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WIP The Last Ship in Suzhou by Lungs - Xianxia Original

Discussion in 'Original Fiction' started by Halt, May 6, 2021.

  1. Halt

    Halt 1/3 of the Note Bros. Moderator

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    Title: The Last Ship in Suzhou
    Author: Lungs
    Rating: K? It's a lungs fic. Drugs are bound to be involved.
    Genre: Romance / Fantasy / Progression
    Status: WIP, updates daily-ish
    Pairings: Alice x David
    Summary:
    Everything has happened before and every instrument sounds the same.
    Grudges held for generations, with no sure source of blame.
    From this world seed would the skies cast a dice in its favor.
    But it does not learn, it does not change.
    Who would dare approach the gates?

    Ripped from the comfort of our world, David and Alice must face the demons of the past and enemies of their own making. To defy the heavens is to change the world, and nothing ever changes. Except when it does.

    Xianxia, done in a different way.

    Link: RoyalRoad Link

    Look, Lungs needs no introduction from me. LSIS is his take on the xianxia genre, hewing closer to the OG modern xianxia / wuxia works of Jin Yong than the generic slop you'll find polluting the internet.

    The story is basically about 2 kinda friends, kinda not American-Chinese teens who get isekai'd into fantasy xianxia land, and how they adapt to it. There are a lot of philosophical musings underpining the magic / xianxia system, and lungs has put a lot of effort into referencing a lot of obscure chinese references that like eight of his readers understand (I'm not one of them).

    Still, it's competenly written. Prose is lungs-esque (a bit wordy for my taste sometimes, but people who know me know I'm too minimialist for my own good sometimes), with a musical quality to it.

    It's really hard to sell the premise of this story because it really is just a xianxia, just executed competently, with good prose, good technical writing, amazingly fun characters, no rampant misogyny plaguing the main character, a good cast of side characters, and some excellent worldbuilding.

    It's xianxia done better.
     
  2. Lungs

    Lungs KT Loser ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    hey i like it, but i might be biased
     
  3. Mutton

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    The start is a bit rough but it's definitely evolved into one of the most watched for updates, nice job Lungs
     
  4. bsm

    bsm First Year

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    My review is the complement to Halt's. I'm not very bothered by xianxia, but a story that returns to a spiritual, esoteric, culturally grounded view of personal cultivation and enlightenment is much more interesting to me.

    Big fan of the style - if you want to judge whether it is for you, I'd recommend the first and only interlude which both stands on its own and is a high-point stylistically. Probably 4/5 at the moment but I'm expecting it to improve as it moves out of the early stretch.
     
  5. Majube

    Majube Order Member DLP Supporter

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    I've been following it and reading it every day. It's good.
    5/5
     
  6. Mutton

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    Damn that was a good chapter, one of the best fighting scenes in the genre
     
  7. Tomster10010

    Tomster10010 Fourth Year

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    I'm almost sad that I read this, because now other Xianxia just doesn't seem as good.
     
  8. fire

    fire Order Member

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    Last Ship in Suzhou is genuinely beautifully written, particularly the interaction and chemistry between David and Alice.

    Very glad to see that Lung's still continuing the story.
     
  9. Lungs

    Lungs KT Loser ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Been on hiatus for a sec, will have more chapters soon (within a few days probably). I have a list of excuses. it'll sound crazier if i list them so i will - sprained elbow, nijisanji, fire emblem and kendrick lamar :^)
     
  10. fire

    fire Order Member

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    We're back boys. Now see you all again next year.