1. Hi there, Guest

    Only registered users can really experience what DLP has to offer. Many forums are only accessible if you have an account. Why don't you register?
    Dismiss Notice
  2. Hey DLP authors, there's a bit less than a month left to wow us with your story about Daphne or Azkaban.

    The Author applies the words to the paper or it gets the hose. Write or die! The more the merrier.

    Click here for more information!
    Dismiss Notice

Abandoned Age of Deception by Takeda Lee - M

Discussion in 'Dark Arts' started by The-Hyphenated-One, Aug 7, 2007.

  1. Calz

    Calz Oh, I Got the Mic Now!

    Joined:
    Jan 17, 2007
    Messages:
    309
    Updated yesterday, sorry for lateness, had some computer issues.
     
  2. Kang

    Kang Denarii Host DLP Supporter

    Joined:
    Nov 5, 2007
    Messages:
    1,205
    Location:
    England
    Well actually Voldemort said that the basilisk answers only to him and his blood line. Sorry not meant to be a flame but a simple correction:D
     
  3. Bane of Shinigami

    Bane of Shinigami Muggle

    Joined:
    Jan 13, 2008
    Messages:
    4
    Spam Prose Spam

    This story has so much damn prose it makes it boring as hell. I mean its great to expand and all but you can overdo like some published fantasy novels.
     
  4. Solomon

    Solomon Heir

    Joined:
    Jul 11, 2007
    Messages:
    2,744
    Location:
    Minnesota
    ...This post makes no sense. How does a story have too much prose? Do you even have any idea what prose is? Honestly...
     
  5. Joschneide

    Joschneide Groundskeeper

    Joined:
    Jan 11, 2008
    Messages:
    343
    I can only assume you meant either three things:
    1) Too much dialogue between characters (which in itself makes no sense; character interaction is a key to any story, thus it's hard to have too much).
    2) You misunderstand the term prose and actually meant the author was too verbose at times, which I almost understand.
    3) It's almost too poetic. But if that's the case, I'm not sure how you relate that to other published fantasy.

    Doesn't matter to me as I myself find this story very entertaining, it's a unique fic so even if it becomes long-winded at times, I still enjoy it.

    EDIT: I can't spell.
     
    Last edited: Feb 3, 2008
Loading...