Oftentimes when I read a chapter from an ongoing story that hasn't been updated in a bit, I find myself severely disappointed. A lot of fanfic authors I've read seem to try to give something extra if they hadn't updated in awhile, some little bonus to say "I care." Well, I'm fine with that, whatever. However, it tends to detract from the story itself because it doesn't belong with the original flow (i.e. "well since I took so long to update I added this action scene, even though I planned on adding it next chapter").

Good to see it's business as usual for the Lords Black. Solid chapter, moved the story along quite a bit while still retaining that almost whimsical attitude of every chapter. I'm looking forward to seeing Sarah's reaction to Harry's truths.

My only disappointments were little to no unexpected pranking (James was obviously going to get it), no Remus/Bella interaction, and Ginny seems to be developing into a bit of a wuss this chapter.


EDIT: And congratulations about your mother.

 

Good to hear about your mother being better.

Good chapter, very funny, and it moved the plot along a lot. Like Joschneide said, the only thing that I missed was no Remus, Bella, and Tonks. Those three normally seem to be in some of the funniest scenes for me, at least. Very solid chapter though.

 

LOL.. I finally decide to leave a review.

Awesome chapter, Nonjon! Completely epic. I particularly liked Lily and the Tramp Stamp comment, though some others had me rolling in my chair in pain and amusement.

And though she hasn't had much screen time, Sarah is win as well. Harry/Sarah! <3

 

Traitor! You are a symbol for Harry/Lily, don't betray the cause now. Although I will agree Harry/Sarah would be amusing, if only to see the reactions.

I'm glad to hear about your mom doing well, hopefully she beat the big C for good.

The chapter it self was full of lols, it as a compliment to your writing that you are able to come back after two months, and still deliver an excellent chapter.

 

Well I can't genuinely care about someone I've never met, but I am happy that life is treating you better by way of removing that particular stress from you. Family with serious problems always sucks bigtime for those left helpless to help.

My favorite part of this chapter? "I slept with Gin Weasley and all I got was one lousy memory charm (and a little itching no one can explain)." I also quite like the idea of selling the Horcuxes (Horcruces? assuming a latin base a plural "-x" word becomes "-ces", not really important) to the highest bidder lets them be good guys with out actually getting their hands dirty.

All that said, THANK YOU for making some believable horcrux protections. I much prefer Grindewald's fidelius bunker and the "you gotta be stupid to find it" tomb in the desert to raiding Letrange's vault with the help of the Griphook the all powerful or waltzing down to your local RoR and just asking for it.

 

Ok, so I finally made the time to give this a read, and I have to say...

This is fucking excellent!!! I love the direction this has been going with all the laughs, especially involving Hermione and That Fucker. Pure win.

Can't wait to see more about the temple and whatnot either. 5/5

 

I hate the love fest going on in here. You're so funny.... such good writing... plot... characters... blah blah blah. Well, I'm going to go out on a limb and say I hated it!

No I didn't.
I do want to see a little more James (Prongs) hopefully it's his turn for some redemption. Or he could just dig himself in deeper. That might be more fun.

On a final note... you suck!....no you don't.

Mac.

 

Just noticed the new chapter. Loved it. Didn't you say there was only going to be 30 chapters or something?

 

I gotta say I was pissed you missed out the tomb. After the cliffy before hand which made it sound really cool and the few hints dropped in this chapter it was a big let down. Also a little let down that the rape and pillage of Malfoy manor is so low key. I know you said something about them having a ring on but couldnt they have knocked them out locked them in the safe and then cleaned the house out.

 

Yeah, only a few chapters more. My estimate of 30 still sounds about right.

As for the tomb, I didn't want the whole sneaking and cheating their way past traps to get too repetitive. So I skipped over that scene, hinted at it being more outrageous than how I would've written it, and described how they were breaking into the Malfoys, since that part was more important.

Same thing with people's suggestions on how they could've gotten through the Malfoys easier. Of course there are easier ways. Ways to have subdued Lucius and Narcissa, or broken in. But the "Death Eater Bandits" don't use Death Eater type thuggery. Imperius curses, kidnapping, stunning, memory charms, etc... that kind of stuff is cheating to a thief. It's also part of the dichotomy so that the Lord Blacks aren't suspects. The Lord Blacks aren't elegant or clever. They are brash, blunt, and lacking subtlety.

The number of reviewers with similar concerns makes me think I need to be clearer on thieving methods and public perception. Oh well. Just a few more chapters to go.

 

I think people will allow their own preconceived notions of how they want it to occur to effect anything they read, regardless of how the author attempts to characterize it.

For instance, I see Harry's facade of brashness as an attempt to hide his own subtlety and the necessities of being subtle about who he really is. As for Sirius, I see him as just not caring one bit if people know who he really is or where he came from.

But Harry being subtle towards the Malfoys? I hope that never happens.

 

"No worries. I doubt it’s sharp enough even if I wanted to."

Comedy. Gold.

Spoiler

I've been thinking for a while now that there's a very strong case to be made for That Fucker being Harry (the same one that came through the veil, just to be clear), who has traveled back into this dimension's past. The casual mention of time travel spells that can send you backwards or forwards just reinforces that feeling. Of course, there's an equal case to be made for it not being Harry in any way, shape, or form. I'm sure whoever it is, it will be funny, and I'm not one of those nuts that obsess about their pet theories, so I'll just to sit back, watch and enjoy, either way.

 

Nah my bets on Draco.

Thats how he got into the blood safe. It has been said many times no one has ever broken into one before and even Voldemort and Dumbledore couldn't break it. That fucker said even he couldn't break in.. thus he didnt he just needed to bleed on it.

The only way this falls apart is that fucker appeared when Draco as 8 or 9...

 

All I can say is that I'm having a wonderful time with it. Every chapter surprises me: I haven't made a single accurate prediction yet.
And it can't be Draco - he's too busy doing THINGS to Goyle...

 

Nonjon, I beg you never to reveal who That Fucker is.

It'll add so much style to your story.

 

Nonjon, I'm not above tracking you down if you take Jon's advice... If I don't find out That Fucker's identity then I will go nuts.

 

I want nonjon to identify That Fucker, because I have a couple of possibilities. I want nonjon to be able to defend his choice.

 

I'm sorry to say that won't be happening. Though I will be drawing it out an wee bit more.

Frankly, I think knowing who That Fucker is makes him that much better. Or maybe it's just that I like knowing as an author who is aware of how much it's bugging readers not knowing.

Just a couple more chapters and you'll find out. Not in the next chapter. It's possible at the end of the one after that. It's also possible that at the end of the one after that I'll instead just leave you with an absolutely horrible cliffy of being moments from revealing who That Fucker is.

Yeah. That sounds a lot like me.

 

Poohead.


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