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The Unexpected Result of... by NoOneIntresting - M

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  1. Vesvius

    Vesvius High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    Title: The Unexpected Result of...
    Author: NoOneIntresting
    Rating: M
    Genre: Erotica
    DLP Category: The Restricted Section
    Pairing: Main is Harry/Gabrielle, but almost every chapter has Harry screwing someone else
    Status: Work in Progress
    Summary: After the second task, Harry wakes up to find a surprise.
    Link: Ficwad

    I noticed nothing's been added to the Restricted Section lately, so I figured I'd throw some smut out. It has some plot, mostly with Harry getting powers from a Veela Bond, but otherwise not much.

    Yes, Veela Bond, but despite that, it's pretty good.

    So far, we've had Harry/Gabrielle, Harry/OC, Harry/Chasers, Harry/Other OC, Harry/Susan, and Harry/Susan/Hannah. During almost all of those encounters, Gabrielle is there, and I just didn't feel like writing her name five more times.

    Warning: Gabrielle has not been aged in this.

    I'm giving it a 4/5.
     
  2. wolf550e

    wolf550e High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    The rating for this isn't M or even NC-17, it's "get your IP on the sex offender watch list".

    FAIL. Sex with 8 year old girl, rape fantasy with same 8 year old girl, and lots of 12 year old girls, a harem fantasy fic with Harry becoming a male Veela dom.

    If you liked it, you may like this too:
    http://www.hpfanficarchive.com/viewstory.php?sid=87

    But don't post it on DLP.

    edit: I've lurked here for a long time but I don't decide anything. If this is considered DLP material, sure, go ahead.
     
    Last edited: Jun 15, 2009
  3. Vesvius

    Vesvius High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    vlad Banned ~ Prestige ~

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    Sesc's German though. If he wasn't occupying himself writing dark twisted Harry/preteen, who knows what he'd get up to instead :awesome.
     
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  6. reggin

    reggin Filthy Half-Breed DLP Supporter

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    Hi the is Chris Hansen from NBC Dateline News... Why don't you go have a seat? ... over there.
     
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  8. Stormey

    Stormey Groundskeeper

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    If you like reading stories where 3-4 year olds have sex, then sure, read on.

    0/5
    We really do need a rating of 0 stars for this crap.
     
  9. Seratin

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    Really? You're giving me honest to goodness permission? You're the best, Stormy.
     
  10. Oz

    Oz For Zombie. Moderator DLP Supporter

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    ... this can't possibly be the fic I think it is...

    /me clicks

    OH SHI- IT IS THE FIC I THINK IT IS! INB4 TINN! 8D

    Shitstorm/5

    EDIT for lulz:

