56

    PapaMidNite56 Second Year DLP Supporter

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    Great story. I had a lot of laughs reading it. It's one of the funniest fics that I've read lately



    4.5/5
     
  10. MannequinMuse

    MannequinMuse Squib

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    The story was a bit pointless and wandering. But, it was a comedy. It was meant to just make us laugh and think of the possibilities for fun if you were young and filthy rich in a magical London. Also for once Harry acts his age. A pleasant break from the angsting and sophisticated plots. The fic is good at what it sets out to do.

    4/5
     
  11. Lawyer in Exile

    Lawyer in Exile Second Year

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    It was the perfect one-shot for the day: good laughs, no point at all, enjoyable read. 5/5.
     
  12. ramadden13

    ramadden13 Fifth Year

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    This had enough humor to keep me entertained and was fairly original. The goblin's attempt to cook Sirius over a fire was my favorite moment. 4.5/5
     
  13. morgoth

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    its verry funny and refreshing but like Amerision said It's also abit shallow, basic, and repetitive 4/5 for me
     
  14. Rahkesh Asmodaeus

    Rahkesh Asmodaeus THUNDAH Bawd Admin DLP Supporter

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    Huh. Wonder why this hasn't been moved from the For Review section yet. Library time. D:
     
  15. mbond98

    mbond98 Seventh Year

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    Someone on DLP complained something was 'shallow'? What is this bastardization of the world coming to?

    [​IMG]
    ^^Thanks to whats-his-face, who I stole this from.
     
    Last edited: May 10, 2008
  16. Memory King

    Memory King Order Member DLP Supporter

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    Old News.

    Good to see this fic in its proper place.
     
  17. mbond98

    mbond98 Seventh Year

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    Is that 'not found' on purpose, or is your link broken?

    And, yes, its good to see it here. As I said:

     
  18. Nuhuh

    Nuhuh Dastardly Shadow Admin Retired Staff

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    This was very amusing. I enjoyed the digs the author made on some typical shopping spree stories, though they then went ahead and included similar cliches.

    At any rate, I think it would be silly to get too critical about this story. It was fun, light, and short. That is all that it offers and I think succeeds in delivering.

    4/5
     
  19. kmfrank

    kmfrank Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    I agree about some of the cliche's, but I also considered that most shopping sprees occur a bit later than this one did, and are more serious about him gearing up while this was more for fun.

    I loved the mysterious goblin bodyguard in a backpack thing - good for a laugh.

    I'll give this one a 4/5 as well.

    -Kevin
     
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