Category: Harry Potter
DLP Category: Independent Harry
Title: Message in a Bottle
Genre: Drama/Romance
Rating: Fiction Rated: M
Summary: A life of regret and an endless, devastating war causes Harry to do the unthinkable... meddle with time. Can he rewrite the past or will his efforts be in vain? HHr Warning! -abuse alert-

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3256344/1/Message_in_a_Bottle

Involves a 100+ Year Old Harry sending an autobiography of his life to his 16 year old self. But he messes up and sends it to his 7 or 8 year old self.

Harry becomes an instrument of the Greater Good and takes matters into his own hands to prevent the future that happened to the Harry in the book. Which means he kills DE's that got off on imperious excuse, Lucius being one of them. Though he does seem a little too mature, and too powerful. After only a year or so of studying magic.

There also seems to be a karma system going on in that for every bad deed he does, he does a good deed. Like right after he kills Lucius, he saves Luna's mother from dieing after her accident.

Hermione is written to prominence in Harry's autobiography, but that can be taken as Harry remembering her fondly and not taking in her bad points. But seeing as how Harry is only eight in the story, the present Hermione you don't see much of. And when you do she's not very impressive (head gear). You see the reason why she's so bossy as thought by the author.

An OC Ghost is Harry's only friend in the future, and that OC still living takes care of Harry after he gets out of the Dursley's.

Slow moving plot in that there's 17 chapters but Harry's only just turned 9 now. But it seems that by the time they get into first year Harry will be able to kill Voldemort. He's been very busy. It's hard to see how this story is going to end. But it is good.

5/5

 

I gave it a chance, but it has just too many strikes against it.

Physically abused Harry, Harmonian Weasley hate cliches (I know most of DLP hates the Weasleys too, and I myself am not a huge fan, but most of you should know what I'm talking about). Not to mention time meddling that conflicts with the canon view of time, AND the author claiming that after some war, "the British magical population numbered in the low thousands". Hello? It was in the low thousands to begin with!

2/5

EDIT: Oh, and I forgot the Mary Sue that heals him and 'guides' him.

 

I have to agree. I read most of it (skipped some parts). The story is very slow, and boring in most places. Would have been better if Harry wasn't so...Canonish, I guess. Sure the kid's smart, but he's letting people walk all over him at times. And they're moving to different houses so much, it makes it sound like they're being found so easily. Fidelius charm anyone?

 

Do not like.

While an unoriginal concept does not alone condemn story, in this case it certainly hurts. What really kills this story is the pacing. We've now had 70,000 words of pre-Hogwarts Harry. Not only do I not care about pre-Hogwarts Harry (I can't think of a single little kid fic I enjoyed), but it's like a glaring neon sign that this story will not be complete.

2/5

 

It is a story searching for a plot, we having a book that tells us all the bad things to come, now we either have to start bumping into the butterfly effect or some other form of conflict.

Suffers from slow pacing.

Other wise a fine waste of time.

 

For me, this story is a strange combination of lulz, cringe-worthy-moments and a few good elements. In spite of the bad elements, I still follow this story by checking for updates once every six months.

I'll just point out a few of the glaring points in the story:

Lulz: The war of the sexes happened after the war of purity. Voldemort is reborn as a female and rallies all the oppressed females in the wizarding world to his cause. They 'trick' men in battle by showing off their assets. Wizarding Britain is doomed.

I fuckin lol'd.

Cringe-worthy-moments: 8-year old Assasin!Harry. Fear him, for he dresses up as a little girl and kills Lucius Malfoy.Its one thing for a Harry who traveled back in time to be an assasin, quite another for a normal 8-year old to kill a dog much less kill people.

Genius!Hermione who develops simple time dilation spells and 'creative' spells. Half baked mathematics and quantumn physics banter between Hermione and her mother. Hermione Neutron anyone ?

Good elements : Solid writing style which has a good flow to it. While the slow pacing does remove some points from the fic, it still manages to capture the intrest of the reader. Characterisation is better than average.

Like I said before it still has me intrested.

3/5 from me

 

I followed this for a bit, but I've become bored with it. It's just dragging on forever! I like the fact that Harry gets rescued from the Dursleys, but that's just about the only redeeming quality. 2/5

 

I've been following this story. It's quite well written, with fleshed out OC, an intriguing spirit thingee who bonds with Harry, and an early Sirius escape (I think it's clear that Sirius is tapped to be the romantic interest of the OC). However, a combination of slow pacing and slow updates makes it questionable in my mind whether it will get far in its retelling.

As noted, a child!Harry who kills with impunity is a little weird. There are several good ideas, though, as well as lulzy moments.

Spoiler

Harry open mouth kissing Neville's mum to revive her Cinderella-style was hilarious. Also, fat!Hermione is a different take.

I'll keep reading as updates arrive, but until a bit more happens to balance the effort, it probably will live in limbo between Library and Recycling Bin for me. 3/5, but vote withheld for at least a couple more chapters. (He's entering Hogwarts soon, so things should hopefully pick up).

 

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If i were the type to rate without reading the story, the description would make it an instant 1/5.