    (Sesc) Brand new, and not from me
    (Sesc) “’Arry,” she said as she ground herself all the way up to the very tip of his cock, forcing it to lie flat against his stomach, before grinding all way back down. This time, Harry’s eyes did roll back in his head. “I am Veela. We are sexual creatures. I was born knowing about sex....
    (Sesc) Most Veela ’oo live in ze Veela colonies ’ave ’ad sex before they are more zan a few years old. Ze only reason I am ze virgin is because I did not grow up around ozzer Veela. Zere was no one my age zat knew about sex.”
    (Sesc) See?
    (%Sir_Xiph) :|
    (Krogan) ...
    (%Tinn) Gabrielle?
    (Sesc) See?
    (Sesc) Yah.
    (Sesc) After the lake
    (Anya) ...
    (%Sir_Xiph) lol Sesc >_>
    • Anya cries
    (%Sir_Xiph) you dropped to rd
    —› kick: (Sesc) was kicked by (Tinn) (WHAT THE FUCK YOU FILTHY CREATURE, LINK BUT DON'T COPY/PASTE)
    —› join: (Sesc) (enigma_@dlp-FACC.dip.t-dialin.net)
    (%Sir_Xiph) and I remain, seemingly as fuckin always, at .
    (Sesc) “Use me, ’Arry,” she continued without so much as a pause. “Fuck me until neizer of us can move and zen let me sleep wiz you still inside me. Fuck me! Use me! ’Ave sex wiz me! Make love to me! Rape me!”
    (Krogan) Tinn it came back make it go away
    (%Sir_Xiph) neizer?
    (%Sir_Xiph) haha
    (%Tinn) And raping the French accent as well?
    (Anya) He is the Beast.
    —› kick: (Sesc) was kicked by (Tinn) (Do that again and die.)
    —› join: (Sesc) (enigma_@dlp-FACC.dip.t-dialin.net)
    (Sesc) ...
    (Sesc) I wasn't even finished :(
    (Sesc) Here's the best part
    (%Tinn) Hence the warning.
    (Sesc) He reached down and caressed her chest, stroking the place where, one day, her left breast would be. He seized her nipple and twisted it, pulling it before releasing it and letting it snap back. Gabrielle cried out in shock and pleasure as she orgasmed once again from the pain.
    —› mode: (Tinn) sets mode (+b *!*@dlp-FACC.dip.t-dialin.net)
    —› This (*!*@dlp-FACC.dip.t-dialin.net) ban affects: (Sesc)
    (Big_D) Gabrielle sounds like Doctor Ruth.
    —› kick: (Sesc) was kicked by (Tinn) (Die.)
    (KrzaQ|reading) at last.
    (Anya) Poor Gabrielle
    (Krogan) Yay
    • %Tinn /clears
    (Anya) :)
    (Anya) Did the same.
    —› join: (Taure) (ButterflyL@dlp-AAD.dynamic.dsl.as.com)
    • KrzaQ|reading goes back to reading
    • Apo too
    —› mode: (Tinn) sets mode (-b *!*@dlp-FACC.dip.t-dialin.net)
    —› join: (Sesc) (enigma_@dlp-FACC.dip.t-dialin.net)
    (Sesc) Erm, so let's try that again
    (Sesc) My point was only that that this time, it totally wasn't me <_<
    (Anya) But you enjoy it.
    (Anya) Thats why you are reading and writing it?
    (Oz[ZzZz]) :):) (Sesc) “Use me, ’Arry,” she continued without so much as a pause. “Fuck me until neizer of us can move and zen let me sleep wiz you still inside me. Fuck me! Use me! ’Ave sex wiz me! Make love to me! Rape me!”
    • Oz[ZzZz] wats
    (Oz[ZzZz]) ._.
    —› nick: (Oz[ZzZz]) is now known as (Oz)
    -NickServ- This nickname is registered and protected. If it is your
    -NickServ- nick, type /msg NickServ IDENTIFY password. Otherwise,
    -NickServ- please choose a different nick.
    —› no such nickname: (Oz[ZzZz])
    (Sesc) I'm pretty indifferent to it, as far as reading and writing goes, actually
    (%Tinn) Oz
    (Krogan) Ya Oz
    (Oz) 'lo Tinn
    (%Tinn) I'm going to fucking kill you and have a steely pole rape the body
    (Oz) I take it you don't like the french accent raping?
    (Oz) D
    (Oz) Well damn...
    (%Tinn) Or the French kid raping?
    (Oz) This beats the AK
    (Oz) Oh, that too. >.>
    (Krogan) Ohh do you beta for him Oz?
    (Oz) For Sesc? Nope.
    —› quit: (Tinn) (tinntam@dlp-CAF.w-.abo.wanadoo.fr) (Connection reset by peer)
    (Taure) I have empty packs of cookies in my bin <_<
    (Oz) lol
    —› join: (Tinn) (tinntam@dlp-CAF.w-.abo.wanadoo.fr)
    —› mode: (ChanServ) sets mode (+h Tinn)
    (Oz) wb @Tinn
    (Oz) -@
    —› kick: (Oz) was kicked by (Tinn) (I changed my mind)
    ((
    —› now talking in (#darklordpotter)
    ((
    —› topic: Welcome to DLP IRC || #TheStudy: For authors in need of help. || CENSORED || $. / $ <-- MOAR!
    —› set by: World (Saturday, May th , ::)
    —› users: users, ops (%), voiced (%), regulars (%)
    —› join synced in: (.) second(s)
    ((
    (%Tinn) Thanks.
    (Oz) np
    (Oz) xD
    (%Tinn) :p
    (Taure) Hmm
    (Oz) ..::Taure::.. you need to restock
    (%Tinn) The fact that the sex isn't the *point* of the story doesn't minimise the fact that you wrote it, at length.
    (Oz) go to tescos and pick up some maryland cookies
    (Oz) ^_^
    (%Tinn) And you'll remember I commented on Harry's characterisation even though I haven't read the smut. :p
    (Taure) I'm considering writing a letter to Gordon Brown, highlighting his governments program of destroying civil liberties and calling for him to stop
    (Taure) Oz: Fox's chunkies are best
    (%Tinn) Your letter totally won't be used to pick up his dog's shit.
    (%Tinn) That said, go ahead!
    (Taure) % daily amount of saturated fat per biscuit :)
    (Taure) haha
    (Oz) ..::Taure::.. hmm
    (Oz) I like M&S's cookies and flapjacks best
    (Sesc) It wasn't that long, and it was essential to get my point across :p
    (Taure) It's my duty as part of a democracy to shout about stuff, cos if everyone does it at once then stuff *does* happen
    (Oz) Don't get them often though
    (Oz) ;-;
    (Taure) The ones that come in the pots?
    (Taure) They're yummy
    (Oz) yep
    (%Tinn) Sesc: it can't get your point across if it makes people alt+f the fuck out of there.
    (Taure) M&S shortbread is good too
    (Taure) Oh so buttery
    (Oz) Fuck
    (Oz) Wish I didn't like miles from an M%S
    (Oz) >.<
    (Oz) live*
    (Oz) &*

    EDIT 2: Agreed with trooper. Author of this is just a weird fetishist trying to get his jollies, whilst Sesc is about as serious as a fanfic writer can get.
     
