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Oneshot Back to Work

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by entropy843, Apr 15, 2020.

2.4000000953674/5, 5 votes
  1. entropy843

    entropy843 First Year

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    Apr 15, 2020 #1
    Title:Back to Work
    Link:https://archiveofourown.org/works/13990215
    Author:TheTartWitch
    Genre:General
    Pairing: Percy Weasley&his job

    Summary:The day the Minister is killed, Percy is filling out paperwork at his desk.The day Voldemort dies, Percy has successfully retained his life and his job. Unfortunately, his ability to trust anyone ever again and his family count among the things he's lost.


    One of those decent oneshots of a minor character. Warning: Percy is angry in a very controlled way.
     
  2. RandyRanderson

    RandyRanderson Fourth Year

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    Apr 15, 2020 #2
    It felt trite and cheap like a lot of ao3 fanfiction. The grammar was fine aside from a few issues. It's a decent oneshot, sure, but it isn't memorable and doesn't have the substance to be recommended to others. The author seems to love the "misunderstood villain" and argued for Percy by completely changing his character and situation to make him the good character through methods such as engaging in bashing (though not outright stated) of the other weasleys. Obviously, arguing for Percy by using a character that is not Percy is probably not the logical way of doing so. 2/5
     
  3. Murr

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    Apr 16, 2020 #3
    I thought this was fine, the author had a somewhat interesting idea and executed it in a oneshot. Writing tries to be edgy and is just kind of mediocre. Half the plot threads make no sense and Percy seems extremely OOC, and his anger seems to be something the author was looking for around which to center the fic, rather than a naturally developed circumstance of canon events.
    Not library material, but eh, I'll give 2.5 for a somewhat interesting idea take on Percy's character.
     
  4. Ched

    Ched Da Trek Moderator DLP Supporter ⭐⭐

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    Apr 26, 2020 #4
    3.5/5 rounded down to a 3, I think.

    I'd have rounded up if the story had really gone anywhere.

    It does a halfway decent job of characterizing Percy as angsty and doing his best to help people during the war, but ultimately I don't feel that the story goes anywhere or learns anything.

    Percy did a lot of things, sure. But at the end of the story he's in pretty much the same place, in the same mental state, as he was at the beginning.
     
  5. Republic

    Republic The Snow Queen –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    Apr 27, 2020 #5
    Yeah, no. Shitty tropes are shitty regardless of what character they're written for, and this doesn't pull it off at all. 1/5