Title: The Memories
Author: slytheringrl573
Rating: T
Genre: Friendship/hurt/comfort
DLP Category: General Fics
Pairing: None so far
Status: WIP
Summary: Lucas Longbottom has always been told Bellatrix Lestrange was born evil. But when he finds a package containing a memory or two, he begins to question whether people are born evil, or if they have to result to it.
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6789788/1/The_Memories

This is actually my own story, but I would like an honest opinion. I love constructive criticsm.

 

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No. Fuck no.

 

The staff is trolling us. They have to be.

 

I rate this:

killyourself/5

Have a horrible afterlife. (If you're so inclined to believe in such a thing)

 

Your name, your FF.Net name...:facepalm.

This is where you want to take this 'story' for feedback, but for Christ's sake, try to at least break the 500(0) word mark per chapter. Actually, don't go there yet. Lurk for a few months and read some decent published authors in the meantime. Hopefully by then you'll have a clearer idea of what kind of neighbourhood you inadvertently wandered into.

Also, spellcheck. It is spelt 'prologue'.

 

Your story is terrible.

Troll.

 

Wow, seriously impressed. The pacing is good, characters are believable and more importantly, the story drew me in.

I encourage you to write more. Lots more. 5/5

 

Seratin, don't feed the troll. :facepalm

 

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YouFail/5

+ammo for people who want post count total prerequisite to add threads to For review.

 

/not sure if troll or just stupid.jpg

Somebody drop a link to all these retarded For Review threads into the DLP Impovement thread, as shining proof of the need for a minimum post count before being allowed to start a thread in For Review.

Maybe we ought to start a petition...

EDIT: Ninja'd

 

I blame NMB and his goddamn profile link. I will never forgive him for this. >.<

 

Can we start a petition for NMB to remove the link from his profile page? Then one for a prerequisite on how much you need to post before being able to Submit? I am seriously getting tired of the influx of often incomplete, incoherent, crap that has come through the For Review Section lately. <?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-com" /><o></o>

 

Thank you.

 

Seconded, Dark Raku.

 

Its nowhere near long enough to be properly critiqued in For Review. Or to go into the library. The amount you've written, its barely even enough for a single chapter.

Put it up in the Work by Authors section, and then you'll get constructive advice. Rather than it being lambasted in here, and you getting a bad rep for putting your own, barely started, fic here in For Review.