Title:Harry Potter and Futures Past
Author: DriftWood1965
Rating:T
Genre:Action/Romance
DLP Category:Time Travel
Pairing:Harmony
Status:WIP
Summary:Starts out the day after the Battle of Hogwarts. Harry and Hermione meet the Goddess of Love, and she offers to let them go back in time. Strictly Harry and Hermione. Minor - well maybe major Ginny, Ron and Dumbledore Bashing. Soul Bond - Time Travel fic
Link: Futures Past

Comments:
I'm going to start by stating up front that I suspect that this will only make the recycle bin for two main reasons, One of which is in the summery, 'Soul Bond'. The other is a mental link with each other that 'the goddess' uses to eavesdrop on them. To be honest I tend to skim those parts, so ya...

That being said, it's actually pretty well written. I was skeptical of the 'goddess of love' bit, but she's a tolerable OC. The writing style is fluid, the spelling errors are (As far as I can tell) non-existent, and the rational behind Harry and Hermione's actions is at least acceptable within the confines of suspended disbelief. If the author removed the Deus Ex soul bond and it's trappings I might even go so far as to call this fic above average.

Sadly however as it's currently written it's merely Not that bad. I'd say once the author has some more experience and probably once she gets some honest feedback she could become a rather good fic writer.

I'd personally give this a 3-3.5/5

 

Starting score: 3/5

-1 for soul bond
-3 for every chapter being 90% dialogue
-10 for combining the worst elements of H/Hr and H/G fanfiction into one story

Final score:

What is this I don't even/5

 

I knew you guy's answers before I even opened the thread.

Either way, I haven't read something that sound this bad in a long time, may as well give it a go. I'll edit with impressions later.

 

This is... awful. Why? Why would you post something like this in For Review? Man, I'd be hesitant to rec this fic in the Almost Readable thread.

Do not want/5.

 

It's not bad, from what I can see, but it is extremely cliched. And, yeah, I am a fan of Harry/Hermione, so it's not an objection to the ship. It's just a fairly generic fic that has equivalents elsewhere as well, as far as I can tell (apart from the whole 'goddess' shtick). Love potions, scheming Weasleys, Ron claiming Hermione as 'his' girl (don't know how many times I've seen that particular one, and Hermione's ire at being claimed, but it's a lot). Writing and grammar are decent. 2.5/5, overall, maybe a decent fic to read to pass the time, if nothing else is present.

 

It definitely is as bad as it sounds. There isn't even a need to hide quotes in spoilers, as everyone in here has already read stuff like that more often than what's healthy.

It's a cliché-ridden H/Hr soul bond feast - and one of the worse at that:

In addition they are able to telepathically talk not only with each other, but also with a goddess who supervised the whole soul bond and then sent them back to the past - from the end of year seven to almost the end of year five.

So they travelled back in time just two years. Nevertheless - supported by the goddess Harry suddenly is able to defeat Snape in Occlumency:

Of course, a story based solely on clichés like that can't live without the usual bashing. Manipulative Dumbledore:

And another:

Of course Dumbledore and the Weasleys had set up Harry at Platform 9 3/4 to introduce him to Ron, and now Ron and Ginny are using some love perfumes on him and Hermione for OBHWF:

Instead of Ron, H/Hr's new best friends are Neville and Luna.

And so on.


Its UNDER -9000 / 5

It's bad enough for the Hall of Shame.

 

This seems appropriate from what I've read of it.

 

I actually have that on alerts, am mildly curious if the plot ever goes anywhere. Not all that optomistic though.

As pointless H/Hr bash-fests go, I've definitely scene more entertaining stuff.

1/5, because characterisation only seems to be getting worse.

 

read it some time ago and Dark Minion's post just about sums it up

 

This fucking sucked.

 

I've read the first chapter. Character bashing, author-insert (as a Goddess!), soul bond, authors notes in the main body of the text, bizarre fascination with hair and the word bloody... Fail.

Technically, the writing is sound, but what's being written is awful. 1/5

EDIT: I read a bit further...

How? That's pretty much the whole story! There's just no part of this story that is in anyway good.

 

Yeah, that's like reading a Harry/Draco Veela!Mate with skipping the slashy bits. The punctuation is all that's left to read then.

 

-Soul Bond
-Character bashing
-Ship based plot

Perfect recipe for disaster, unless the author is a fucking genius.

I'm curious, why does nobody bashes Hermione? Fics like this made me hate her.

 

Oh god, did he really recommend that?

haha

 

*is blinded*

Amazingly I was able to get through 2/3 of the first chapter before I failed a save, and then it was over. Even if you had some perverse guilty pleasure here, why the hell isnt it in unrecommended?

1/5

 

OK; cliches all over the place, I was prepared for that. However, seeing as the fic was recommended here I thought the writing would be really good and the story would somehow turn interesting if you just ignored the small Harry/Hermione parts.

I was severely wrong.

Everyone in this thread already said why, I'm just going to add one thing.

The author makes the character have emotions for no apparent reason. Sure, there are stuff happening that could make you emotional but these character switch moods in 100 km/h, which I absolutely hate

 

-Read Reviews-

-Shrugs-

Or not I suppose. At least ya'll got some lulz out of it.

I maintain that despite the tendency toward cliche' the author has some potential, and with some decent feedback and a good beta could turn out a story worth reading. This obviously, isn't it, but...

-Shrugs again-

Ah well. My Bad.