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WIP Avatar by Von - T - HP/Avatar(Movie)

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by PrometheusII, Apr 16, 2015.

  1. PrometheusII

    PrometheusII Second Year

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    Title: Avatar
    Author: Von
    Rating: T
    Genre: Spiritual/Sci-Fi
    Chapters: 13
    Words: 68,896
    Updated: Jan 28, 2015
    Published: Aug 23, 2013
    Status: WIP
    Library Category: ?
    Pairing: -
    Summary: Harry defeated Voldemort with the power he knew not, a power far more valuable than his freedom. Sealed away until next he was needed, the Wizarding Saviour slept through the fall of his race, of magic and almost the world. Now he has been woken, the last avatar of a dead species and a being whose purpose is so old that only the bones of the Earth remember. (Not set during movie)
    Link: Link

    As the summary says, Harry wakes up in the future of the "Avatar" movie... but do not worry, this story takes place on EARTH - not Pandora. At least, not yet. Some details about magic (being a certain kind of "energy"... blabla..) are a bit fuzzy, but what else can you expect when it has to fit into the Avatar universe. Some parts are very very well done. Ethical dilemmas are taken seriously! Not just "kill the bad guys" or else "killing is evil". Also, Harry's character is portrayed very nicely. First, he seems to be a bit weak (especially compared to DLP standards) - but his struggles, even some angsty parts make sense! They are not there to give pleasure in some weird angst/hurt/comfort-fetish way, but they are there since it is absolutely realistic to freak out a bit if you are transported into such a unknown future, without most everything you know etc. But instead of angsting about, Harry tries to create his own life there - giving sense to it etc. Very convincing, very nice! Also, other characters are "real", not just plot-devices. They have motivations of their own. Very solid writing.

    4/5, because I hate esoteric interpretations of "energy", otherwise it would even rate 4.5 or 5 in my opinion.
     
  2. Republic

    Republic The Snow Queen –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    Several chapters in, and this is not badly written but there's nothing interesting or even likable about it.

    Don't think I'll be continuing. 2/5 for decent writing.
     
  3. Radmar

    Radmar Disappeared

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    In other words, the story has nothing to do with Avatar; it just shows Harry Potter living in some original sci-fi world.

    I didn't get very far into it, but i didn't like what I saw. 2/5.
     
  4. Krieger

    Krieger Minister of Magic DLP Supporter

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    Thanks for the rec, interesting but nothing special. The writing is decent although the story is going no where at the moment that touches Pandora, but it brings up some interesting concepts.

    3/5, not library worthy but I'll be following it for now.

    I'm not sure where this is in the time-line for Avatar, but I was kind of hoping it was before the movie. So that way the reason behind humanity invading Pandora could be because they want the minerals for Harry to restore earth.

    Harry's reaction to the fact he was basically the cause of an attempted genocide could be interesting.
     
  5. NuScorpii

    NuScorpii Professor

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    I'd read this a while back, and I liked it. The writing is good and the plot has potential to be very good.

    3/5 with a potential to be 4/5.
     
  6. Xion

    Xion Robot Overlord Admin

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    Avatar has been updated with a new chapter.

    Story Stats
    Chapters: 23
    Words: 120,306
    Updated: 2019-12-25 19:56:43 UTC
    Published: 2013-08-23 05:41:15 UTC
    Previously updated: over 1 year ago

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  7. Xion

    Xion Robot Overlord Admin

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    Avatar has been updated with a new chapter.

    Story Stats
    Chapters: 24
    Words: 125,154
    Updated: 2019-12-28 21:13:35 UTC
    Published: 2013-08-23 05:41:15 UTC
    Previously updated: 3 days ago

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