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Complete Demon’s Feign, Merlin’s Pain by Nuhuh - M - Dresden Files

Discussion in 'The Alternates' started by Nuhuh, Apr 1, 2007.

  1. malwastyle

    malwastyle First Year

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    My time is more precious then yours :p. Ill go check it out.
     
  2. MellowYellow

    MellowYellow Fourth Year DLP Supporter

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    The girl his the fallen angel that Laciel gave to Harry.

    BTW nuhuh good chap, but I hope you get thing going again because right
    now its fells like everthing has been at a stand still for a few chaps.
     
  3. yak

    yak Moderator DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    I think he's just been setting things up. Michael and his family, the Denarian factions testing the waters, Harry's denarian demon, Karrin's cross, the White Council, Harry's time in the void that he doesn't remember... everything is building up.

    Hold on to the seat of your pants Mellow. I think this shit about to get nasty.

    Yak
    nasty like your mum
     
  4. Thrawn Wannabe

    Thrawn Wannabe Second Year

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    Completely off topic: Yak, have you ever been Moose?
     
  5. Cxjenious

    Cxjenious Dark Lord

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    It looks like the shit is about to hit the fan...

    Here's hoping to you feeling obligated enough to crank out the other half by bedtime.
     
  6. yak

    yak Moderator DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    doubleyouteaeff? No, I've never been or used Moose.

    Wax, yes. Never mousse.

    I'm a Yak today. A Yak forever.

    Yak
    don't moose with me
     
  7. Oz

    Oz For Zombie. Moderator DLP Supporter

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    *blinks* How drunk are you? :D

    And Jon. Why must you mock us with your foreknowledge (Is that even a word?) of all the Dresden crossovers, when instead you could be working on abjurration? :(
     
  8. Nuhuh

    Nuhuh Dastardly Shadow Admin Retired Staff

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    That's because Jon is a massive tease, and he loves holding that over everyone, trust me. But he is great at brainstorming ideas too, so I keep him around for inspiration:p

    Don't worry guys, there's a lot more to come. I am working on several plot lines simultaneously.

    1. Fallen Angels and Potter. This is the overarching plot which will spread over two more books.

    2. Outsider vs White Council. The main theme of this book. More of that coming soon.

    3. Dresden vs Merlin/Mai. You've seen a bit of this, more is coming.

    4. Secret plot, not going to spoil rest :)


    btw, you guys like Roqariel so far. Seen only a little. I'm going for the adorably homicidal personality here.
     
  9. Oz

    Oz For Zombie. Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Well... I guess I can accept that if it means more of this. ;)

    Wahay!!:cheers:


    Fixed that for you...(Sorry. Just finished betaing the latest chapter of DK).
    Like you said, it's far too early to tell much about her character, but so far she has been adorably homicidal :splatter:(a bit like this guy in fact). I think it'd be even more adorable if she talked like a child as well, but that might get annoying pretty quickly.
     
  10. MysterioX

    MysterioX Professor

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    Excellent start and I'll take your word that it only gets better.
    Gotta love the bloodthirsty little thing.

    Update soon
     
  11. Jon

    Jon The Demon Mayor Admin DLP Supporter

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    because my muse and will to write right now is dead. o_< S'why I posted the unfinished remains of chapter5.
     
  12. yak

    yak Moderator DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    I'm too out of it to comment on her character right now. But there isn't much Roqariel there anyway. Do you have any more of her written that we can look at?

    Yak.
    burning at both ends

    Edit: The candle! Burning the candle at both ends O_O

    Edit2: I just realised how retarded my post is. You aren't asking for an indepth character analysis of Roq and her motives; just whether or not she comes across as adorably homicidal. I don't need more Roq fic to weigh that.

    Further proof of my retardedness: As I was re-reading the last passage of Ch 12 (for Roq) I suddenly realised why you decided to have Dresden and Murphy locked out by the Fidelius. I had just assumed that you'd reveal the reasons for it later in the chapter. I don't know how I ever missed that.

    I'm not writing another damn word until I've had some sleep. I hope this edit makes some sense. I've rewritten it in bits and pieces several times now.

    Yak.
    incoherently misfiring on all cylinders
     
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  13. Oz

    Oz For Zombie. Moderator DLP Supporter

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    :(
    [size=-1]A little piece of me just died.[/size]
     
  14. Nuhuh

    Nuhuh Dastardly Shadow Admin Retired Staff

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    So...why am I having Dresden and Murphy locked out?

    and brother get some sleep. Seriously.
     
  15. eXcalite

    eXcalite Seventh Year

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    I just hope that Harry doesnt become some bloodthirsty monster that slaughters everything in its path. That would kinda kill the cool character interaction that we've seen so far. Anyway...is Roaqiel one of the lesser Fallens? I've just started reading Dead Beat so I haven't read anything about her yet.
     
  16. Ryuugi Shi

    Ryuugi Shi Hierarch

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    She's nuhuh's creation.
     
  17. That Wench

    That Wench Skittles Addict

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    Roqariel.
    ..and yeah, what Ryuugi Shi said.

    To Nuhuh: So ... what's this I hear about some hella fucked up Deirdre/Potter smut? ;)
     
  18. Mors

    Mors Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    Nice chapter, blah blah blah. When we has-ing the next part?


    I'm wondering about the 'forbidden breath'. 'Tis a nice concept, I'm waiting to see how you use this.
     
  19. Oz

    Oz For Zombie. Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Hang on a sec... shouldn't the apostrophe on 'fallen's' be after the 's'?

    EDIT: I'm Minister of Magic now? Sweeet.
     
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  20. Nuhuh

    Nuhuh Dastardly Shadow Admin Retired Staff

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    Wench! The bed time stories I tell you are only for you.

    Just remember to wear that cute green number you have next time.