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Oneshot You Meet in Paris by enembee - T

Discussion in 'Romance' started by enembee, Jul 4, 2019.

  1. enembee

    enembee The Nicromancer DLP Supporter

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    Title: You Meet in Paris
    Author: enembee
    Rating: T
    Genre: Romance
    Status: Complete
    Library Category: Romance
    Pairings: Harry Potter / Gabrielle Delacour
    Summary: ...and she eclipses the sun. A short story.
    Link: FFNet

    I'll write a bit of a longer summary here for the DLP mandem than I provided on the old FFNet. Essentially this was my attempt at writing a canonical post-DH romance (ignoring, of course, the epilogue). Harry, in second person, meets Gabrielle at a party in Paris, and begins a love story that spans decades. Honestly, it's a bit artsy, and you're probably better off reading it than I am trying to explain it to you.

    Reviews on FFNet make my tiny, blackened heart swell ever so slightly.
    Checked by Sorrows 05/08/2019
     
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  2. Sorrows

    Sorrows Queen of the Flamingos Moderator

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    It seems our own personal troll has farted out a few more reviews.
     
  3. enembee

    enembee The Nicromancer DLP Supporter

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    Can't say they don't have my measure.
     
  4. Hawkin

    Hawkin Chief Warlock

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    Done, 5/5
     
  5. Only Darkness

    Only Darkness Squib

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    The second person POV took some getting used to, but the story is excellently written with a hazy feel to it that is utterly enchanting!
     
  6. The-Hyphenated-One

    The-Hyphenated-One Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

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    Thoroughly enjoyed it, well done.
     
  7. TMD

    TMD High Inquisitor DLP Supporter

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    Beautiful prose, tightly and concisely written and yet the imagery is still noticeably evocative. 5/5.
     
  8. Barzûl

    Barzûl Seventh Year DLP Supporter

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    Tightly written, very few issues with the writing, I was entranced throughout.
    5/5
     
  9. KyleisI

    KyleisI Muggle

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    Love it. Brilliantly written, great characterisation, the 2nd person POV adds something really amazing to it, no weird spelling or grammar mistakes, a pairing I'm not used to but why the hell not. Bottom line, it's a masterpiec
     
  10. Miner

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    It's an excellent love story, filled with elegant prose and a very unique style that screams aristocratic. And in that, it was very much an enjoyable piece.

    I just couldn't help but find fault with its status as a Harry Potter fanfic. Harry never really felt like Harry, and the world upon which the story was built, aside from brief mentions of familiar names, didn't really feel like Harry Potter. It was almost as if I was reading a sort of star-crossed lovers tragedy that never really meshed well with the magic side of things. The magic can enable scenes, such as Harry's constant, near instantaneous travel or his eternal youth, but ultimately, I didn't feel as if magic played quite the part that I thought it would play in a Harry Potter story.
     
  11. Bobika

    Bobika Third Year

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    A beauty, truly.

    I love the idea of letting us walk through an entire (or not that entire) life story in a one-shot. It makes you feel the everyday monotony of the years passing in the background, and makes the defining moments shine against it brightly.

    Excellently and beautifully executed. An easy 5/5.
     
  12. Limetrix

    Limetrix Squib

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    Amazing work. The second person pov really worked out. The constant repetition of certain phrases highlighted the differences perfectly. The prose was beautiful to read through. I've read this piece of work at least five times.


    5/5 Real quality content.
     
  13. Averis

    Averis Don of Delivery ~ Prestige ~

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    If this is the only Harry Potter story I read this year (and thus far, it is), I'll know it was a good year. (I realize you wrote it last year, but I'm a hard lurker these days!)

    Not sure what I expected upon opening it (other than that it would be well-executed as per my experience with your other stories), but it took me somewhere very little fiction does these days. It made me think wistfully, without shame, of my own complicated love story (real life, not written) and I think that is the best endorsement of your talent I can give. Some of the most poignant moments are as remarkably simple as a few words: I pulled her from a lake once, You probably don't remember me, You haven't aged a day... the comparisons to Dumbledore and staring out over a lake reading a letter, finding a sense of closure. Sure, there wasn't a lot of magic being thrown around, maybe you could have fleshed out the seventeen year old thing more, but I think it was still full of things that make it completely "Harry Potter" and I wouldn't want you to write a sentence more. It is as close to perfect as it needs to be to convey the emotions you were looking for.

    Glad I read it, bro. 5/5
     
  14. vansh4895

    vansh4895 Muggle

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    Beautiful, I wish Harry had gotten a happier ending though 5/5