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Complete You're a Wizard, Potter by Amsuhl - K+

Discussion in 'Humor' started by deathinapinkboa, Jun 17, 2007.

  1. Kate

    Kate Elite Member DLP Supporter

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    There is only one thing that matter to me when I read a parody; do I laugh or do I not laugh. The first chapter was funny, the second not so much, so 2.5/5 for now.
     
  2. TripticWriter

    TripticWriter Groundskeeper

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    It has been updated.

    Nice chapter, the story is starting to grow on me.
     
  3. Teal_Thanatos

    Teal_Thanatos First Year

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    bloody funny, 4/5
     
  4. Xiph0

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    Lulzy.

    Author actually responds to reviews.

    5/5
     
  5. deathinapinkboa

    deathinapinkboa Minister of Magic

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    For all you lot complaining about anachronisms, just remember that JKR herself has a few. Dudley throughing his playstation out the window is a nice example.
     
  6. TripticWriter

    TripticWriter Groundskeeper

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    Updated again.

    Short chapter, but with his update rate it's not that annoying.

    About the chapter, nothing special. We have Harry amusing himself with his magic, maybe a tiny glimpse of a plot and that's all.

    Now that the author gave us more information about the switching personality and how it affect his magic I found the idea more and more interesting.

    So the story seems do deter from the original path I had predicted for her: pointless character bashing and continuous sarcarstic Harry.
     
  7. Snarf

    Snarf Squanchin' Party Bro! Prestige DLP Supporter

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    I thought this story was hilarious, a beautiful twist on an over-used plot. It made me laugh, quite a bit, but then again I laughed at Mitch so my sense of humor may just be a bit strange.
     
  8. Le

    Le Fourth Year

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    I thought this was hilarious. Honestly, who cares if they make a little mistake like that? I didn't even notice until you pointed it out. Perhaps I'm not reading as carefully as you, but I still found quite a bit of enjoyment in it. Definitely 5/5 in my book.
     
  9. Marie M

    Marie M Raptured to Hell

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    Hilarious.

    I want more.

    Now
     
  10. MysterioX

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    LOL
    Can't wait to see the Mafia King in action.
    4.5/5
     
  11. Marie M

    Marie M Raptured to Hell

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    :D New chapter came out!

    Unfortunately it's rather small and rashly-written.

    I hope to see more soon.
     
  12. Xiph0

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    Added it to the DLP Humor C2, given it's move from FR to here.

    Eh... 4kish words? Not that bad.

    I liked it, more lulz. Heshe's also stopped some of the annoying shit from previous chapters, like overuse of he-SHE-it.
     
  13. Kate

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    That has got to be one of the best (in a funny kind of way) rewrites of the train trip I've seen in a while.
     
  14. ip82

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    Yeah, this story is just cool. As long as she keeps angst out (and there IS a setup for it, what with the whole MPD), this could turn out great.
     
  15. Rainstorm

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    Really fun story. Interesting and dynamic Harry with serious aspirations. My only worry is that the author either gets bored of the story or ends up overdoing the super Harry aspects which are emerging (silent stupefy as a first year?). Looking forward to seeing how things develop however, should be interesting.
     
  16. Jamven

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    Next chapter has been posted, seems to me more of a filler chapter than anything else.
     
  17. Mage

    Mage Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

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    Great story so far, reminds me a lot of So Sue Me, hopefully it won't fall into the same rut. 5/5 so far but will wait to rate a little longer.
     
  18. darthdavid

    darthdavid Second Year

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    4/5

    Funny, well written but there are areas where it could improve and some of the ideas bug me.
     
  19. Eristaz

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    I love the Magic School Bus crack.
     
  20. Klael

    Klael Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    It did seem to make an awkward turn from parody into a less-than-original attempt at a psychological drama. I'm nocking off a point from my earlier review (which I acknowledge I never actually gave). ANYWAY--it goes from a 3/5 to a 2/5. I am increasingly unimpressed with each chapter.