I wrote this just this morning -- live recording, meaning i sang and played guitar at the same time. I recorded three separate versions, but this is the first one (first time played through ever); i found it more raw, and I kind of liked it. The gravelly voice is a byproduct of too much smoking the night before, and too much coffee the morning of. I like to take care of myself.

Lyrics --

we sat in the loft, drooling the stargazers we were
minds were split in two, on the top floor we just knew
clipped (yellow) eyes and yellow face, we gave way to the chase
the man inside did not know blindfolded he did as he was told

if you'd like some, just to buy some, that might alleviate me
if you'd like some, just to buy some, that might relieve a me
I might not feel so temperamental if you drop with me

That guy on the outside was not me as I meant him to be
we sat in the loft drooling husks we all drew our marks

if you'd like some, just to buy some, that might relieve a me
if you'd like some, just to try some, you might understand me


------
it's sort of about what i felt i've been going through lately. too much homework with AP classes, and my only social contact seems to be in the way of sex and drugs. Seriously. Maybe if you like this song, I'll put more of ma shit up here. I'm prepared to be flamed too. Gimme your best bitches.

LINK --- http://media.putfile.com/If-Youd-Like-Some

 

That was pretty bad ass, buddy. I got what you were talking about far before I read the rest of your post. Definitely put up more of your work here. It's different and refreshing.

 

Influences ~ Nirvana?

Sounds like your trying to sound like em.

I liked it.

 

S'okay I like the lyrics and ditto Kai Shek, you are heading into neo-grunge territory.

 

i don't try to sound like anybody.
it just comes out and i write it down.

influences are probably in line with adam green, noah and the whale, kimya dawson, mighty mighty bosstones, etc.

thank you both though.

 

Woah. I really, really liked it. The lyrics were awesome, and the guitar worked nicely. I thought the ending could use a little more though, but that's just me. You have a pretty gnarly voice man.

 

help me out? if i post more songs, should i start a new thread? or just continue them off in this one.

and thank you all. i actually perform and write more mellow stuff, usually. i was hungover and angry this morning, wrote this, liked it, and posted it. thanks for the positive feedback!

 

www.myspace.com/mimingminds

i would have edited the original post, but it won't let me.
sorry for the delay; tell me what you all think.

 

Not bad. I really like your music, but your style of singing just isn't my favorite. Nice job regardless.

 

Wow, this was pretty fantastic. I like the lyrics, and unlike AntiChrist, I actually really like your vocals. I can definitely hear the Nirvana influences, along with Moldy Peaches and that kind of music (not a bad thing, considering these are some of my favorites). Definitely keep posting stuff- I'm gonna go listen to some of the other stuff you linked.

 

Yea Adam Green is a huge influence; he's a family friend, so i've went from idolizing him as a kid, to really respecting him now.

I recommend listening to Alicia Conprecia on my myspace. For those who didn't like the gravelly tones of my voice above, my myspace is more relaxed.

------ Alicia Conprecia

we was going in and out of outer space
waiting for the minute we could deface
alicia conpricia
she did appreciate
allicia conprecia
she did wait

the wise men oh they did not speak
their secrets buried underneath a heap
of convulated conversation
they did not speak
coalescing revelation
they did seek

i'm not the man you do seek
in and out the haze we did see
eek eek went the door as it jammed
waiting for the end of the world to slam

controlled armageddon
controlled we forgetting

every moment the clock strikes twelve
i'm holding onto my personal hell

no sleep for me
so till then i see
my alicia conprecia
no red lines
alica conprecia

the end of time
no time seen
the bells just chime
for we do see

the end of the world
for what we treasured most
it was the holy ghost
that proved our host
till then we see
we're not in the see

 

Well, I like the songs you have on your myspace more than the first one. I think it sounds better after a few listens, so I guess it's just growing on me.

 

i'm no chain smoker. but i find the herb does give something to my 'art' in more ways then one. my voice included.

thanks guys. i really appreciate it. everything i write is usually done within minutes; i find putting to much thought into a song can sometimes hinder it. the exception to that is if i'm writing something purely for music, or i spend a few days passively playing with a riff until i get an idea. you know.