Title: Attention Seeker
Author: Helaros.
Rating: Everybody(K+).
Genre: General/Angst .
Pairing: None.
Words: 437
Published: May 7, 2005
Status: Oneshot.
Summary: Harry tells Dumbledore why. Post-war, one-shot.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2383922/1/

Something I just found while looking around fanfiction.net somewhat AU given how the story was written before the HBP was published but still a good story.


Checked by Minion, October 10, 2016

 

Short, but okay.

 

I loved it! Even though it was short it was awesome. One of the best one shots i have read. Seriously good. Try it and you wont be dissapointed.

 

I liked it a lot. A VERY good one shot.


DEFINITELY worth a minute. Its that short. Concise, compact, and exceptional. Its less than a thousand words, but not one is wasted.

 

I loved it! Finally someone has realized the potential of the Hufflepuffs.

 

Quite true about the Hufflepuffs. And no one would expect it until it's too late. Mwhahaha.... :twisted:

 

Yeah, this is cool. A pity the author basically only does one-shots.

 

Well I think it is well written, and it is a very interesting concept. The story is just too short in my opinion to be in the Library. I could be wrong, but this is more of a drabble then one-shot.

I'll give the story a 4/5 personally in what's there.

However, given the fact it's too short really, I'd give it more of a 3/5. If it were longer, I'd say definitely Library worthy but I'm not sure with this. However, I will say I liked the added touch of Hufflepuffs being in his inner circle because they are the ones most loyal.

 

It's pretty good, but left me wanting more. At 400+ words, it's barely a scene, let alone a complete fic.

It's a great premise for a story--Harry conquering Dumbledore and Hogwarts with an army of loyal Hufflepuffs--but as it stands there's not enough insight into how Harry became what he is.

5/5 for the idea.

3/5 for the actual story; it's hard to recommend something so short and undeveloped.

 

3/5 it is. If there had been just a bit more background it would have been much better. The premise is different, so I'm tempted to go for a 4, but the brevity robs a good bit of the enjoyment.

 

Harry could never overpower Dumbledore at Hogwarts. Voldemort couldn't do it so Harry sure can't too.

Good idea for a AU fic.

Shortness kills the feeling of the fic and that's why I give it 3/5.

Huflepuffs. Be afraid of them.

 

???

I didn't get it. The writing is good, but the shortness of it and the lack of a point or a punch line killed it for me. 2/5.

 

Terrible. If you read a one sentence description of the story, it would be no better or worse than the story itself. I hesitate to even call this prose. 1/5.

 

Enjoyed the way the Hufflepuffs were in the inner circle because of their loyalty however it seems he judges them by their house alone which is as unrealistic as slytherin=evil. The fact he managed to take over Hogwarts is somewhat unrealistic
Overall I liked the idea behind it but the underdeveloped way it was executed ruined it for me.
3/5

 

This is all setup and no payoff. "You taught me to hate"? We get nothing in the way of explanation, it's not the least bit fleshed out. It reads like a Dumbledore bash fic reduced to a one-shot that fails to be thoughtful. It's absolutely possible to write a short piece and express a lot (Cauterize), but this isn't one of those.

The worst offence it commits is inserting repetitions and bursts of purple prose when it's already less than 500 words.

This fic is like a breath of air. Tasteless, colorless, lacks solidity and forgettably short.

Giving it even 2/5 for lack of typos and such would be a stretch. 1/5, because the page might as well be blank.

 

Hey, stop making fun of air! Honestly I found it pretty terrible myself but lots of what's in the DLP Library before 2007/8/ or even 9 is pretty bad. Give it a 1.5/5 myself and found it pretty unclear as well they didn't explain anything and didn't develop the aftermath of Dumbledore death, the fallout and what th- why does Harry think Dumble shy's away from attention?! The author's other story on the other hand https://www.fanfiction.net/s/2430459/3/Not-the-Best-Start
has a lot of setup an no payoff as well!
Repetition

 

Rubbish. This is legitimate rubbish. I hesitate to even call it rubbish in the first place, as that implies it had some level of worth in the first place. A few hundred words does not make a good oneshot except for the most talented of authors. This author is not one of them.

There was nothing remotely good about it. The prose was bland. The characters are bland. Hell, even the bloody "atmosphere" the author attempted to create was bland. This is in no way worth more than 1/5.

 

1/5 from me. It's just too short. I like the general concept of just having a scene where Dumbledore and Harry sit down to talk about how things ended up like this, but like ScottPress said, there's no real explanation. Just "You taught me to hate" isn't nearly enough.