Title: Daddy's Girl
Author: EntreNous
Rating: NC-17
Genre: Romance
DLP Category: Restricted Section
Pairing: Harry/Lily Luna
Status: Complete
Summary: Everyone knows Lily is Daddy's girl.
Link: http://entrenous88.livejournal.com/697709.html

It's well written and I'm actually surprised how well the author made the pairing work. It was a pretty enjoyable read.

4/5

 

The story could've done without all the "baby girl" stuff in the first half, that was really offputting in the context of a smutfic. If you have to write incest stories - and I can certainly appreciate the taboo character of those - they really shouldn't contain any references to the childhood and preteen years of the younger character. *At All*. Period.

An example:

Spoiler

(Lily is 11 (!!) in this scene)

"That night when Lily went to bed, she kissed him tenderly again and again, for much longer than she ever had before. Harry was so touched at this that he carried her up to bed and spent a half hour tucking her in, kissing her eyelids, her little rosebud mouth, her pink cheeks and dimples."

This is pretty disgusting to me.

The last part of the tension arc - with Lily out of Hogwarts - was hot and if that were the whole thing it would get a 4/5 from me. But the way it is right now, I can't give it more than:

2/5

 

My very first thumbs up, I think I used it wisely.

 

This would be endlessly more amusing as a deconstruction of how messed up this stuff is, instead of just a horribly written smut scene with an amazingly creepy statup.

 

My first reaction:

I want you and the author to die. In a fire.

My more calm reaction:

I no longer want you or the author to die in a fire.

Bullets will do.



On a serious note, this story is creepy pedo shit that turns into meh smut. 2/5.

Also, omg, rofl. Did anyone else see the 'fanart' that inspired the fic? Heh.

 

If I had any more thumbs up to give, you'd get them all.

 

You two motherfuckers need Jesus

And a prison cell

 

That's what I would expect from Minion and I would know that he was joking in a friendlish stalkery way but Alexx... there are lines dude. Also that fanart is bad. And whoever made it should feel bad.

 

She should have been in an accident and broken both of her arms first.

 

It's a matter of perspective. One story is told from the child's POV, the other from the parent's. While I'm not fond of either type of story, there is the matter of an adult-POV story giving off a definite pedo vibe while Harry/Lily is effectively the MILF fantasy of a lot of teenage boys (albeit with a side serving of incest).

 

Er, not really. I haven't read any underage!Harry/Lily fic that was well-received in which his prepubescent characteristics and mannerisms were described, and almost seemed to be an integral part of the story. That seems to the be the real issue with this fic. It's not that the Harry/daughter pairing is the problem, but if she acts or is acted upon too much like a child, it becomes too real, and that kills any 'pleasure' people may have obtained from seeing that taboo crossed.

 

The, difference, though, is still quite significant. As a reader you automatically identify with the main character.

In Harry/Lily stories, you're identifying with Harry, a guy boning a hot redhead, generally in her early twenties. Lily is Harry's mum but she isn't my mum, so I don't have an "ick" reaction.

In Harry/Lily Luna stories you're identifying with a guy boning a little girl. Even though she's not my daughter she's still a little girl, so it remains distasteful.

 

Isn't just about every 30-year old Harry goes back into his younger body practically a pedo!fic? This is a dude with a 30 year old mind, a sexual history, just fucking around with a bunch of little kids, going through the motions of first year schooling. And there are loads of them in the Library.

 

Only the ones that involve romantic relationships between him and his age-peers. Aka the bad ones.

 

Yeah, those are all terrible.

There is a line to be drawn, too. In a difference between teenagers and pre-teens. Any story about romance with a time traveling!Harry before, say, year four or five is pretty fucking squicky.

But after that it's not so bad, and if done right could even be enjoyable.

This is not done right. This is done terribly. It's freaky and wrong.

@Sesc:

I want to add to this.

It might even be acceptable and okay if the story had waited till she was a late-stage teenager. 16, 17, etc etc. That doesn't freak people out in the same fashion. At that point they're not 'children' any more. Oh, sure, not 'adults' either. But it's still not the same as having relations of that nature with an eleven year old.

Those sort of Harry-Banging-Lily stories are generally more acceptable to people because Ephebophilia is not the same as Pedophilia.

 

The hypocrisy in this thread amuses me, admittedly more than the story itself.
The writing is not good enough to support the premise. Id say this is almost recommended, but not Library material. 3/5