Title: His Destiny
Author: Iolanthe
Rating: PG-13
Genre: Action/Adventure/Romance
DLP Category: Action
Pairing: Teddy Lupin/OC
Status: WIP
Summary: It was his destiny. He was supposed to be the hero, the one to give peace to the entire wizarding world. There was just one problem. Harry Potter was dead, leaving Lord Voldemort as the victor. Teddy Lupin didn’t know what or when it all went wrong. But as the last remaining Order member, Harry’s destiny became his. Can Teddy do what Harry could not?
Link: http://www.patronuscharm.net/s/255/1/

 

Oh, this won't end well.

 

Meh.

You're going to get criticized by many for killing Harry and making Teddy the hero. I'm criticizing you for posting this story in For Review when you should have posted in the Work by Author section.

The story needs a beta. You like to type "Madam Keren" a lot. Seven times in the first seven paragraphs of Chapter 2 (your titled Chapter 1)? Geez. There are other things, e.g., "staid" instead of "stayed" and several other grammar issues.

Fortunately, you understand. You admit your need for a beta reader in your Patronus Charm profile where you ask those interested to email you. That being said, submitting early drafts of the first couple chapters for consideration as your first post here on DLP will impress few people.

It's too early to give it an official rating, but it currently deserves 1 star because of grammar issues and a 7-year-old gun wielding Teddy Lupin.

 

No.

Listen, you don't post fics on PatronusCharm because it (rightfully) didn't attract any attention on FFnet.

1/5

 

Great .gif Demons =)

 

Hahaha, I watched that thing repeat like four times, and laughed out loud every time--it's so perfect. What is that from?

 

best show evar.

 

Terrible would be the kindest thing I could say about this story.

 

So amazingly, a boy named Teddy is going to save us all.

Right.

I read the first chapter and nearly died from the terrible premise and writing.

 

Who's going to be alive to teach Teddy to do magic?