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WIP An American Yankee in Dumbledore's Court by Pynrieg - T

Discussion in 'Review Board' started by Shoveler, Apr 29, 2025.

2/5, 1 vote
  1. Shoveler

    Shoveler Muggle

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    Apr 29, 2025 #1
    Title: An American Yankee in Dumbledore's Court
    Author: Pynrieg
    Rating: T
    Genre: Adventure/Drama
    Status: In-Progress
    Library Category: General Fics
    Pairings: R/Hr H/G
    Summary: John Blackwood, an American special forces operative is sent to Hogwarts under the guise of a Muggle Studies professor. But his true mission lies deeper: prepare Harry Potter for a war beyond prophecy—one not just against Voldemort, but against the cosmic horrors the Dark Lord has awakened in his obsession with immortality. 6th year story,
    Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13079527/1/An-American-Yankee-in-Dumbledores-Court
     
  2. joykill

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    Apr 30, 2025 #2
    While the premise in the first chapter is interesting, I feel it would be more interesting to stay with it and explore the cosmic horror instead of just using it to justify Voldemort's madness and immediately killing him off to jump into some poorly conceived bureaucratic logs.

    The tone of the story just doesn't match HP in any way for me and feels more like Men in Black with the characters replaced, which may be interesting in exploring the Department of Mysteries, but feels completely out of place here.

    2/5 for me, I just don't see this being improved in any way to make it more enjoyable, short of making it a graphic novel in the style of MiB