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Dead Link Harry Potter and the Sage's Stone by Lovepoint33 - T

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Thaumologist, Aug 5, 2011.

  1. Ched

    Ched Da Trek Moderator DLP Supporter ⭐⭐

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    The prologue was alright. A bit off in some ways but not bad. It does seem strange that the two worlds of magic can co-exist (which is where I think this fic is going, but I'm not sure) without powerful members of each society like Eb and Albus being aware of it though.

    Premise is pretty good. Teen!Dresden and Kid!Potter, but Potter seems too adult-ish for being six years old at some times(not as bad as a lot of stories though).

    Honestly I stopped reading not long after Harry and Harry shook hands. I can't say it's awful but I can say that something about the writing style turns me off almost completely. It's almost like the writing I see in crack!fics sometimes but I don't think that's the intention, so it's disconcerting. I did glance ahead a bit into the next chapter, but didn't actually read much of it.

    If it's being written as an experiment in this meta-metafiction or whatever then at least it's technically readable even if I can't abide the writing style. If you're having fun go with it, you're writing for free after all, but like someone else said this is damned hard to make work so don't expect to have many followers jump on the wagon. I just don't particularly like it. I can't rate it high enough for the bin, sorry Mr. Author - 2/5.

    Nice name though Author-guy, and a very interesting defense of your story in forum posts. You should hang around DLP for a bit. I might get curious and give it another go later. I do like DF/HP crossovers generally.
     
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  2. addictedforlife

    addictedforlife High Inquisitor

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    ... Damn I know I've seen this name before...

    Found it.

    And now I wish I hadn't. :facepalm
     
  3. Lungs

    Lungs KT Loser ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    It gets worse.
     
  4. ????

    ???? Banned

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    About damn time someone pegged me.

    ...though in retrospect I do regret writing that voldemort/thatcher lemon. Just wasn't tasteful. That's why I self destructed the account later with the delightful intro post.

    ANYWAY. Answers in no particular order.

    @Flamers

    Troll Harder.

    @calutron

    You have mastered the art of making illogical inductions.

    @NoxedSalvation

    1. So I'm incapable of carefully weighing the value of a scene in a story before deciding whether to include it or not? Do you have no conception of how condescending that sounds?

    2. Because I crossed the Rubicon on Transfinite long ago. He's part of the story's keystone.

    3. Because my motivation for writing is myself, not my readers. I'm happy they enjoy it, and I appreciate they review it... But some of my best ideas will also be my least read ones due to their fandom. And I couldn't care less.

    @CheddarTrek

    Believe me, there is a damn good reason for the two worlds being largely unaware of the other...

    The prologue is currently the most superior part of the story, because thus far it's the only one I've revised. I don't have a beta. I'm not going to leave passable material unpublished out of some desire for perfection that I can satiate later.

    You're right, Harry is too mature. I'm mostly done with the revised edition of that chapter, and it should fix that. Honestly, there are too many problems with the current form of the chapter to count...

    Any chance you could link to one of said fics? I'm sure it would be instructive.

    That's why I had it break the meta level and never look back in the chapter following the one you stopped reading at. Anyone who currently has it in their faves and alerts knows exactly what kind of story they're reading.

    If you're interested, I'll PM you when the first thirty thousand words are at the level of the prologue.

    @Portus

    Not even a little bit. I was just screwing around. This is the most I've posted anywhere in a long time.

    @Rymrock

    MEMES ARE THE KEY. (Formal definition, not the internet one.)

    @diavi

    Man, you know, I have thought of that. There's a good reason for the mutual ignorance. Even more, I can promise you that it is not a stupid Deus ex Machina.

    Also, the author's notes are bothering you? Don't read them. They are not, strictly speaking, necessary for the plot until sometime in the fourth of fifth year. They just offer information that characters on the inside could never know. For example, The sedaris/abraxas thing. How could I have brought that up in conversation anywhere?
     
