The only part that'd make sense in a Harry/Fleur fanfiction is one I may end up writing and posting. Harry is raised by muggles, and muggles have a tendency to gain disorders because of abuse. When Harry fails to realize he's different than the rest, he also gains a mental disorder. A personality disorder which allows him the immunity to any and all types of mind altering spells, like a Veela's allure or a potions professor's legillimens, or dumbledore's mental manipulation.

With Harry's mind split in five pieces, and four aptly naming themselves after the founders of Hogwarts, what can anyone really do? Many people gain a thing called curiosity, but it's the highly persistent who refuse to give up. Way to go, Godric. You just had to save a little girl from a lake!

 

Fixed that for you.

Does he also posses overpowered magical core and is heir of Merlin?

So, he gets the disorder before coming to Hogwarts, but his personalities take names after Hogwarts founders? Also, if Harry had schizophrenia it would be discovered in his previous school and he would receive medical help.

 

The only time I write about an overpowered character is when an element is gifted to me. I'm not fully attuned with the Harry Potter verse, so a powerful harry won't exactly exist. Any mental spells won't work when there's five personalities. Schizophrenia is not multiple personality disorder. It's a voice in your head rather than personalities that take over your body.

I don't even know what the fuck an order of merlin is, so with that ignorance, I wouldn't bother using it. Trophies for succeeding? Don't mind if I don't.

Maybe I should have elaborated further. They have no names before Hogwarts, but they take the names of the founders because each resembles each. Slytherin for manipulation. Gryffindor for bravery. Hufflepuff for wanting friendly faces. Ravenclaw for wanting knowledge. Harry will likely get Gryffindor because the sorting hat can only sort him based on him and not his personalities. The sorting hat was made by the founders, after all.

Other problems with a Harry Potter FF consist of characters being different, yet the plow is the same as the books. It's complete bullshit. I can easily change that. Along with the canon books by Rowling being complete shit. No offense to her, but she sold out in a time of despair. She went with what the crowd wanted to see. Had she not, her success wouldn't be in the billions. Intelligent woman, but her writing leaves much to be desired.

And then there are the stories where Harry is completely immune to the A/K. That's also bullshit. He got saved by his mom, yet was turned into a horcruxe. The second time, the spell erased the horcruxe. If he were to get hit by a third, he'd die. No more protections.

My Harry probably wouldn't have friends. Most people are spooked by mental disorders. Also, though I'm ignorant to the shitty series, I'm pretty sure wizards didn't have mental disorders, so that's why I said muggles. As there are potions to make things happen, there are probably potions to cure wizarding mental illnesses, but not likely to cure one which has festered in the mind of a child for many years.

It's also not hard to write a pairing between any character. Y'all tend to forget how relationships work. Like damn. Are you all so surprised by men and women of different ages being together? You haven't been in one if you actually believe a woman of three years senior to a man won't marry him. Likewise, both who are in school. If I'm not mistaken, there are no statutory laws against such a thing in the wizarding world.

A Harry/Fleur fiction is entirely plausible. Just takes a hand at it and not a prepubescent person thinking all things are possible, like a 14 year old having a dick bigger than a pornstar's. I hate reading shit like that. Realistic, my ass. Unless you're writing a story trying to murder all forms of reality, don't do that and expect welcoming arms from actual writers.

And don't get me started on the three unforgivables. Your brain can only take so much pain before you stop feeling it because it's too much to comprehend. The Crucio won't work after about two applications. The imperious won't work on someone with a multitude of personalities. Likewise, it's already been shown to not work on people with strong wills. Imagine a person with a stronger will to live than someone with a intent to damage. It's called adrenaline. Adrenaline cancels the Imperio out. Then there's the famed A/K. A spell that stops your heart and rips the soul from your body, but wait, it doesn't do that. Bellatrix hit Sirius with it, but Sirius didn't immediately die. It only stops your heart. So does cardiac arrest, yet people are resuscitated. There, you can survive that, too, but you need medical attention right away. Oh wait, wizards. Just have someone cast a resuscitation spell and you're all better.

