I read this last night. It has a lot of potential despite the use of some cliches. I would have preferred fem!blaise, but you can't get everything can you? I'll probably wait until the word count is higher to check back with it, for some reason I don't like sitting down to read one chapter of a story at a time unless they are really long chapters.

 

Good so far but he has yet to finish a story... as it is Harry is showing independent thinking, and wisdom. He may take the advice of others but makes his own decisions. It also is different from other stories I have read so far though he has yet to show where this Assasin comes into play.

 

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its a good story short but good

 

As stated before it has a potential and it has unique concepts. I think conflicts will show up later. We're already seeing a cocky Ron, it's only a matter of time. I too would of liked a Fem blaise, but it's fine, as long as half way through the story i don't see a Harry/Mblaise pairing.

 

Well im wanting an update but i've come to expect half finished pieces of work from this author so im starting to question whether or not it's as good as it looks?

 

I don't like it. THe relationship with Blaise Zabini is developing WAY too quickly. He's talked to Blaise for approximately five minutes. WHY is he offering to share the TIME TURNER?!


Very disappointing.

 

What about the other people in his group though?

And He would never see Blaise, anyway. Goes to his normal classes with Blaise, does the Time Warp, does what he needs to do. Blaise is never involved. Harry saying, "He had big plans for Blaise, whether Blaise knew them or not." (Or something like that.) felt kinda stupid. HE DOESN'T KNOW BLAISE!

A secret so BIG he won't trust Ron or Hermione, yet he goes all in with Blaise, a kid he BARELY knows?!

 

Thats easy chuck because the author will say that Harry has some 7th or 8th sense that just tells him he can confide in Blaise, thats what most tend to do anyway. I understand where your heads at though, how the fuck could you truely trust a Slytherin? the house where there ambition and loyalty extends only to themselves and other house mates (possably).

 

I mean maybe if Dumbledor had told Harry the reason the board was set against Blaise (mentioned in the first chapter). That is one of the few errors (though a glaring one).

 

That would have helped a lot to explain it all but beggars can't be choosers! It is a good story just not long enough yet. :|

 

Story is pretty solid but updates aren't frequent enough..

 

I like it. Its pretty good. Definently on of the MUCH better ones on FF.net. One of the best I had read in a while.

 

I still havent even read the summary. I'll wait to see if the story has any hope of being continued or even finished.

 

Well Madeyes you gonna be waiting a looooong time! the author is an inconsistant writer so dont get your hopes up!

 

In a couple of years it will reach the 20k mark and we will have a story that will take up an hour of our time with good writing but an as yet undeveloped plot. Er yay :?

 

This one showed promise at one time, but it's been abandoned for over three years. It's got only 2 chapters and 8k words, and never really got off the ground. Harry and male!Blaise are to be apprenticed to Hagrid and a few other people like Nicolas Flamel, but we never reach that far in the story.

2/5 - there's just not enough here to be in the library