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Oneshot Ah Keeper, Keeper by Timunderwood9 - T

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Unexpectations, Jan 16, 2014.

  1. Unexpectations

    Unexpectations Squib

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    Title: Ah Keeper, Keeper by Timunderwood9
    Author: Timunderwood9
    Rating: T
    Genre: Tragedy
    DLP Category: Dark Arts
    Pairing: No Pairing
    Status: Complete
    Summary: After Hermione commits suicide Harry makes a horrific discovery - I hope future stories won't be this dark, also this does not involve love potions and Ron, you probably haven't read it before.

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    Just a word about this story, it's very short. But I quite like it and I think you fine people here at DLP will as well. There's not much else to say, except that its only ~900 words and you should just read it yourself.
     
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  2. Jibril

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    Boring, no hook, and too short. The author can ejaculat over 10 000 words in his/her profile but cant be arsed to post more than a short drabble, that gives us nothing to work with? I'm disapointed, because the title gave me hope for something deeling with Harry Potter and Dungeon Keeper.

    Right now, I will not give a numerical score, but in my opinion it should be posted in Almost Recommended.
     
  3. Zennith

    Zennith Pebble Wrestler ~ Prestige ~

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    Yeah. 900 Words is just not enough to work with. It's a drabble, but that's about all.
     
  4. Clerith

    Clerith Ahegao Emperor ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    "Forensics" "spell residue" z.z

    900 words? There's nothing there. It was a worthless drabble.

    2/5.
     
  5. Photon

    Photon Order Member

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    It was just random plot bunny, nothing more. Based on interesting idea but execution was lacking.

    Not really boring (it is really hard to make drabble boring) - but it is still drabble not a proper story.
     
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