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Abandoned A matter of force by Carrotglace - PG13

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Gogolu, Jun 22, 2007.

  1. Gogolu

    Gogolu Third Year

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    Shit happens.

    Review or not. This thread is about it and this story. Comment on it.

    This is not on your guys likes and dislikes on personal level.

    Plus, you are breaking 5th rule of this forum.
     
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  2. Darius

    Darius 13/m/box

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    Whoo, good thing were stopping the 5th rule of the forum and not actually doing something we shouldn't and breaking it.

    I was scared there for a moment.
     
  3. Snarf

    Snarf Squanchin' Party Bro! ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    And you are breaking almost every unspoken rule by being such a theatrical faggot. Now, please, STFU because you are starting to piss me off.

    Even so, I give you a point for knowing the rules. 1/5
     
  4. Klael

    Klael Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    This carrot guy obviously has quite the following amongst the pleebs. Unfortunately for them, we have higher standards.

    1/5. A cesspool of uninspired sludge. A weak pool of characters and unoriginal use of plot cliches. Altogether uninteresting and a waste of time.

    And, Gogolu, take some advice. Don't antagonize the higher-ups and veterans of this site. No matter if you're right or wrong, it will sour you to them. They will make your life here unbearable and won't let up until you leave or are driven to say something worthy of banning.
     
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  5. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    No.
    That is not a sentence, it's grammatically incorrect in more than a few ways, and you didn't even spell "breaking" correctly.

    That's against the rules, as you know - seeing as you're so keen on reading them.

    These threads are for reviews, not for authors to fap off to their fics at every interval or do shitty impersonations of The Twilight Zone.
     
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  6. Teal_Thanatos

    Teal_Thanatos First Year

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    uh, if 'Gogolu' was the author, wouldn't this be down in a different section of the forum?

    AFAIK, Carrotglace on Anifics hasn't mentioned this forum at all untill we told him about this thread.
     
  7. Gogolu

    Gogolu Third Year

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    Wow.

    Thanks for posts, that helped with viewings of the thread a lot.

    I was hoping for reviews but oh well. More people will have a chance o read this story thanks to you guys.

    As for my rating: 5/5.

    Pluses: Good style of writing, interesting plot inventions, long chapters, for so many crossovers all is sticking together nice.

    Minuses: Author doesn't know Harry Potter books as good as I would like but he corrects his mistakes if pointed out.

    BTW: This is not my story Xiph0. It should be obvious thanks to the first post.
     
  8. PsyckoSama

    PsyckoSama Groundskeeper

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    Carrotglace... that can mean only one thing.

    It will be an endless, illogical, overpowered mess of a story that still manages to be amusing enough to keep you reading regardless of your self... somewhat like a train wreck full of clowns.
     
  9. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    Then stop raping the authors cock itt.
     
  10. Gogolu

    Gogolu Third Year

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    This story is still here?

    I thought that after the week or two it would be moved to other place in library.

    Other spectrum of readers hopefully will review and give few stars till that happens..
     
  11. Marie M

    Marie M Raptured to Hell

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    It has 3 stars and it'll end up in trash bin, where it belongs.
     
  12. Klael

    Klael Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    Not necessarily. The trash bin is for borderline readable fics--not good enough for the library, but hey, they're not TOTALLY unreadable. This one, though, will simply be deleted--as it should be.
     
  13. Marie M

    Marie M Raptured to Hell

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    Well, I already gave it one star, if 5 more people will give it the same rating that maybe...
     
  14. KenderCleric

    KenderCleric Lord of Plot Bunnies

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    2/5

    It's not the worst I've seen, but it's close. Multi-crossovers are just never worth the digital space it takes to post them.
     
  15. Klael

    Klael Headmaster DLP Supporter

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    A crossover is a dangerous attempt to make. There's a fine line between plausible combination of universes and chaotic quagmire of rotting sewage. You can't even really toe the line. You have to stay on the good side.

    This thing is like a mile and a half deep in the quagmire.
     
  16. Gogolu

    Gogolu Third Year

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    DarkSov: After 3 posts its obvious you don't like it and I'm sure others know it by now.

    Of course if you even tried to read it before making opinions you would know that it may contain a lot of crossovers but they are gradually inserted to give reader time to adjust. And this mix is not interfering with storytelling.

    Grammatic and style correctness should give it at last 2 stars even if you think that rest is "chaotic quagmire of rotting sewage".

    Author has over 10 years of writing experience in making crossovers so "quagmire" it is not.
     
  17. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    Like fingers up someones ass? :s

    Hahahaha...ahahahahah

    Oh wait, you actually mean to imply that fanfiction authors usually improve?
     
  18. Gogolu

    Gogolu Third Year

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    So you are saying that authors on this forum and anywhere else stay on the same level?

    That's very high opinion you have of fanfiction and people that make effort to entertain us at cost of their time.

    It sounds like you boyfriends are not giving you any? I'm sure it will be better in due time. Maybe you will even discover women in the near future.
     
  19. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Yoda Admin

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    Most of the time? Yes.

    Fuck them. I rarely ask someone to write, they do it of their own volition. I'm simply here to judge.

    Keep trying, Carrotglace.
     
  20. LT2000

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    Lawlz, the 'omfg gets a gurlfriend!!1!1!1' card. Fail.
     
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