Hmm. I had scanned the thread and gathered what I was going to read, so the perspective is accordingly. Also, don't expect brilliant insights, I don't feel very brilliant currently. Liked the thoughts you put into it, however. Anyway, no scene breaks worked for me, mostly. The thing is that a scene break breaks up a scene, and this is all one scene, so you'd expect none. Instead, the text needs to make clear when a skip happens, and it does that, mostly. You only get confused when it doesn't. So by and large, it works. As for the content ... Spoiler The heaviest impact for me isn't the many time jumps, per se. What hit me was when you explicitly are in one time line, and then it progresses through the years and you get a direct impression of the amount of time she invests. There are a few instances of that in the text, and they are the best parts by far, IMO. It's one thing to pull a video game save-game approach and replay certain scenes to get different outcomes, but quite another to invest years in each try. All in all, haven't seen the premise around, liked the progression and execution, but dunno that I want to give it a 5, without being really able to tell what it would need to get one. Not helpful, I know, but that's just how it is. 4/5 definitely, though.