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Abandoned Across Dimensions: Parting Reality's Veil by Taliath - T - Naruto

Discussion in 'Naruto' started by Kardikek, Feb 9, 2008.

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  1. liath

    liath Seventh Year

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    May 25, 2008 #121
    I'd just like to let everyone know that I've posted my fic up at FFN.

    It's been thoroughly beta'd, so I think you'll find any and all errors eradicated. If not, do tell me and I'll fix it up.

    In any case, here it is:

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    New story from Taliath,

    Category: Naruto
    Title: Across Dimensions: Parting Reality's Veil
    Genre: General/Adventure
    Rating: Fiction
    Rated: T
    Summary: AU/AD. Namikaze Naruto has led a charmed life under the protection of the Fourth Hokage. But now, after sacrificing himself for his home, he finds himself waking up in an entirely new world, surrounded by a village that despises him.

    URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4277029/1/

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    I added more to the title because there was already a Naruto fic titled "Across Dimensions" and I didn't want anyone to be confused. Lol.

    More importantly, I'd really appreciate if you guys could leave a review on the chapter. ^^ I know I'm asking a lot, but I'd seriously appreciate it.

    Well, that's all for now. I'm sorry I haven't been able to bring you any updates. Real life and all that jazz. *sigh*

    In any case, please read and leave a comment. I'd greatly appreciate it.

    Thanks in advance!

    ~taliath
     
    Last edited: May 25, 2008
  2. Rahkesh Asmodaeus

    Rahkesh Asmodaeus THUNDAH Bawd Admin DLP Supporter

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    May 25, 2008 #122
    Lol, you bitch. I thought you had updated for a minute.
     
  3. Ksai

    Ksai Third Year

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    May 29, 2008 #123
    Any news on an update of this story?

    We would love to read a new chapter from you.
     
  4. Lord Ravenclaw

    Lord Ravenclaw DLP Overlord Admin DLP Supporter

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    May 29, 2008 #124
    Read the post from a mere 3 days ago.

    I don't think the author asked for update requests, but rather comments on the story. Next time it'll be a tempban.
     
  5. MrINBN

    MrINBN Unspeakable

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    Jun 10, 2008 #125
    You mistook Ibiki, the head of Torture and Interrogation for Ibuki, the toilet cleaner. >_>
     
  6. Chime

    Chime Dark Lord

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    Jun 15, 2008 #126
    Hmm. Your Naruto is interesting.

    He's morally... liberal. So much so, he'd be willing to use Ino as leverage for her father (doesn't he know who she is? Did he never meet her in his other life? I'd think he'd atleast have some hesistance there). Yet, he still looks down upon the council elders as a bunch of 'old farts' – even though I think, using an innocent as leverage is just something the council would do.

    It'll be interesting to see how or if Naruto will make friends with any people his age.

    Good chapter.
     
  7. Rahkesh Asmodaeus

    Rahkesh Asmodaeus THUNDAH Bawd Admin DLP Supporter

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    Jun 15, 2008 #127
    Chime, he might not know Ino. She's probably still in the Academy, or just a genin in his universe, while he's an Elite Jounin. There's no reason for him to know her.

    Awesome chapter, Taliath.
     
  8. Apothem

    Apothem Third Year

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    Very awesome. And, he probably meant "Think of all the lives you're saving, even your daughter would be in danger without this information.", not "Do it, or we'll kill your family."
     
  9. Mage Ronin

    Mage Ronin Groundskeeper DLP Supporter

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    Jun 15, 2008 #129
    damn, why did you end it there? i really wanted to see Team 7's reaction to Naruto being a jounin...should be fun.

    Anyway, good chapter. and yeah, your Naruto is very intriguing. I think you captured his characterization perfectly if we use Itachi and Kakashi's personality at that age and factor in his father's influence.

    keep up the good work!
     
  10. Tofferson

    Tofferson First Year

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    Jun 17, 2008 #130
    I agree with Apothem. That's how I see it as well.
     
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  11. Kardikek

    Kardikek Groundskeeper

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    Jul 22, 2008 #131
    I know you're extremely busy but still, I'm being selfish and I hope you'll still have time to keep writing.. :(
     
  12. Rahkesh Asmodaeus

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    Nov 13, 2008 #132
    Across Dimensions: Parting Reality's Veil by Taliath - T

    Title: Across Dimensions: Parting Reality's Veil
    Author: Taliath
    Rating: T
    Summary: AU/AD. Namikaze Naruto has led a charmed life under the protection of the Fourth Hokage. But now, after sacrificing himself for his home, he finds himself waking up in an entirely new world, surrounded by a village that despises him.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4277029/1/

    DLP Link: http://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=8575

    A fic written by our very own androgynous member, liath. Simply put, it's quite amazing. A strong Naruto from a different dimension... why am I even doing this? Obviously every Naruto fan on these forums has read the fic.

    One last thing.

    UPDATE LIATH. :awesome
     
  13. liath

    liath Seventh Year

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    Dec 18, 2008 #133
    Mm. Just thought I'd let everyone know that since my semester's nearly over, I've begun finishing up the next chapter.

    For those who are overly curious, I've posted it in the Work by Author section of DLP. I'd appreciate any and all comments to help shore up potential holes.

    ^^ I'm not giving up on this fic.
     
    Last edited: Dec 18, 2008
  14. Knox

    Knox The Last Remnant DLP Supporter

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    Dec 18, 2008 #134
    HA! I has used mah epic skillz to force you to update!
     
  15. Knox

    Knox The Last Remnant DLP Supporter

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    Dec 18, 2008 #135
    Sree can bow to my skillz cause I made the Unthinkable happen, I made him update. :)
     
  16. Kardikek

    Kardikek Groundskeeper

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    Dec 18, 2008 #136
    Niice! You're lucky though, we have our exams in early January meaning another ruined christmas :p

    Story:
    Well done, really looked forward to the confrontation. Would have been nice putting the rest of his team in place but I guess that'll come in due time.

    Did Kakashi seriously not know that Naruto was the son of the 4th in this universe? Or did he have some mental issues? Maybe next chapter we'll get to know this?

    Only complaint was how easy it seemed for Kakashi to get in range with the Raikiri. He was in a pit made by a wind dragon, he seemingly jumped out and bumrushed Naruto up a tree before he could react. No Kawarimi, no jumping away, no shunshin, nothing. If they were in melee range I could see it but not like this.

    Loved the update though, woot!
     
  17. Apothem

    Apothem Third Year

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    Dec 18, 2008 #137
    I will blame this update on you.

    You, sir, are a god.
     
  18. Janus

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    Dec 18, 2008 #138
    *Gasp!*

    If I wasn't snowed in right now, I'd totally read the update. Must... get... connection...
     
  19. Cxjenious

    Cxjenious Dark Lord

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    Dec 18, 2008 #139
    You inspire me to do bigger and better things liath. Your fight scenes are good; rather fast paced, but that is what I imagine ninja battles to be like.
     
  20. Gizmore

    Gizmore Minister of Swedish Affairs DLP Supporter

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    Dec 18, 2008 #140
    how are you posting w/o a connection? :D
     
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