God. A reducto is stronger than all three combined.

The only dangerous spell in Harry Potter is the Fiendfyre. Certainly can't be put out by a little conjured water. Drop a lake on it and it will be, though.

Anyway. This is a Harry/Fleur thread. I've already stated my spiel on that. Can easily happen. Done.

 

You are quite the visionary dude, I'm impressed. I'm sure you'll fix that shitty series with your fanfiction and your Harry.

 

Dude are you trolling or what?

And what names did they go by before that? 1,2,3 and 4?

Then why the fuck would you write about it, if it is so shitty?

No, only, you have a fourteen year old with a seventeen year old and then you are trying to make it last past highschool. Is it possible? sure. Is it likely to happen? No.

Yeah, you gonna have to give me source for that. Pretty sure it doesn't specify what spell in the book. Second if ithe AK only stops your heart then how the hell does it destroy the horcrux, which is a part of Voldemort's soul, in Harry.
I also don't see how the crucio stops after two applications. If that was true then A) explain the Longbottom's, and B) why the fuck would Voldemort use it repeatedly on anyone, if it stops hurting them after two uses.

I could go on but I think you get the point.

 

Not sure if that's sarcasm, but fuck it. I'll impress ya.

I've already rewritten Naruto and made a Bleach/Naruto fic. Both are not dead. I've also broken the SAOverse in one chapter. That story is not dead, either.

I can easily rewrite Harry Potter.

 

Dude, really? Come on. You don't even know the books. Sirius was only hit with the AK in the movies. In the books he was hit with a stunner and fell through the Veil. The AK kills by separating the soul from the body.

 

Yeah, I just took a glance at your most recently updated story. You could definitely write Harry Potter, but it would be a cliche-ridden, awfully written mess. Your dialogue was absolutely robotic and cringe-worthy. But don't worry. If you are so delusional to think you're such a writer, I doubt there is any reasoning with you.

 

Insult central. You rec'd the absolute worst stories regarding any pairing, let alone Harry/Fleur. If you believed them to be paragons of high quality, you're more deluded than people believing Clinton would be a better choice than Trump. They're equal in regards to complete stupidity. I mean, your own post in reply to mine shows just how "remarkable" your English is. Fucking exceptional.

But of course, I am better than most FanFiction authors. I mean, since you prefer English written by non-English speakers, then that's your problem. Means you're so in tune with mentally-challenged writers, grammar and spelling eludes you. God. You'd find Waldo before you find a story not written by a twelve-year-old. Oh, wait. You did. You couldn't understand basic English. That is a problem, indeed.

Ah, well. Can't win 'em all. Likewise, can't prove proper English exists to a minor. Go back to taking hundreds of pictures for Instagram and Twitter, then deleting them all because they're not "good enough" to be posted.

Funny thing, though. darklordpotter has a website. This one. Too bad his writing is sub-par at best.

Also, you haven't a clue what cliche means, so don't use the term.

 

Which story was this?

Where did I ever say that?

Yes, and my perfect score on the English and Reading sections of ACT confirms that stance you took!

Now, what are you going on about here? I didn't insult your grammar; I simply said your dialogue sucks and makes me cringe.

Are you mad? It seems like it.

What the fuck does this even mean?

Cliché: anything that has become trite or commonplace through overuse.

I'm saying that the ideas you expressed in your stories are clichés.
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Alright. I might not have ever learned me what this here 'cliche' means, but there's a term I do know: fuck off.

Don't know if you're trolling, don't much care either. There's little room and less patience for shitcunts here.

 

-.- I just couldn't be bothered to actually add the accent. And this dude here flips shit about it.

 

All offense is meant to be taken. Come back when you learn how to write in English and not the fabled language, Gibberish.

Well, Sey. This wasn't meant for you. Meant for the other guy, but this thread updated faster than my email, so I clicked his post and yours is the one I replied to.

