Title: Harry Potter And The Elemental's Power
Author: raul-1331
Rating: K+
Genre: Adventure/Humor
DLP Category: Humor/Independent
Pairing: None yet
Status: WIP
Summary: Harry is an elemental though he doesn't know it. Follow his years in Hogwart's as he grows and learns. He gets elder wand from Ollivander. Slytherin harry, Ron bashing, good but manupilative Dumbledore AU. My story is much better than the summary. REVIEW!
Link:Harry Potter And The Elementals Power

While the summary is kinda crappy, the story is pretty good. I like the way Harry is characterized in this as a smart-ass and the rivalry between him and the OC, who so far isn't a Mary-sue. That and the interaction with the rest of Hogwarts. Snape is more of a background character and Ron is just a prat.

4/5

 

Yep, its OK. Far from the best and there were some things that happened that annoyed me.

3.5/5


Last chapter annoyed me. I hope the author breezes through 2nd year and we ddon't have to deal with Ginny too much

 

I think the level of fics coming out of WBA has spoiled me and I just cant seem to enjoy this one. 3/5.

 

Well, I read to chapter 4, and I couldn't bring myself to continue. I'm a lover of super!harry stories, can't help it, but this shit is retarded.

With the OC, Harry somehow remaining a naive little boy despite the fact that he'd been forcefully manipulating his relatives for years on end, and the fact that this super!harry is poorly explained, I really just can't see the appeal.

Lillian? Really? That's the best you could come up with Mr. Author? I wonder who Harry's love interest is going to be? Then we find out that Harry is the first wizard ever to be able to utilize his magic wandlessly. What the fuck? I'm not even going to bother with that shit.

Even with those glaring problems, I may have still continued reading it if it weren't for the most startling fact. The writer has the grammatical finesse of a fucking chimp. The story doesn't have flow, it doesn't even bother with imagery, and overall the story is shit.

2/5 Simply because there's a super!harry.

Veritas

 

*shudder*

Gave up halfway into the first chapter because of grammatical issues. Someone get the man a beta.

 

I read to the part in the first chapter where Dumbledore tells Mcgonagal that the Potters are dead before stopping. It felt like I was rereading the opening of PS without any of the stuff that made it good.

 

Ugh...there's no more to be said, I think; Veritas has done a pretty good job. Let's kill this story and be done with it.

 

That was supposed to be, I believe an attempt at humour. It is pretty boring. Everything about this Harry seems OOC from chapter 2. Blaise seem's to have gone into the background. The trio seem's to have been re-formed with Lillian as Harry's replacement.

So far a boring read, I'll rate it later when I'm finished.

Poor: 2/5

 

Not worthy of DLP, but I still give it 3.5/5 for personal enjoyment.

 

Candidate for Worst Summary thread?

Anyway, Lillian? Come on, that's even more Freudian the Ginny.

Fuck it, I'm not even going to bother.

 

The story was marginally bearable until the Marry Sue super-elemental best friend came in. Cliched and stupid.

 

I barely got past the first scene break before I stopped reading.

1/5 because the author is an idiot.

 

Strike one.

Knowledge Is Power thievery - which, in and of itself, is a whole 'nother level of fail, so We'll call this a foul ball.

Cliche-whore. We'll call this foul ball #2.

Stating that your story is better than the summary normally means that it isn't: it wasn't - Strike Two. Review whoring makes Strike Three.

 

I'm with Blaise on this one. The story is made out of insta-fail mechanics and annoyances.

 

Well this fic started well but is losing its touch now. But giving it benefit of doubt i give it 3/5

 

Sometimes, just by looking at the summary you know that the story isn't going to worth the time you will spent on it. But, because you stillhave some hope you give it a try... And this hope his sadly crushed.

Well everything has already been said.

2/5

And rahulsinghpune (what a mouthful!!), go introduce yourself.

 

Well that says it all I think...but I suppose I'll stick with it for a bit - see how the author does in later chapters.

 

I made it to the end of chapter1. the only difference between it and cannon was a brief glimpse at a pair of OC's, and Dumbledore binding harry's magic.

I'm less than impressed so far.

Edit: ya.... I don't thinks so. For as far as I got I'll give it a 2. just too much too fast.

 

What annoys me the most in this story, is that Harry and his 'friend' act like two sugar-high anime super cuties.

 

I've read the latest chapter and found that scenes and words of canon harry have been copied and used for the harry in this story...not sure what to make of this...

2/5