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  5. mknote

    mknote 1/3 of the Note Bros. DLP Supporter

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    :facepalm

    You just admitted to creating a second account. I give it a day, tops, before you're banned.

    Regardless, it's pretty damn clear that you're a troll, so GTFO my DLP kthxbye
     
  6. Aekiel

    Aekiel Angle of Mispeling ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    The day this is your DLP is the day I personally hunt down Raven and force him to ban you at gunpoint.

    On topic though, this story is bad and you should feel bad.
     
  7. ????

    ???? Banned

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    @mknote

    I answer reviews. period. Don't like me? Don't post my work, or only flame it. If you try to be helpful, then per force I will appear from the aether, and reply at an equivalent level of politeness, because it's only common courtesy to do so, you know?

    @Aekiel

    What, about committing account suicide the first time around? No, that was necessary for multiple reasons. Regretting the necessary is a quick path to insanity.
     
  8. Alindrome

    Alindrome A bigger, darker mark DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    It really wasn't. For one, what was the point of trying to get rid of your account in such a manner when you could have asked a mod to close it? Or better yet, delete the post you wanted to be rid of?

    Secondly, if the aim was attempting to get people to forget about you, you failed horribly by admitting to being the person who made those posts in the first place - not to mention that the method by which you 'self-terminated your account' begets a worse reputation for you.

    Thirdly, that story, from what I remember of it, wasn't that god-awfully bad an occurrence for you to need to get rid of it. It made a few people laugh, and if you had ignored it and carried on you'd be better off now.

    Fourthly, creating multiple accounts and new accounts to avoid a ban is just another way of being banned again.

    And lastly, your new name is even more terribad than your old name and you should feel are cripplingly stupid for using it.
     
  9. calutron

    calutron Unspeakable

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    ^
    That was a logical induction.
     
  10. ????

    ???? Banned

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    Because every single forum I've ever been a member of has had an administration that derived it's chief recreation from the antagonisation of the userbase. Hence, the only logical option was to do do something sufficient to get an arbitrary ban... Which I did, albeit not in the way I expected.

    Regarding my username, your complaint is noted and deemed utterly irrelevant on the grounds of "If I had given a damn about my username, do you really think I'd walk around with one like LOVEPOINT33?"

    I wasn't trying to be forgotten. LOVEPOINT33 and all related names are fairly disposable. There are two projects I don't really want to drop, but once I finish them, this identity is shutting the hell down on account of having way too damn much notoriety.

    Or I could just do it right the fuck now.

    Yeah why no
     
  11. Lungs

    Lungs KT Loser ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Hall of Shame. Nao.
     
  12. calutron

    calutron Unspeakable

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    Why are you still posting? GTFO or STFU.
     
  13. Frundan

    Frundan Squib

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    I don't know; wouldn't that be your job to figure it out as the author? A magical note falls from the sky, a dancing carott tells it in song, or anything else but those goddamn notes. Even if you say not to read them, they are still breaking the flow of the story
    Your work is a kind of metafiction I've never seen before and I do not like it. Mainly because I couldn't really get into it, since the aforementioned a/ns kept aggravating me to no end. Another reason might be that I'm a huge fan of the genre; so I saw the summary and started reading with somewhat high expectations which were shattered by the time I got to the end.
    Also, meta-metafiction does not exist. Just because you made up a word, it won't make your story any better.
    Want to write metafiction? Alright, go ahead. But this is not how you do it.

    /rant
     
  14. calutron

    calutron Unspeakable

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    Thank you for that ^

    Your insight is much appreciated, but unnecessary.

    This thread had been dead for some time now, so I will repeat my self by saying;

    "STFU"
     
  15. Hari Seldon

    Hari Seldon Groundskeeper DLP Supporter

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    The story is still in the for review forums, he has every right to post his opinion of the story.

    Maybe that's what you should be doing instead of telling people to stfu and gtfo.
     
  16. Hashasheen

    Hashasheen Half-Blood Prince

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    Especially since we're encouraged to review dead threads. See that little notice on your webpage that goes:

     
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