The point of this fic is that instead of leaving everything to the adults in OoTP Harry decides to take things into his own hands.

He goes to Knockturn Alley because that's the only wizarding place he knows apart from Diagon or Hogsmeade and he makes a split second decision to go there

The reason for Mulo training Harry has yet to be disclosed. It will be explained later on

Molly has forbidden Ron and Ginny to interact with him yes, do you listen to everything your Mum says? Do Ron and Ginny in canon? They continue approaching him because they want to know where he's been all summer. Harrys animosity is slightly overblown but I've just taken his anger at them in canon and added on top of it his attitude from being around Mulo so much. Also, his increased nastiness is due to his slow immersion in the Dark Arts.

Neville IS intimidated by Harry, he's clearly nervous the first few times Harry speaks to him but he starts to relax when Harry makes no move to bite his head off.

Harry isn't especially close to Luna. Where in the fic has he spent that much time talking to her? She intrigues him yes, and he finds her interesting but he hasn't spoken to her all that much. And in this fic I've made a small change to how Luna views Ginny. That I admit to.

Thanks for pointing them out though.

 

I liked the new chapter. Although, I really hope that the pace picks up and stuff starts to happen soon, because the current pace will get kind of tedious in a few chapters.

Lmao. That was great.

 

He's half crazy, hunted and wants to live in the past. In Harry he saw James and behaved like a dad to him, but couldn't make any of his promises true.

... but I want to be honest. I did like him too... till he died. Then I read too many Sirius-is-alive-Fanfics. Fact is, the most people who like Sirius can't write him. They make him too funny as if his Azkaban-time never existed.

And in this story the death of Sirius would give Harry the reason to improve himself, and talk more with Luna or Neville. It would bring... life into the plot.
And for a good plot I would kill all characters (but Harry).

 

I find it funny how people's view of Sirius has changed since POA.

In POA, he was a feared and awed wizard, second only to Voldemort in the ranks of the Death Eaters, even Dumbledore was slighly wary of him.

He was a dark, serious character who had the entire wizarding world shivering in fear at the thought of him on the loose for over a year.

Now, everyone views him as a bit of a joke really. He's a prankster first and foremost, and usually depicted as a pretty average wizard. Personally, I'd like to see a story that shows him in more of a POA light.

 

Amen thank god you said it. In POA Remus said that James Potter and Sirius Black were the best students in the school. I always thought of them as like powerful(not Voldemorts level but above average), talented, and smart.

I thought James and Sirius would be like some of the more feared members of the Order like Moody and Dumbledore. BUT alot of people make James and Sirius immature, stupid, and untalented. In OotP James is clearly more than capable of dealing with Snape who was supposed to no more Dark curses than half the 7ths when he arrived at Hogwarts. I think that James and Sirius would be about even in skill and power.

 

I just read the story and I like it. I don't consider it great, but it's definitively worth a read. I also agree with Dranco and Taure. You should make Sirius more like in POA. I don't really care if he lives or not, but if he lives Harry is less motivated. On the other hand, Harry could learn a lot from Sirius. Anyway: I'll give this story 3.5 (4) /5 stars.

 

Still good, the Dementor bit was original but Harry getting rid of it with a sudden burst of accidental magic was unrealistic. In your story he seems to only have trained using his wand, him losing control of his magic and letting out accidental magical was all well and good but you didn't explain how he would be able to perform wandless magic without any training in the field.

As for Umbridge, killing or tortuing then obliviating her would be a wasted opprotunity IMO. Harry with a Slytherine side would hold the incdident against her threatening to ruin her career and reputation if she didn't grant him appropriate restitution.

 

I agree the wandless magic was a bit much.

I say let Harry hold the Boggart thing over her. Dont kill her, Dont torture her. Have him become what the sorting hat envisioned him as. A Slytherin. A Great Wizard.

 

Where is the plot in this story? what's the conflict? when is harry going to train? 18 chapters and we don't really have an answer to these questions..

 

Meh, blackmail is boring. Just kill the bitch and have done with it. Besides, at this point he has already verbally and physically threatened Umbridge's life. The BEST he could manage is 'I don't tell and you don't tell.' And to be honest, Dolores could easily claim ignorance to the Boggart being in the room and get off scot-free while Harry gets in HUGE trouble for threatening to kill her. Harry has to either finish her or wipe her memories now, or else he's screwed. I say waste the fat bitch, but torture works too I guess.

 

He should at least hit her with a Legilimens though. Think of all the dirt on Fudge he'll probably dig up.

 

Well he's not done with her yet so here's to hoping. Anyway good chapter. I love the way you have written Luna's character. Most authors fall into the mistake of just making her seem like shes on a constant high. But yours has much more pleasent character.

I vote this be move to the library.

 

You've got to be joking.

When does he train? Oh, I dunno...the summer seemed to suffice, and he's getting better all the time.

Where is the plot? I'm pretty sure her plot is great.

What's the conflict? His friends are against him, as is the Headmaster of the school. The Ministry is against him, and so is the ret of the Wizarding World. Then, there's the niggling problem of Voldemort.

/sarcasm.

BloodLust: Great 19th chapter. Didn't see that coming...I was thinking along the lines of an Obliviate. I hope to see more Tracey Davis Or Cho...or both

Good stuff.

I second Niffler's vote for this to be moved to the Library.

 

Thanks
I considered an Obliviate, but decided that that wouldn't really achieve anything apart from covering his tracks.

I also considered your suggestion of the Imperius, and it was a very close decision between that and the Unbreakable Vow.

Cho will be coming up sometime soon, before fading back into obscurity a couple of chapters later...lol.

 

Liked the 19th Chapt.

All who say that this Fic be sentenced to the Its proper place say

I.



I liked that he found some use for her cause she isnt very useful. You could make Harry give her a love potion that made her fall in love with Grawp( is he in this story?). You wouldnt notice the weight difference I mean she is a fat cow. That way She might not be a virgin when she dies( unless she raped little 1st years in detention) and Grawp would have a friend.

 

Dranco: That was a very disturbing image. I shouldn't image these things so graphic anymore...
Anyway: I liked the new chapter and I certainly didn't see an unbreakable vow comming. If I think about it, I like this solution even more than killing her. So he has control over her and he can finish her off later.

 

Yeah Dranco that is very disturbing *chases after Dranco with spatula* that is nearly worthy of the office

I also vote for this to be moved to the library and I would also like to say that I am very pleased with your update rate, please keep it up

 

Nice chapter, the unbreakable vow was a nice touch.

I think your story has proven itsself worthy of the library.

Thanks for pointing that out vanna.

 

I think you need a third person to anchor the vow.

 

yeah, Vanna's right. An Unbreakable Vow requires the two participants and a witness, for example Snape, Narcissa and Bellatrix.