I just finished this after stalling out for a bit. There are some parts that I'm really not into, and then there are some parts I am. This story is like atypical of what SB produces as a whole. Needless escalation for escalation's sense. The whole Skitter being told to kill Legend, the whole Contessa bit. The way that the PRT treats Harry as a threat, violates the endbringer truce and incarcerates him.

The Coil set them all up arc and how he's basically on the run atm, and no one can catch him felt really forced. Usually I don't comment on things like that too much, but it pretty much went from Coil exposed us. Thomas Calvert threw me under the bus, threw all of us. The character deaths to sell the cause, Shadow Stalkers as an agent of Coil. The fact that the protectorate doesn't believe Harry, but then they do, but uses their belief of him as a means to get him into the wards.

Its like the most ham fisted attempt I've ever read, and that's saying something.

Lets not even mention the HP crossover elements from his other fics.
They're at the levithan arc. I feel like he will either abandon this or he'll lose interest soon. Levithan arc is the death of most Worm ff that is like this. Similar to how the Wave arc is for Naruto.

 

Simurgh's Son actually has decent (maybe even good) prose, but it's plot and ideas are just absolute garbage.

The whole Traveler Arc was so painfully forced to read.

Also for anyone who cares, Archive Updated to here.

 

Just wanted to throw this out there as a reminder. Other Fandom Almost Rec can be posted in. I updated the Other Fandoms needs you post to include that as well.

So just like the HP review is, you can now post directly there. I'd like for you to try and do that instead of posting here. That doesn't mean that you have to stop outright discussing, but if you can take the time to make a post here, you can take the time to create a new thread in Other Fandom Almost Rec.

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Locked. Post in Other Fandom Almost Rec.