 

I didn't write in Gibberish. In fact, my entire post is grammatically sound except for my sentence starting with "but" which was done on purpose. Do you want me to go through your first post? Beyond the fact that it makes literally no logical sense at all, it is riddled with grammatical errors. Get off your fucking high horse and shut the fuck up. You are not a fucking linguist. Just look at your lastest fucking post.

That is not even a sentence. The first clause -- which should be an independent clause -- has no subject.

You are the last person that should be talking about grammar. Your savior Donald Trump is the most incoherent idiot ever. I guess that trait is shared with his supporters.

 

You have to be the most ignorant person alive. Did your mind not comprehend my ragging down on Clinton AND Trump? And you can't talk about grammar when you use three spaces and two hyphens as a substitute for a comma.

 

It's called an em dash. However, shouldn't you, Mr. "One of few who knows how to write.", already know that?

 

Now I have seen why you think my dialogue is wrong. Your dumbass puts the comma OUTSIDE the quotation marks. Holy shit, man. Did a blind man teach you how to write?

When you quote someone, the quote needs not a period before the quotation, then a comma after. Put a comma before the second quotation, numskull.

 

Yeah, no. It's called a bracketing comma. This dude here says that the quotation mark should be inside it. I guess you're smarter regarding English than a Linguistics professor.

Dialogue has the comma inside. This is NOT dialogue.

Getting to the main point of this post, I have one thing to say: fuck off. You clearly don't know anything about English. The entirety of Britain uses the comma outside the quotes in this instance. Wake up. America isn't the only place that speaks English in the world.

I also didn't say your dialogue was wrong. I said it was bad. There is a huge distinction. Wrong means there is something that is glaringly opposing truth or standards. Bad means that the characters lack a consist voice, have weak lines, and speak with unnatural diction and patterns.

Honestly man, what the fuck do you want? You come in here and post one of the most asinine ideas I've ever seen. Next, you claim, in a roundabout way, you are a better writer than JK Rowling (which you clearly aren't), and you claim that you could write Harry Potter (which you can't). Then, you pull some strawman argumentative tactics, and you rant about other people's grammar when, in your first post, you displayed a clear inability to even fucking capitalize.

Let's take a look.

1. You are not attuned with something. That is not a correct phrase. You are attuned to something.
2. Hyphens. Use them.
3. Capitalizing. It's really hard to do.
4. There's = there is. Five is a plural noun. Therefore, there is is grammatical wrong.

You are so egotistic it's honestly amazing. How about you go back to your little crappy stories with 23 follows, 38 follows, and 4 follows. While I will readily admit that fanfiction following statistics aren't great measures of quality, they usually do say something about a piece's work. I garnered more follows for one of my stories when I was 13. It's kind of sad, to be frank. The best part of the whole argument you made before is that you think you're some literary savant. Fucking fanfiction.net doesn't think your ideas have any merit to them. That's really fucking sad.

 

This argument is one of the more retarded I've seen. No one gives a fuck about your grammar. I'm with TWT, Mirrored Shadow I think your Slytherin alternate personality is showing (what the fuck is this shit, I'm genuinely not sure if you were serious with it) because you sound like a raging cunt. Seyllian, stop arguing with him - what's the old saying, don't argue with an idiot because they'll drag you down to their level and beat you with experience?

This is the Harry/Fleur thread, and I'm sick of seeing new posts in here and then it turns out to be this shit. So for anyone else in the same shoes, I went and looked through the most reviewed Harry/Fleur fics posted in the last six months and picked this out, so that at least one of the last however-fucking-many posts will be slightly on topic.

A Nighttime Stroll is a brilliant piece of smut fic that I briefly skimmed through. The first line of very natural sounding dialogue is "Oh, Harry. Your cock is wrecking my pussy. Fuck me harder." You might be surprised to know, things only get better from there. Technically this fic isn't just Harry/Fleur, it's also Harry/Tonks - and if I know my smut, I'm willing to bet it's going to be a little Fleur/Tonks too. Okay this is pretty terrible, I'll admit it. Anyone have links to some good Fleur smut fics? Taure has a list somewhere IIRC.