Title: Eclipse of the Sky
Author: Firefawn
Rating: M
Genre: Romance/Action Adventure
DLP Category: General
Pairing: H/OC
Chapters: 39
Words: 264,966
Updated: July 13, 2011
Published: May 2, 2006
Status: WIP
Summary: The magical world contains many species: Vampires, Werewolves, Veelas, & Metamorphs. But what if Voldemort began to harness the unique powers of each? As the Muggle & Magical worlds collide, what can Harry do to stop him? Harry & OC Remus & Tonks
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2920229/1/

This is one of my favorite stories around. It's very original, with idea's I've never seen before. The H/OC may throw a few people off but this OC is not a Mary-Sue or even close to one. Harry is becoming stronger but it's not Super!Harry by any means.

4.5/5


Checked by Minion, July 27, 2013

 

This was the fic that brought me into the Harry Potter community. A classic, and quite long, but really not all that much to boast about. Unless it's changed, then it's still about this girl who is more powahful than anyone else and does things purely with her mind, &c. &c..

Historical, but really not that challenging of a read. While the character might not be a Mary Sue, she's definately a poor plot device.

2.5/5, for historical value.

 

Might just be me but everytime I try it I just cant get into it. Im sure its very good if you can get into it. I just cant.

 

Enh, I always thought that the sacrifice with the power made it not that great. The power has not been that great so far either :/

I can definitely see how a lot of members is this community wouldn't like it though. It's Harry Centric but it focuses on other characters a fair amount as well.

 

Its alright although you can't call it classic

 

I just finished reading this. I like it, quite a bit. Grammatically, there are some issues, whorl instead of whirl, one case had mealy instead of melee, but for the most part it was good. Story wise, I think it is pretty interesting, especially since this story has Voldemort being a very prominent villain, rather than someone who is just kind of...there. I will admit that the OC's powers are a bit much, but at the same time, I agree that the drawbacks far exceed the power. Overusing it has a very high possibility of killing her, which is why she is out of commision from taking out one or two people. A definite 4/5 from me, would be 5/5 if not for the rather jarring grammar mistakes.

 

Yeah it not brilliant by any means but i suppose it did introduce alot of ideas that even now have not become cliche really. Some definite grammar problems but apart from that it flows quite well, overall a very decent and very long fic.

 

I never really noticed any glaring issues. But I generally don't notice them when just reading.

 

first couple of chapters were very good, but there's just something about it that makes you go 'eeeehhhhh I'll finish it later.'

3/5

 

Tried it but first few chapters never really caught my attention. Too many OC POV's + weak canonish Harry + Marry Sue killed it for me. I'm not gonna mark it because a nicely written story like this deserves a trip to the library.

 

My sentiment excatly.

 

An old story isn't automatically become a classic.

It's just an old story, written by someone with a serviceable writing style. Speaking of which, it tries to be poetic but the language is too dry.

The OC is a huge problem - let me enumerate that she is a member of an uber-exotic-powerful species concocted by the author that effortlessly outclasses anything found in canon. She's apparently kept as a pet by Hagrid.

And the intentional vagueness is a further blow. The term Reach appears first in the first chapter - and then the author leaves it unexplained.

It reappears next in CHAPTER 13.

In a story where the average chapter length is approximately 6666 words.

And the term still isn't explained. What the fuck is going on here?

That's not mystery - it's contrived, deliberate withholding information from the readers that the characters already know, done infuriatingly and without the least subtlety in the hopes that the reader will keep going out of curiosity.

Oooooooooooooooooooooooooooo how cryptic. Pity firefawn didn't linger more on the matter.

The base premise, Voldemort seeking to combine magical powers of various creatures, has some promise, but it is executed unimaginably badly.

1.5/5, rounded down to a generous 2 for the purposes of rating the thread.

Don't read this if you read Harry-centric only OR other-character-centric stories.

 

It is not abandoned, and it's still updating. Now it has about 690k words, as of today.

 

Holy shit, this was the first fic I ever read. I remember loving it for a while, then coming to DLP and learning what good FF was.

Still, might have to check it out again, apparently the author has rewritten chapters 1-12.

 

Not terribly impressed the author is withholding already written chapter updates until people review the story, and threatening to abandon it if that doesn't happen. (See A/N at the end of the latest chapter). I haven't read this, but at 740k words i'm rather hesitant to start if that red flag has the usual correlation with quality.