I've just read the first chapter and I was honestly pretty impressed - much better than Letters. Like you said, it's very solid and a good read. I'll continue reading the next two chapters but definitely 4/5 stuff at the moment at least.

Additionally, if I remember correctly this author had a pretty frequent update rate which is always nice.

 

It's definitely interesting but my problem here is Harry himself. He feels emotionally stinted somehow.

 

I'm honestly impressed. This held my interest surprisingly well, particularly in view of the fact that I have enjoyed very, very few post-Hogwarts fics. It does have sound writing, believable characters, and a reasonably compelling mystery up to this point.

I'd say it's a good 4/5 fic right now, something we see all too rarely, but I'm going to reserve judgement for a couple more chapters at least..

 

I agree with Sesc. The detail is excellent.Titbits like the line below really make this story a good read.

By TheEndless7

I'm giving it a 4.5/5 for now.

 

There are. A lot of. Short sentences. In this story.

But a good read none the less, cheers for the rec.

 

I liked it. Solid writing and great chemistry between Harry and Hannah. It isn't often that I see a fic where three chapters only covers basically half a day, and I still feel like a lot happened when I finish reading it. Great use of detail and character interaction without getting bogged down in the minutiae of their day.

I'll definitely be watching this one for updates.

 

Great find. It's wonderfully immersive and easy to read. There are plenty of sentence fragments strewn about and a few spelling errors but nothing exceptionally cringe-worthy.

One thing that struck me as odd was how casually Harry handed over his wand to Hannah to look at. On the other hand, the conversation about wands and back-ups meshes obliquely yet with canon and reads like a slice of life.

Good character interaction and I'm looking forward to see how the plot unfolds.

4/5

 

One thing I liked about the fic was Harry's back up wand, just threw out in conversation it was yew and phoenix feather and he found it after the war... nothing suspicious at all there.

4/5.

 

I liked the first two chapters a good deal, and will certainly continue reading when I have the chance. It seems to do a really good job at characterization, and doesn't front-load information like a lot of post-Hogwarts stories do. The mixture of present and past events being presented has been excellent.

Spoiler

I especially liked the tangent about the child rapist and how that led into the beginning of what looks to be a Harry/Daphne romance. The tangent was used to characterize Harry and Hannah, immerse the reader further in the fiction of magical crime-fighting, and also lead into a romantic sub-plot. It was well planned to serve many purposes and very well executed.

At the same time, I'm not sure this is the right time to rec this story. The success or failure of a mystery is all about how the plotlines and clues come together in the finale. While it isn't necessarily essential to wait until a mystery is completed to rate it, it is difficult to rate without at least getting a good way into the plot and seeing how the different threads are beginning to come together. Right now I would rate it a 5/5 and a definite addition to the library, but it could easily fall much lower than that if the author fails to make the romance a significant addition to the story or ends the story poorly. With only three chapters, I would much prefer to wait and see where the story goes than decide whether or not to put it into the library now.

 

Right now it's a very good start, somewhere between 4 and 5 stars. I don't think there's enough written yet to give a proper rating yet, so I'll wait until another few chapters are up.

 

The idea here is decent, both on an a overall level and on a scene by scene basis (I liked the idea of Squibs integrated into the police to smoothe things ove for Auror investigations) as the author takes us through an investigation that looks like it will only get messier and darker.

The problem, however, is the dialogue and characterzation. I'm not seeing the spark of life in any character so far, and the dialogue keeps striking me as somewhat off, or jerked, especially the scenes with Luna and the Parkinsons. I can't think of a mystery without well made characters (likeable, antagonising or inbetween) working out very well. The story of what's going on might be a gripping tale of mystery, but without the characters and the interaction to sell it it has all the chances of turning out meh.

Oh, and I really did not like the flow of that pedo case flashback, right down to the way they caught him.

3/5, for now. Hoping to see a beta and some smoother writing in the future.

 

I'm all for Auror!Harry stories, but I just can't get through this one. The writing isn't bad, it's just kind of bland and not very compelling.

 

Pretty enjoyable. Believable characterizations. A few minor spelling and editing errors, but one of the better things from FFN recently.

Points for originality.

EDIT: Apparently it's in the library already. Still 3.5-4/5. Depending on where the story goes.

 

Makes me wonder if wizards and witches have designated side-along apparators or if drunken -apparating is illegal.

 

It just doesn't feel like a story playing in the magical world. The people all act like people in the mundane world with the same social conventions and interactions.

 

The characters are VERY OOC. Pansy goes to muggle night clubs, Harry is a stalwart leader in the face of battle, Hannah is an Auror... That said, the writing is well done, the character development is masterfully put together, and the reactions to events are realistic and well worded. Which is why this is in the library.

4/5