The world building is a good when Harry is with the Goblins, though CheddarTrek is right about the author making it easy on herself. That seriously detracts from the story.

The Goblins are present as a basically flawless culture, and I don't like that. If they were so perfect, they'd have taken the wizards by now.

The reason this isn't a 4/5 is Hogwarts. Harry gets on that train, and the story gets boring.

The exposition is relentless and does nothing for plot progression--in fact, I suspect that the writer neither knows nor cares where her story is going. That is beyond tedious.

By the time I was done, I could bring myself to subscribe to update alerts.

3/5

 

I tried and tried.
I just couldn't get into it.

All that boring goblin stuff made me skip the chapters.
Dumbledore is written in a way that makes me feel like I`m supposed to be glad that its not an evil manipulative Dumbledore? He is dumbed down way too much.

I thought it would be better when we get to Hogwarts, so I skipped a bit, and went to later chapters. Unfortunately they were just as boring.

And all that crap about Wizards being so illogical compared to Goblins was irritating as well.

2/5 from me.

 

8 chapters in and I am so sick of reading about Harry crafting jewelry and working with metal. Basically 2 chapters worth of actual plot advancement so far, 2/5 for decent grammar etc, but this doesn't belong in the library.

 

4/5


I like this one lots if it continues and gets beyond 2nd year, I would up my rating to 4.5/5

 

An actually good fiction. At first I was adverse to reading it because of (as people mentioned before) Harry Crow which I really didn't like. However on reading this I realize that yes, it is much, much better.
The writing style is quite nice actually and has managed to explain the Goblin culture as it has, without being too tedious.
So far so good~ 4/5

 

It's a pretty good story though I was hesitant to read it when I read the summary and it's likeness to Harry Crow. Iss completely different. The Goblin world that the author developer is almost as intricate as the world formed in the story Prince of the dark kingdom. I liked Harry as improvised by the character though I can't say I liked Ron.

 

Last post: 05-02-2013, 11:08 AM

We should add necromancy to this story's tags.

 

There is no necromancy rule in the Library. Reviews are desirable no matter how old the story is.

Posting in old Library threads is not only okay; it is encouraged.