Title: The cycle begins again
Author: Zeoniu Zekial Kal Leos(A.K.A. myself)
Rating: T
Genre: General/Drama.
DLP Category: Time travel.
Pairing: None.
Status: Complete.
Summary: For a hundred years, Harry Potter has fought Lord Voldemort, and lost it all. Every time he goes back to try again, drawn into an eternal cycle. Will he ever succeed?
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4893316/1/The_cycle_begins_again

A oneshot prologue of sorts to another story. The ending of the latest cycle, the results of that final battle, and what Harry does thereafter.

 

Wastelands of Time anyone?

 

OP needs to get someone to fix his title before I'll try to read it.

 

You wrote the twist of your own-shot in your summary.

No/5.

 

No, just no.

If, as OP (I wont try to spell that stupid name) said, this is a prologue to another story, I can quite honestly say that I don't want to read it and waste even more of my time. The premise is silly in itself.

Spoiler

Harry has returned in time and time again after killing Voldemort because every time he has to use an ultra powerful spell that takes the soul of everyone in a half mile radius and he wants to try once again without using it. So he chants and finally says something which am sure will be in this years most terrible spell competition.

No thanks...... 1/5 since it is the lowest allowed.

 

You're the dumbass who's trying to fuck up the spell list.

Here's a primer on the OP's contribution to the DLP spell library...

How exactly would one go about practising these spells, hmmm? I dunno about you, but I can't imagine many wizards have a pile of spare wands lying around. And with that second spell, the uber-clever "soul erasure" one, who the hell is going to teach it to you? If he or she is within a half-mile of you, and you happen to perform the spell, oops, the teacher gets his or her soul torn apart.

I'm all for you writing a story wherein Harry fights Voldemort for a hundred years, but for fuck's sake, think through some of these spell effects you're concocting before trying to go all Rob Zombie with your bad self.

 

OP: Logic does not seem to be a strong point. Neither does writing. GTFO.

Story: 1/5

 

I'm glad to have gotten some feedback on this finally. Harsh, but needed. The points raised are fair ones and it gives me enough to realize its' better to can the prologue and the story following it, work out something better, and try again.

So, thank you.

 

^This^

LURK MOAR/5