In my eyes what makes that scene bad is the lack of any kind of response from Hermione. At this point she has been trying to get S.P.E.W. running for over a year. Surely if what Harry saying is true someone had brought up the same argument and she would either have had the 'oh' moment already, or developed a counter argument. This is just an instance of 'making your protagonist smart by turning all around him dumber'.

Other than that and the 'mudblood' situation that has already been mentioned that fic is rather good. Perhaps this could even be library worthy when the story actually starts unfolding.

One thing that should be mentioned though is that the only person listed in the authors favorites is a prolific hp/lv writer. So perhaps that is something that people should keep up an eye on, even is the author made a a/n saying that this won't be hp/lv. It's not only the pairing itself that makes those type of fics shit.

 

I have my problems with the Emerald series, but I did like how they handled the whole 'mudblood' issue; the fact that everyone in Slytherin knows that Harry Potter's mother is muggleborn means they don't say it in front of him, unless it's someone who's egging Harry on. The fact that most of Slytherin likes Harry and because fame trumps blood purity, means that it only becomes an issue after Voldemort's rise.

 

Emerald series?

 

Pretty sure he means the series by DrizzleWizzle; https://www.fanfiction.net/s/8666085/1/Harry-Potter-and-the-Slytherin-Selection

Currently done with the first 4 years and just started on fifth. I've only skimmed bits of the start, so can't really tell if it's worth reading.

 

Yeah, I had forgotten the names of the first four books, and just sort of assumed they followed an Emerald theme due to the fifth books name (Emerald Trance) and Harry being in Slytherin.

Year Five hasn't been bad, but it sort of dragged on in the beginning; they just got to Hogwarts, and there was two or three chapters dedicated to the train-ride (pauses for dramatic action/cliffhangers, I suppose). The trial was more interesting when it was a preview at the end of Year Four than it really was here; it got dull after awhile.

 

Oh that. I wasn't aware it had any sort of series name to it, I know that only the last one is called "Emerald Trance". I hate his bi-weekly updates and penchant for cliffhangers. Also, I keep hoping I'd read about a dismembered Malfoy and a flayed Pansy, but he keeps bringing on the disappointment. At the very least, Harry could cripple Crabbe or Goyle. Or both. But who knows? He might do something neat in the fifth year.

 

Pretty much the only reason I'm putting this here instead of in "For Review" is because of its short length. This is shaping up to be pretty fantastic already.

 

Link

 

Oops, thanks. Usually don't forget that.

 

Fantastic story so far. Thank you for pointing it out for me. It's too soon to rate it, but it has a lot of potential.

 

That summary leaves a lot to be desired.

 

Interesting read, thanks for pointing it out. Your right to post it here, it is still very short and the story can go one of a thousand directions. It could either turn into something very good, or turn into a real shit fest real fast given the short length we have to judge.

So far the ideas behind it and presentation are good, but the writing doesn't do anything special for me. The writing isn't bad, it's just that it isn't good either, the writing feels average. The ideas involved in the story are holding it up at the moment for me.

TL;DR Too short to decide, could either be potentially great or turn out to be very mediocre. Need more words to decide.

 

Lucius and Harry as the two tagged characters? No thanks.

 

Right, because I would definitely suggest a weird slash pairing, get eight thumbs up for the rec, and have several people comment on how good the story is.

Actually, you know what, don't even bother reading the story. You don't deserve entertainment like this if you make judgments like that.

 

Now the one making an arbitrary judgment is you. He never said anything abut slash, he cud be talkingf about 'adopted Harry' which would make more sense, since Rep (and us) can read the No Pairing. He could be talking about 'Death Eater' Harry or 'Harry that substitutes Voldemort', which are less common. No need to get prissy.

Although, just not reading just because of the tags is arbitrary but understandable, kinda, but the need to post about it, less so. Can you give me more details about the story? I found the summary lacking.

 

I'm also leery of the story due to the tags. More so for the future than for what the story is presently. How many good stories are there that are labeled with Lucius?

Exactly.

 

It's not bad so far, and Lucius has only showed up once, and for a brief period. Harry talked with Draco, the most, actually. Harry told Draco who he was, but Draco didn't believe him

Spoiler

because Harry lives in Germany currently. My only problem with this story is that Harry is apparently about to get a Horcrux, at the age of around 10 or so. I talked to the author about it, and he gave some decent reasons, so we'll see how this plays out.

 

Mind sharing what was said? That's a concern of mine too, but the scene from chapter six was well done, so I'm on the fence.