Title: Harry Potter and the Circle's End
Author: madscientist
Rating: NC17
Genre: Action/Adventure/Drama
Pairing: H/HR
Summary: Picks up two weeks after the events of HBP. However reluctantly Harry has inherited a quest that will determine the fate of the world. Rating upped for later chapters COMPLETE!
Link: http://fanfiction.portkey.org/story/4941
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In the top 5 year 7 fics I have read to date. Combats are well written, and final battle scene is amazing. Very long, good character development, great Ginny bashing, and last, but not least, Completed.

 

Hmmm...too bad it's a pairing I can't stand, or I'd want to read it.

Richard.

 

Personally l rather like H/Hr, atleast a lot more than H/G. But even after only one chapter it's run headfirst into an annoying cliché. Female X acting as the voice of reason, friendship and comfort while poor Harry is back at the Dursleys angsting. This goes for any pairing by the way with be it an unexpected visit given no real excuse nor the sudden beginning of soul-filled letters.
Romance being introduced this early and this obviously in what's supposed to be a post HBP's.. bad.

By the way, why post if you don't have anything constructive to say about the fic at all?

 

lol! Now it definitely sounds not worth the read...of course Harry would do that with Granger...probably demanded it out of him...I'm guessing this is Canon Harry here in this story, eh?

Richard.

 

I would add that this story contains (from what I remember when I was reading it):
- super!Harry
- super!Hermione
- mind talks between Harry and Hermione (that's author trademark)
- Harry, Hermione, Ron knowing quite advance spells - and we don't get explanation how they know it

Spoiler

alive Dumbledore - if you have read his "Lions of Gryffindor" universe stories you will know - especially, when you read about a burst of fire, and single golden-red feather falling down to the ground

(that's also author trademark) - I think that was it - I stopped reading it quite some time ago, and never got to start reading it again.

 

There are inconcistencies in regards to plot and plausability. Especially some moral issues I don't agree with.

All slytherins post 5th year with exception to Greengrass are apparently death eaters or future death eaters while everyone below is... nothing. This is a typical of how the authors portrays people in the story as black or white. This side or that. Everything reeks of a fairytale story. I mean instead of spending time hunting horcruxes and training they go back to Hogwarts to become headboy/girl, spend time on homework and lessons! This fic also fails to portray devious slytherins. Seems like they're simple thugs who's only reason for existance is to antagonize Harry while not presenting any credible threat.

Moreover, once Draco's captured and interrogated he's let loose with the excuse that he'll lead them to Snape immediately after and thus to the rest but so far seemingly months after this side-plot has been abandoned.
Furthermore during the interrogation exactly who's a death eater's exposed yet nothing is being done about it. No threat assessment is being made nor any safety precautions made in case they'd suddenly go on a slaughter spree.

Besides this the romance is so-so. Portkey have many H/Hr, R/L and D/G shippers who seem to warp the characters involved to fit into one big happy friendship of couples much like the weasley infestation in canon. The fluff between H/Hr reach critical levels too. Even though I ship them myself this is a bit much.

On the bright side, grammar is good!

3/5 because it could be that much worse.

 

Yeah, I'm H/Hr Global Fan #1 but Portkey is a place of douchebaggery where stories parallel OBHWF stories in their fluffiness and implausibility concerning character traits, habits and decisions.

I don't like a canonesque approach to Harry's character that begins with the romance in the story it follows being thrown out in the first few pages with little to no sense being made.

And no offense, the Amorentia/Love Potion thing is bullshit. It'd be much more rewarding to see an appropriately written Ginny than some evil mastermind who wants to have Harry's oats sewn in her for money and power.

Jesus.

 

Oooh, I love the swagger in your posting when you use words like "douchebaggery."

And using DLP to express distate for a story with OOC traits and non-canon "implausibility" is charmingly ironic.

 

That would be the important part. When someone so obviously is trying to write canon, writes two or three paragraphs and then disregards that because he's too anxious to have people fawning over each other.

When one is writing AU, one tends to quickly point out that the jig is up, canon is out the window and you aren't retching in a trashcan as all of a sudden, a character that has little screen time is raping the protagonist. Albeit, there are bad AUs -- 99% of fanfiction is trash, but that doesn't excuse how off base you are.

Neg-repped (first one since it's been reinstated, oddly) for being a dumbass.

 

I'm feeling a bit snarky this morning so please take this lightly, but isn't that kinda the point of this kind of story? Ship-based stories are by their nature "happily ever after" type stories. JK's own writing, whatever else you may think of it, is definitely in the "fairy tale" category. When I read this kind of story, I am looking for a fairy tale in the Action or Romance section. When I am in a darker mood, I go looking in the dark arts folder for a link.

Thank you, however, for your comments. I will happily go looking for fics you have recommended to see what you consider to be quality. That is one of the great things about this forum, everyone can have their own definition of quality, and when you find someone else who's taste you agree with you can simply hunt down all their rec's.

Happy reading.
-Telmah

 

Well, I'm thirty chapters into this fic and I've got a couple of problems with it. first, the constant use of 'baby' as a term of endearment. For some reason that term bugs me a great deal. It seems... disrespectful. I don't know where exactly I'm coming from with this one, just that I don't like it.

Next on the list of things which bug me is Hermione crying all the time. I'm sure she's female and is more freely expressive with her emotions but everytime she is crying over something stupid. And not just a sniffle, she's sobbing into Harry's shirts.

Lastly, the combat scenes are more or less glossed over and there are a lot of parts where you'll see stuff like "Harry MOVED" or "and then Hermione MOVED" I'm sure once, maybe even twice is good for effect but every damned time a combat scene starts... It's just bloody annoying.

That and everyone who isn't the Golden Trio or one of their close associates are pretty damned useless. Seems kinda fishy to me.

3/5

 

I remember that I've read it some time ago...

There were quite a few innovative ideas, at least as it was posted, as well as some old ones from his "Lions of Griffindor" verse. As Virail said, this MOVING thing gets overused. Not to mention the whole mind link speak or super!harry and super!hermione. It gets rather boring when you have Dumbledore, Voldemort and our wonder couple and than no one to match them...

The story is well written and actually quite a good one. I'd give it 4, however it's too much of a fairytale, therefore:

3/5