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WIP Ascended Vices by ScottPress - M

Discussion in 'Review Board' started by ScottPress, Apr 29, 2018.

  1. ScottPress

    ScottPress The Horny Sovereign Prestige

    Apr 22, 2013
    The Holy Moose Empire
    High Score:
    Title: Ascended Vices
    Author: ScottPress
    Rating: M
    Genre: Crime/Drama
    Status: Work in progress
    Library category: Alternates
    Pairings: nothing's set in stone
    Summary: Harry seeks a purpose of his own. Lines blur for Sirius as he fills the power vacuum left in Wizarding Britain by Voldemort and Dumbledore. The war never really ended. Sequel to Lesser Evils (link to the Library thread for that one).
    Links: WbA FFN

    Yes, I'm submitting my own stuff again.

    Out of the gate, you won't understand what's going on here if you haven't read the first fic. I'm also submitting this for review much earlier in the wordcount than I did the first fic, but it turns out today is the anniversary of the WbA thread, so I thought, why not.

    If I may be so bold, I think my writing is much better now than when I started Lesser Evils, so the beginning doesn't feel like high-grit sandpaper. I also have a solid direction for where things have to go from the outset, which I hope will make for stronger plotting. Updates have been slow (less than 40k words in a year, well...) but I'll put that down to college bullshit last year. I'm hoping to get on a somewhat regular schedule starting in May.

    If you've read Lesser Evils, you pretty much know what to expect: I intend to continue to explore the questionable morality of the main characters (Harry, Sirius, and to a lesser extent, Sturgis and Mulciber), deliver some Dark magic ponderings, some good action, interesting characters (though perhaps not ones you'll want to root for), and most importantly, an original plot, all supported by continually improving writing.
  2. SighDuck

    SighDuck Squib

    Nov 9, 2013
    Melbourne, Australia
    One of the best fics going round right now, I'd say. Loving the progression of Harry, and the hard truths he's had to swallow so far throughout AV. Development of Sturgis into such an interesting character has been a highlight as well, and it's certainly original. Unsure so far about Sirius - on one hand, I really admire the way he's evolved into a powerhouse, of sorts, and the hardline he's taking in the war - but at other times he just seems like too much of a dick. I get that you're trying to introduce more interpersonal conflict, but I hope it doesn't become a completely estranging factor between Harry and Sirius, though I wouldn't mind more distance between them as Harry comes into his own. I also feel like your personal style is becoming more distinct in this than in LE, so great work there.

    4/5 so far
  3. Dark Syaoran

    Dark Syaoran Golden Patronus Admin

    Jun 4, 2005
    Would anyone else like to review? We have 10 votes but only 1 written review.