That Gnawing Worm, Cancer by Nugar updated, and Nugar has not lost his touch for comedy.

 

Obviously a coherent backstory is better than the alternative, but sometimes it just doesn't really matter to the story being told, and trying to throw in little changes to "fix" things just keeps reminding the reader that the problem exists.

 

In regards to Burn up he appears to have made the Arsmaster chapter an omake.

 

And now I'm curious what Arsemaster's power would be.

 

Explosive flatulance.

A thinker power that finds the opponent's raw nerve.

Whatever an anti-social engineer power is called.

 

Burn Up updated again with a much better chapter than the previous one; it might actually be my favourite 'quiet' scene from any Worm story.

 

Divided Updated~

Lisa is with the Court... also Parahuman feudal system is a-go!

https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/divided-worm-au.396325/page-14#post-22918500

 

I hated his master stranger screening. He didn't convince me, as a reader, that this was how such screening might happen. The update belongs in a crack fic. The copy paste from Blade Runner and Fallout 3 only worsens his case.

He needs some taste. A sense of subtlety. And to recognise when his characters are behaving so absurdly that the readers start rejecting the reality he's crafting.

I've read the edited SB version today, and it's a little improved, although the tangent he sends the test giver on (as an attack against SB's mod decision to censor him) is eye rolling in its irrelevance and preachiness.

 

I can see why he wrote the scene the way he did - wanting to see peaks and troughs of emotion and reaction from a potentially mastered person (Also, I always think of BDSM when I see M/S in text). Even without a baseline for that person, I suppose it could be used to say "it looks like this person probably hasn't had anything fiddled around with upstairs", based on deviation from the norm... But I'm not sure how many trial cases they would have of dying female teenagers. Who are also parahumans, but shhhhh.

I also really dislike the way SB and SV often end up rewriting scenes that people hate. Because once the author starts rewriting, they often keep doing it. I've seen it on other sites more often, but the author starts thinking that maybe they need to clean things up, and the story just stops progressing - just the same two or three chapters polished a few times, before losing interest. And if it is as a result of a mod hammer, then you see 'fighting' back, such as the useless railing at the machine in this chapter.

I feel it could have worked much better as "And then Taylor left the master/stranger screening room, feeling quite violated. She was happy Lisa was supposedly safe, although she didn't trust the PRT to be telling the truth on that".

 

When I was doing Goblin Queen's Interview with Taylor by the Protechtorate/PRT as well as the Vista fight scene, I did a rewrite because valid points were brought up... and the new scenes worked much better.

So, there are valid cases for rewrites.

 

That's because everything you write should be re-written. Ho ho ho.


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I don't know why I enjoy giving you a hard time Biigoh. It's all bad jokes, not serious.

To be on topic. As Yak said, the new chapter in That Gnawing Worm was garbage and was re-worked to be below average... but have a terrible feel to it instead. It was really a shame, but it is written by the guy who wrote People Lie. The story all about non-humans pretending to be humans.

 

That's completely true. Plot holes, OOCness, shoddy scenes in general - they can all be reworked.

But I've often, not always, found that doing a rewrite means the writer starts looking at the other scenes they've written, that other people have complained about. Or that they themselves weren't sure of.
After all, rewriting was the correct decision once.

This often, but not always, means that new chapters dry out, either for a while, or for good - the author realises they should just rewrite the whole thing, so goes dark for a few weeks.

 

https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/hearts-aflutter-worm-lovesick-yandere-simulator.381524/

Just read the recent worm fic and it's too early to give a rating but so far, it's been pretty interesting. I was a bit guarded given the premise, but the author has done a very good job keeping things interesting.

Basically a girl fall in love/obsessively stalks Taylor, and starts murdering the people that bully her.

 

It has a shipping chart listed in the OP, is it full of "shipping" and such

 

I haven't read it, but did you actually look at the chart in question? 'cos the only two romantic attractions there that are not canonical are The OC > Taylor and Sophia > Emma. And given the synopsis, I doubt Taylor and The OC will be making out on the couch anytime soon.

 

Another update from Nugar on this! This time is an interlude from Piggot/Paladin. Lots of world building that is only being trickle-fed to us. Though I personally can't wait for them to get out of the hospital, the Taylor/Lisa interactions are the brightest parts of this fic imo.

 

I liked it. The world is still fucked up, just in a different way. Something tells me Cauldron figured out the relationship between Eidolon and the Endbringers and they killed each other off. Scion also died somehow and that's why there are calamities, cause shards are fucking up when they bond.

 

Twinning by Harbin

Taylor has Coil's power and she uses it so much that she slowly disassociates from reality. Nothing that Taylor does in the dropped timeline ever really happened and while that liberates her from consequences, she liberates herself from morality. It's humorous and quietly horrifying in equal measure.

Around the fifth chapter there's a diversion point where Taylor makes a decision on whether to save Brian's life which leads to her making meaningful connections, albeit extremely awkward and malformed, with a couple of the Undersiders. I found that I don't enjoy the new story direction as much. Taylor is getting better. Sort of. But it's too endearing with her blundering endeavours at romance and friendship.

The author wrote an omake where he diverted down the alternate path and Brian died. Taylor avenged him instead. I would have liked to see that story explored further.

The writing is good. The author handles the multiple timelines from Taylor's distorted perspective well. I wasn't confused about which timeline I was reading about even when the author is flicking back and forth between them with abandon. Taylor's changing mindset is handled well, often played for humour.

It's a decent read. There isn't much written, but there's enough to enjoy and the author is updating every few days.

 

Unless I'm going crazy, the author did expand on that timeline but put it on SV.

 

Thanks, that's exactly what I wanted. It gets dark. Taylor's on the verge of a major melt down.