Title: Alone In The Dark
Author: Tarawen
Rating: T
Genre: Angst/Tragedy
Pairing: None
Status: Complete
Summary: “Avada Kedavra” so easy to let the hate pour out in the green strike, like lightning. One Shot Dark Harry.
Link: FanFiction.net - Alone In The Dark

If you have a fanfiction.net account I'll also request not insist, that you R&R.

Also any writing advice is always welcome, my goal for writing fan fiction is to become a better writer - and so I welcome advice.

EDIT: Sorry for the mix up - I've now edited it so that it is in the proper format and the link is correct.

 

Read this before posting

The link you gave doesn't work.

 

FF.net is down at the moment

 

Hmm work's just fine to me except this fic.
Your link suck.

 

Here is the right link.
It~s not THAT hard to figure the right Link

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2246379/1/

I havent read it yet but maybe tomorrow

 

It's not bad. Not great, but not bad. You were lacking on the puncuation a bit, though.

 

It's an old fan fiction, written...a while ago...at anyrate - the link is right now and so is the format - I accidentally used the link to look at it if you own the fan fiction - once more I am terribly sorry.

 

............ummm that was preatty pointless

 

Pointless? I didn't think so. Gave a view of a Dark Harry and how his thoughts afterwards revolved around the spell "Avada Kedavra", right? Meh. All oneshots are a bit dodgy, lol.

I appoligize for my poor analyzing ability, I've never been good at it. *shrugs*

 

the whole thing was a dream and the Dark Harry wasnt really explained and wasnt very good from what i saw. the whole thing wasnt even real so thats y i said it was pointless. it was to short to have any sort of storyline or explain anything about what was happening.

 

Thank you...but how do I learn to make my writing better if you don't explain further than that. Also I might be able to take you a bit more seriously as a reviewer if you bothered to captilize where it's required in your reviews.

 

It was akward in a goob way...

 

Akward in a good way? What does that mean exactly - I'm really very interested in becoming a better author. Creative critisism is actually much more valuble then the people who drool all over me and tell me I'm perfect.

 

The Pov was strange, and harry was made a bit difrrently then the "normal" harry. But then again it was a refreshing change from the regular guanno we see daily on ff.net

 

You should be a little more thankful that you are getting reviews, instead of snapping at those who did not write theirs to your standards. Beggers can't be choosers... and begging is not very becoming of an author, especially one who is asking for advice from strangers.

This piece does not stand alone. One-shots are like short stories and should be self-contained. Your piece does not have a whole lot of character development. You would have to have read the originator's series in order to place what is going on in your one-shot. Ultimately, this piece feels like it was taken from a much larger body of writing, like a teaser you would find in the front of the book before you buy it in the store. But, obviously, you haven't written any more, otherwise it would have been posted already.

AP

 

IT was good not great but the thing is it was pretty pointless unless there is to be a story out of it

 

pretty good

 

This story is terrible and I can't fathom why it is in the library.

Terrible grammar and style, a pointless plot, and a cliche premise. This one may have slipped past our defenses when the site was young and desperate, but it's high time it got booted out of the library.

0.5/5