It took about half an hour to get each post off and FFnet isn't updated. TFF wouldn't load at all.

 

I thought this story was dead. Glad it's still got some life in it. I especially liked this chapter.

A different approach to the 'alternate dimension' - Naruto's not trying to vainly hide his identity from Sarutobi and Kakashi, and it's nice.

4/5 though, because I don't know where this is going - if it ever gets somewhere

 

awesome awesome. its for stories like this that i read fics!

continue with this brilliance, and i cant wait for the next update.

 

I'm sorry; my level of fanboyism over your work has reached critical levels and has also left me unable to provide any useful statement.

I am left with a generic response to an update of the sexiest story in Naruto fanfic history;

Cant wait till the next update!

 

sweat, blood and tears

Not sure but do you mean had to?

It seems strange that Naruto would refer to himself as the boy.

Waiver

Inoichi's personality was done superbly. However the way you had Naruto recognize hope in the exchange, it was easy to connect that he wanted Naruto to succeed, and from that one could extrapolate the connection to the good old days and the 4th. By overexposure it sort of ruined the super spy feeling you wanted to portray.

Merry christmas mate!

 

I'd glomp you if I could.

However, since I can't:

I didn't find any errors, but then again, I wasn't looking for them. That just means that if there are any errors, they're small. I like Inoichi's characterization - he seems IC from the little we've seen of him in the manga, or rather, what I would imagine him to be like. Ino was spot on, but it is your Naruto that takes the cake. All the cake. And the brownies.

EDIT: To Kardikek

It isn't had because he hasn't had the meeting yet - that was why he went to the Hokage's office in the first place.

 

Hmmmm, nice chapter.


I think it would have been interesting if Inoichi was more Suspicious of Naruto being there with his daughter. Like thinking about making her go into Kabuto's mind in his stead.

 

No grounds for such suspicion exist. Ino's an inexperienced genin without mental conditioning for such techniques, and though she knows the basic arts, no authority would approve it.

Great chapter, flows impeccably well. Agreed with Cxj - wasn't looking for errors, though caught a few typos. Characterization is well-done. This fic is at the top of my list.

Edit: Was Naruto's relation to the Yondaime announced at the council meeting?

 

I registered just to read this on here because it is busy being betad before being released on FFnet or something like that... I've been lurking for years though.

Great stuff, cant wait for the next chaper and, according to what you said about hoping to finish that next week, faster updates in the future .

Keep up the good work!

 

It's odd that no one's commented yet on this update.

I didn't find any grammatical mistakes. Spotless by my count. I'll reread this later some more and edit my posts in accordance with my plot concerns, but it looks a fine ending to another chapter so far.

Spotless characterization. It's good to see Naruto having trouble reconciling his world with this one and Jiraiya grounding him into this reality; a successful display of vulnerability. Here's a nitpick: doesn't "sharp pain" imply a fleeting sensation? Is it accurate to say a sharp pain can coil in one's stomach?

 

Wow. That's really all I can muster right now. I jumped on here to see if there was any decent new fanfiction and was totally unprepared for this. I read all the way through. Across Dimensions has to be the funnest, most action packed, and most original Naruto story I have ever had the chance to read. I giggled insanely in glee many times throughout this story, and you have no idea just how difficult it is to make me do that.

Your style of writing is thrilling and your ideas are just so different from the generic, run-of-the-mill Naruto stories you find spread across FFN that I'm still smiling stupidly even while writing this post.

You need to get on IRC, mate, so I can praise your awesomeness.

 

One of the few fic's that get better with the time, rather then opposite.
Hope we will have more updates in the near future.

I even started to read the Manga to understand everything rather then have my sister explain things for me.
Thank god she is a Naruto nerd and have most of them.

 

With the last scene...does this mean the Sandaime now knows that Naruto is from a different dimension?

edit: Ah re-read the last part.

Sarutobi was watching Naruto perform Rasengan, and not spying on Jiraiya + Naruto's little heart to heart. Got a bit confused for a sec.

 

No one commented because everyone already knows the story is orgasm-inducing.

 

I saw it was updated on FF.net, then noticed it was the chapter that has been here for two weeks

 

Another update would make my day.

 

Mine as well. So, I've got an idea! Everyone, let's be verrrry quiet on this thread until we receive an update, and post comments in the Other Fandoms thread instead!

 

The beta'd version of "ANBU Arc 02: Hatake Kakashi" has been posted on FFN.

 

This may be the most well-written Naruto story I have ever read.

Having said that, I'm not sure where this is going.

Bringing a super!Naruto into the picture just to thwart the Sand/Sound invasion - an invasion that failed, by the way, with just regular old Naruto and a very hands-off showing by Jiraiya in the manga - doesn't strike me as an amazing plot.

Orochimaru's and the Kazekage's skills and abilities are blown way out of proportion in my opinion.

Remember that the Kazekage is the guy who tried and failed to have his young son assassinated for years. Everything about the dude is fail.

Again, while the whole revealing his identity thing is somewhat original, it takes all of the intrigue and difficulty for the protagonist out of the plot.

I imagine that eventually you could introduce the more powerful characters into the story, but by then the whole dimension-hopping aspect wouldn't really matter since we're talking a few years down the road according to the canon timeline - plenty of time for even a canon!Naruto to improve to epic levels.

Unless you're going to have Pain and Madara attack over the weekend, I don't see where the conflict in this story lies. All the dimension travel amounts to is another device to super-power Naruto.

I suppose this story could be said to be more about Naruto's interactions with others with a bit of fighting thrown in, but even there I don't see the real plot.

Naruto went from shit to instant win in a day. He's a jounin and a high-ranking member of ANBU now. Why should he have to prove anything to anyone? I mean he doesn't even want to be the Hokage, so where's the struggle?

I'm not sure where this story is going, but it seems to me that it's just going to be another super!Naruto doing super things.