    Last edited: Jun 15, 2009
  11. Trooper

    Trooper Death Eater

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    No. Just No.

    Did not go in detail beyond the first chapter. The Restricted section is not that desperately empty of fics, to include stuff like this. I've also noticed that 95% of the stories in the Restricted section are NOT PWP. Even the remaining 5% have at least a smattering of plot in the background. In fact you'll also find that there's a tinge of angst in the background of Sesc's fic.

    This fic it seems, is written purely for the sake of smut. Wierd-gag-worthy smut at that.

    Do not want.

    0/5, if not lower.
     
  12. Kensington

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    That author has crossed lines that shouldn't be crossed. I made the mistake of starting to read the first chapter, but as soon as I realized where he was going I bailed like something that bails.

    I rate this a nonreal number. Because I will never attempt to read this again, hence I shan't assign it a numerical value.
     
  13. Vesvius

    Vesvius High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    Hm. It appears that I've been desensitized to this stuff by my exposure to loli on some other forums.

    My mistake.
     
  14. reggin

    reggin Filthy Half-Breed DLP Supporter

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    4/5 ?

    So you like to peep in the little girls showers to watch right?
    I'm going to laugh when you end up as a Sex Offender.

    Vesvius .. The guy who loves to fuck 8 year olds. -_-
     
  15. Vesvius

    Vesvius High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    I'm suddenly reminded why I only lurk here. Make a mistake in posting something, apologize, and get personal attacks.

    Sorry bout the post again. Either delete it, move it, or whatever. But I'll stop paying attention to it now.
     
  16. Hashasheen

    Hashasheen Half-Blood Prince

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    This isn't a mistake. This is called pedophilia. This is called get on an FBI watch list and get banned from ever seeing your younger relatives again. This is not DLP. Go back to lurking, because you still haven't figured out that this board has quality and a limit (how ever far that limit may be).

    *waits for the jabs for being too serious about it*
     
  17. Oz

    Oz For Zombie. Moderator DLP Supporter

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    God damn, lighten up Hash. :rolleyes:

    I vote thread-deletion. Everything to be said has been said.
     
  18. Andro

    Andro Master of Death DLP Supporter

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    This is more pedo than Vash and Sesc combined.

    The Veela background is terrible. Even if it was applied to Fleur instead of Gabriele it would still be terrible.
     
  19. Tinn Tam

    Tinn Tam Review Goddess Retired Staff

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    Don't mind reggin, he's just bandwagonning.

    There's fucked-up stuff in Mature WbA and S&P. This fic belongs in either of these categories (there's a WTF fics thread in S&P) if it has to be somewhere on DLP, but not in the Library; that's all. I certainly don't want to see Sesc's fic in the Library either, no matter how well-characterised Harry is in it or whatever.

    Considering the vibe you get from IRC sometimes, or from certain sections of the boards, then yes, Vesvius did make a honest mistake.

    The rating is low, so it's getting there.



    EDIT: my review, based off the bits Sesc inflicted upon me one sad day on IRC: you may argue that it's fanfic, that Gabrielle isn't fully human, that we don't know anything about the way Veelas reach sexual maturity. You'd be right. The result, however, isn't much different once these points have been made: I can't read this story without having a violent reaction of rejection and keeping a foul taste in my mouth afterwards. I feel the same way about Sesc's fic and about a certain one-shot that found its way into the Restricted Section.

    Therefore, all things considered: 1/5. Because I don't want to see that in the Library.
     
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  20. Sesc

    Sesc Slytherin at Heart Moderator

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    Okay, so wtf.

    Really, some people need to learn2differentiate. Between a fucking story and RL. Yeah, let's call Vesvius all but a pedophile ... oh wait. Reggin and Hash did call him a pedophile. Hey, retards. If I read about a murderer killing people and enjoy it, does not mean I want to do that myself.

    Seriously. All you mount the barricades once some idiot politician starts on ego shooters and declares they have to get banned because they encourage people to start on killing sprees in their free time, too. You call them stupid, and rightly so.

    So don't be a faggy hypocrite now and say that because someone read a story that involves sex with an 8-year-old (that is specifically stated to be NON-HUMAN), and apparently not disliked it as much as in your opinion he should've, he's Fritzl Mk II.

    The firsts posts were in jest and funny. Once people started to think they were meant seriously, this thread became a giant clusterfuck (this post not excluded). Keep it to the story, m'kay?

    /rant


    So. Read it and the smut isn't written too badly. Veela-Soulbond is fail. Harry/Chasers were hot. 8yr old Slave!Gabby I could do without ... seriously, what's up with that in general? I really don't see the appeal in having someone like that around, but there are tons of stories where Harry gets sex-slaves. Tbh, the concept sounds quite boring. I mean, where's the challenge in that?

    So all in all, meh.


    Edit: And Tinn beat me. Oh well.
     
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