Title: Moon Magic
Author: litgal
Rating: Adult
Genre: Crossover, adventure, romance
DLP category: Dark, alternate
Pairing: F/S
Status: complete
Summary: Crossover with Buffy the Vampire Slayer. Moon magic pulls Riley into a whole new world, and now it's Faith to the rescue, but when Faith is forced to work with Severus Snape, they discover they have more than they might think in common.

Link: http://www.tthfanfic.org/Story-14293/litgal+Moon+Magic.htm


First, it isn't Harry-centered. In fact, I'm pretty sure he isn't even mentioned anywhere in the story. Second, romance isn't really the word I like to use here: mutual respect, passion, and a certain amount of trust work better.

That said, I've read this book several times, and I've always enjoyed it.

Litgal has taken three secondary characters, characters who are usually little more than cardboard cutouts, and given them strength and skills. To actually fulfil their canon roles, Faith, Riley, and Snape all must be intelligent, savvy, and ruthless: Special Forces calculating, Slayer tough, double-agent perceptive. They are all survivors. "Moon Magic" is about difficult choices and intelligent discipline. These people are heroes, but they aren't "nice." Each keeps track of their goal, and each accepts the less-savory aspects necessary to achieving the purpose.

The mood is dark and frightening. The imagery works very well. The characterizations of the people around the main characters fit beautifully with canon. There are very few grammar issues.

 

I can't say anything about the story, since I haven't even read the first chapter, but from the summary itself, I do think that maybe you posted this on the wrong forums...

 

I am so tired of seeing this.

She's been here since November 2006. She's posted quite a few stories in FR. She's a fairly active poster in the Library generally speaking.

So. Whatever it is she posted, I'm fairly certain she knew what she was doing.

Next.

 

Hey, I'm just saying.

As I said, I haven't read the story, and I was going to try, since I do believe that you can't have a solid opinion on most written works if you haven't, at least, tried to read them.

But you know as well as I do, that this won't be welcomed here, and most people only will see "Snape" and won't even read it. That's why I said what I said, so go bite someone else.

 

So most people only need to ignore the story as no one is forcing it upon them, and if they absolutely want to comment, they'll just have to go to the trouble of trying it out. If only for the first (quite short) chapter.

I know, it sounds so difficult.

But since we're talking about it, why would Banner have posted "in the wrong forums"?

"From the summary", you said -- that implies three possible reasons.

1) Because it's not Harry-centric.

I'll just refer you to the countless times we've repeated that, while Harry-centric stories made up the majority of the Library, it was not a requirement.

2) Because it features Snape as a main character.

I imagine that's the main problem people would have about this story. Two situations here: either you're not interested in reading about Snape, or you don't mind. If it's the first, then feel free to ignore this thread. If it's the latter, then feel free to flame this thread if Snape is badly written/stupidly redeemed.

Or, people could argue that DLP absolutely vomits any story with Snape as a main character. I tend to think that, as long as the story is good -- scratch that: as long as it is excellent -- having Snape as a main character isn't an issue. When well done, Snape is more interesting than Malfoy.

3) Because it's a Buffy crossover.

We have accepted insane crossovers here.

You are a very meaty person.

*bites again*

 

It was alright for a non Harry centered story, but I quickly lost interest. I was never fond of Snape or Riley so their involvement in the story gained no points, but then again the good portrayal's of their character kept it from losing anything as well.

I like Faith, in fact I like her better then Buffy, so her inclusion was nice and I like to see that a Slayer's strength doesn't just lay in their reflexes, strength, and endurance, but also gives them a resistance to magic in general, and I liked that the author didn't make the BTVS or HP more powerful and instead balanced them out quiet well.

Over all despite losing interest in it I give it a 4/5 for good spelling and good characterization. It lost a star because it couldn't keep me interested and there weren't enough of the character's I like to see in it.

Now stop all the Bawwwing please before somebody starts something the mods will get irritated at...

 

I read it all. Yeah, I did. A crossover. o_o

The scenes just don't flow that well, for me. It's because I never did go around to watching BtVS, I think. All I know of Faith id from fanfics, and her personality jars me a little. On a whole, there's barely any plot, just a bunch of scenes patched together. "Things happen". There's no theme that binds the scenes together. No common something that the author tries to portray. Just... people jump to another reality, things happen, people go back.

Still, good grammar and spelling, even though the author really needs to learn the use of commas in dialogues in the first chapter.

3.5/5, rounded down to 3. Recycle bin certainly, I would think, though.

 

There is nothing wrong with a good Snape story, you guys should check this story out.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4026081/1/The_Wrath_of_the_Half_Blood_Prince

Let me know if you still hate the Cockroach...who am I kidding you still hate him, but the story just makes him look hilariously pathetic, but very realistic and in tune to his natural comedic self..a very repressed comedic self.

 

Was I the only one who saw the title and thought it was a Sailor Moon cross?

 

Okay, Banner. I've been on a crossover kick lately, and I haven't really followed Buffy much, but I trust you, so I'm willing to give this a try. I'm at least slightly familiar with the characters in question... *goes off to read*

 

That is perhaps the only good Snape-Centric story in the internet, though the writer has an unhealthy liking for Remus/Tonks.

 

Hashasheen I'll be honest with you, that is true in so many levels. Can you believe there are over 30,000 Snape fics, and I haven't read one that comes close to this one?

Bloody hell his idea is so straightforward that it makes some of the other Snape writers look foolish for writting a fic that overcomplicates his character.

Snape being poorer than a farmere was hilaroius though, I lol on that one.

 

Since I trust the members on this site, I trudged all the way to chapter five despite my grievances. Having done so, I can say that I don't find this fic at all enjoyable as of chapter five. I don't particularly like the characterization, and it hasn't really gone anywhere yet. Furthermore, it seems fairly biased towards the Buffy characters, which I suppose is to be expected.

Has anyone read further? If they have, does it get better?

I won't vote yet, but at this point 2/5.

Edit: Meh. I read a little further, and it got a little better. Maybe a 3/5.

Edit: Scratch that. 2/5.

 

.... Well I hit chapter 9 of 20, and it was decent, but, well...

These were violated, the first one is occasionally ignorable if you have an especially tallented writer, but the second, while expectable considering it's the named pairing... -shudders- The thought of snape aroused completely killed the story for me. Well written, good plot, but not my cup of tea. Mid to high 4ish for the first eight chapters, but 3/5 over all Chapter 9 killed it for me.

 

I can't begin to describe how terrible this is from concept to execution. I know I go against the majority of the opinion in this thread by saying that I think everything about this is completely dire, but there you go. Nothing about it is endearing.

 

I shudder to think how many of those are slash.