Title: Sympathy for the Devil
Author: Lamenti Eternum
Rating: M
Genre: Mystery/ Supernatural
DLP Category: Dark Arts
Pairing: No real pairing
Status: Work in Progress
Summary: "Abandoned in Muggle London, Harry has no idea that he's about to set off on the biggest adventure he's ever had. Slowly giving into temptation, Harry falls to an evil like nothing you've ever seen. And what does the cat have to do with it?"

This is a 10.000+ words long story, that could be treated as a one-shot (no other chapters so far). It is well written and very entertaing,
not 5/5, but a solid 3.5 to 4/5.

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5051265/1/Sympathy_for_the_Devil

 

Boring, out of character first person drivel with frequent bouts of utter and total fail.

The one bright side is that there's only one chapter- though even that is countered by the length.

2/5

 

This barely made any sense.

Harry meets and has sex with 2 girls, at 14.

He is suddenly older and has a cat

Everyone starts to die

He goes crazy.

Theres practically nothing relating to HP verse for a large portion of the fic. 1/5

 

I would not have minded so much if this was a lemon and he got the two girls, but this is just annoying.

 

There was some imagery that would have been great if they were more vivid, namely the blimp and the scribblings in the Dursley's house. Too little description in the setting to really let them take flight.

In the end, I don't appreciate the pieces of imagery, I'm just disappointed I can't use it myself since LE's already taken them.

The suggestion in the fic was that the random stuff was the result of the Priori Incantatem, but there wasn't enough information to make it seem like a real reason. The vagueness just makes it seem like a MacGuffin and a feeble excuse to have the psychobabble and the bizarre shit. That's the wrong approach to 'Mystery' in my opinion.

2/5 There might be something glittering under the coating of fail, but I don't care to find it.

 

Heh, the randomness was the result of the cat, as those who read "Master and Margarita" could say.

3/5

 

The key difference, is that Bulgakov was an awesome writer that pulled his ideas off well- masterfully even.

That the idea came from a great novel does nothing to change the flaws in this story.

 

No, just no 1/5