It doesn't matter if he fears her battle skills or the confrontation. He acts nothing like the bastard Harry we knew.

The point is, he doesn't act like a dick. He acts like a schoolboy terrified or Ginny's Bat-Bogey Hex in all those HG fics.

My point exactly.

 

What are they going to do arrest him? I would love to see them attempt it. Even if they did managed to capture him, what the hell are they going to do with him? Put him in a cell that will only managed to make him even more pissed off when he breaks out after 5 minutes?

 

If the Ministry even have laws about illegality of Fallen Angels. Not that it would stop those morons.

 

Or maybe he's just trying to avoid an awkward conversation. He did have sex with her and then take off for a month. I dunno what experiences you've had, but that will cause problems with just about anybody.

 

I think that Harry avoiding Amanda is in character, given the circumstances. He isn't scared of her because of what she could do to him physically, just because it would be a really awkward situation (even if he is going to have to deal with it at some point). The hospital scene, since someone brought it up, still seems off, IMHO.

Amanda not defending Harry seemed a little OOC, but given the circumstances it might be OK... I don't really no how I feel about it.

I do feel a little sorry for Amanda, though.

Oh, and the timing is off (I think). How did the new get out so fast?

 

First of all, as Shezza asked, big thanks go to Jon for persuading Shezza to write this update. So, thanks again Jon.

I liked the interaction between Amanda, Hermione and Ron. It felt like a true talk between teenagers.

Does the Ministry not control the Daily Prophet and/or can influence it?

I am wondering what will Harry do? Will he try to deny it or just accept it and pulverize everyone that will stand in his way?

 

The reason Harry's avoiding Amanda is pretty obvious. He's insecure about "romance" and ideas related to family and love. Sure, he has Meciel, but their love is abnormal. Harry's childhood and adolesence experiences don't really lend themselves to promoting a normal relationship. Harry got what he wanted from Amanda, and although he might genuinely care about her, he's probably too confused to try and move further with her, especially when he sees himself as such an abnormality (I mean really, it's not like he could have a normal relationship with her even if he wanted to, he's an immortal demon host and she's a Knight of the Cross).

Amanda and Harry will reconcile in some manner. Hopefully it's as she suggests – they'll fight each other. That would be great if Shezza could steer the plot so Amanda's forced to fight her mentor. I could definitely see Dumbledore manipulating her into thinking she has to, with the idea it might force a change in Harry's character.

 

Ditto with Franki. Thank you Jon for persuading him.

I agree. I liked the interaction between Amanda, Ron & Hermione too. It was nicely done. It helped place Amanda's character as between worlds, gave us her thoughts on things, not just Harry's.

Also, it's come at last. The moment i've been waiting for. When harry get's outed for what he is to the wizarding world.

Sure, it may be refuted, but Hermione's like a bushy haired terrier. Amanda's reaction, and the paper, is going to get her digging. I've no idea how much information about Denarians exists in Hogwarts, but she'll probably find something?

Excellent update!

 

Considering the fact that Dumbledore had to look it up in his personal collection, there probably isnt a whole lot on it.

 

True. It's also quite likely that Dumbledore had only collected materials about the wider/older magical world because of his connection to it through Fawkes.

 

Thank god it isn't just me. While some of Harry's harsher traits may have been dulled, it's almost comical (it's not, it just seems sickening to me) that he tried to so hard NOT to be seen by Amanda.

 

The sad thing about this Harry/Amanda deal is that it's in character. When speculating how Harry would handle sleeping with Amanda, I speculated that they would either have a very casual relationship, or there would a complete break. I doubt happily-ever-after is in the cards for anyone in this story.

Unfortunately as a Harry/Amanda fanboy, it looks like Shezza went for the complete break.

Still, I'm really looking forward to reading the rest of the chapter as the truth about Harry's nature is made public.

 

I think it was perfect in what it was trying to do. You created a dull, routine-like mood with Amanda whining as Ron and Hermione bickered at each other, only to then completely flip the atmosphere as the school, Dumbledore, then Amanda did their own, unique freak outs.

It didn't do much of anything but give a segue into the next scene, which will be much more important, but then again now you've established Amanda's current feelings for Harry without having to go back later when shit hits the fan. You've got her to the point where you can leave her alone and get on with the action.

Oh, and I've got some corrections.

It.

Double loud redundancy ftl.

Is this supposed to be hand, because I generally don't nudge people with my head.

Alliteration is not your friend here, at least IMO. I'd take out the grumpily, as it would leave her sounding more flat and depressed. Structure is part of mood, and all that.

Using now while in the past tense is kind of odd sounding. Maybe 'worst though' or something similar to denote that it was the worst of many wrongs he had commited, rather than the latest.

Deed a comma between right and old. And such an implication requires a wouldn't or a couldn't, not a didn't.

Was.

Need an and between the two, or you've got an incomplete sentence.

him then. And I may be a bit too forthcoming with syntax advice, but I think it would sound better if you removed the highlighted stuff. I think it's the 'with him' and 'against him' that contradict each other and make the sentence sound slightly funny.

I know I'm a goddamn nitpick, but I'd take the then out just for repetition's sake and it makes the statement sound more like a flat realization.

... yeah.

Hahaha, I'm not even going to explain this one. I'm just a bit of a structure/mood nazi.

 

One minor correction to your corrections: the phrase "right old" without a comma is perhaps a bit obscure and informal, but it's valid. See here, for instance:

Hope this works...

Oh, and just to get back on-topic, keep up the good work, Shezza. Regarding Amanda, there's still a few ways you can take it, but I think it's clear that Harry isn't afraid of Amanda, per se. He may not be afraid of anything but 'wasting his time' with her, but even using the soppiest possible interpretation, he's afraid of his own feelings. Demons he can handle, but the combination of sexual attraction plus personal fondness for a single person is new to him.

 

Or he knew she was going to be clingy and annoying.

<filler>

 

"The argued like" - They

"He’s really gotten to you know, hasn’t he?" - now

"What’s I really that lame?" - Was

"her best friend" - Amanda and Hermione are BFFs? Idon't remember that. They have little in common.

"with her them there would be" - grammar

 

Um... Harry just told his full name to a squad of Aurors and anyone within earshot...

 

Well, to be exact he mentioned the name of someone else who happened to have exactly the same name as him, so...

 

He wasn't saying his name.

It was a fictional Harry James Potter in Kent.I remember in one of the books it went into detail about the whole name thing.

 

Can't Moody use his magical eye to see the coin of the Fallen Angel Mecial within Harry Potter? I mean the coin is probably obviously powerful. To his magical eye it is probably a beacon of dark magic.

"“Well, there’s a Harry James Potter somewhere in Kent, I think,” Harry mentioned offhandedly. “Go question him. I’m sure he’ll be able to explain lots of things for you, like why you touch yourself at night.” "

Should he be giving out his name like that?

Why didn't Harry take the Aurors alive? Their good souls that would go to heaven would be good bartering chips on the demon market.

Edit: Someone said it is okay to say your name as long as your not referring to yourself. However didn't they say in the books how the tone and frequency of the person saying their own name plays a part in the person's name? So wouldn't him saying his own name but talking about someone else still make it so he tells them his name since all that really is required is you actually say your own name?