Title: Bloody Sabbath
Author: AlexisStevCotius
Rated: M
Genre: action/adventure
Pairing: Multi?
Status: Wip
Summary: 6th year, things change. Death of one becomes the resolve of many. Children become adults. Warriors becomes Heroes as the Light and the Darnkess is blended into the Gray.
Link:http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2627178/1/

Good story (i think) is a harry multi pairing, however, too many spelling and grammar errors along with shoddy sentences. This author really needs a beta..

 

I've seen this before, at least I think I have. If it is the same as I'm thinking about then yes it does need a beta.

You need to edit your post to make the link work. Just highlight the text for the link and click on the url button at the top.

 

thanks i'll try again

 

Im trying very hard to actually pay attention to this story <_< For some reason i cant really concentrate on it, Prolly only reading it because its a Multi story <_<

 

i was doing the same thing until about the fourth chapter then just ditched it, if you can't put together a proper sentence don't write a fic..

 

beware, the author is crazy and sensitive this is the review response i got..

Why thank you for your spiteful words, do you realize you have made the
house elves cry at my attempt at their inclusion into the fic I have
created? Have you no shame into kindly recommending that I need to obtain
a beta reader, kind sir? Have you no shame that you decided to make an
ass of yourself? Have you no shame that you will be at the end of a
wand possibly in the next chapter? :grins: Be kind, since you can't
rewind.

Who the hell writes like that??

 

*looks* AlexisStevCotius, apperantly. Some people, I have come to notice, believe that just because they use a computer (yay!) and are 'surfing' the 'cyberspace' they are all-powerfull or at least high and mighty. God forbid they learn how to post... and that's wat you get. You find yourself at the end of a wand. :lol:

 

yep, some people just shouldn't be allowed to use a computer.

 

Three words about sums it up...What the Fuck? thank you for your time.

 

For reccomending That he get a beta reader you get that kind of response?

He needs a shrink, badly

 

no shit, some pschiatriac (?) help would do him some good..

 

I think someone summed this up quite nicely before: What the fuck?

The second chapter was mostly restating what happened in Canon in the first five books.

The third chapter, Ginny uses the Bat-Bogey Hex, ugh. Neville's letter sounds so phony, as if Harry doesn't know these sort of things. Dudley apologizes as well.

The ships are going to be Harry - Multi, R/HR (WRONG), NL/LL (WRONG), and Remus/OC female werewolf.

Fourth Chapter, Harry gets a letter from who else? The Goblins with the cast of usual suspects to be there. Now Harry is focusing on the fact that Bella wasn't using an killing curse on Sirius. (Most likely to make it more plausible when she becomes part of the harem.) Weasleys escape from near death.

Fifth Chapter, Weasleys are supposedly dead according to the Prophet but not really. We get Luna's POV, then we get Percy's. Harry helps Percy against some Death Eaters as the chapter ends.

Sixth Chapter, DUDLEY becomes the one with the "so simple yet logical" solution of exposing Tom Riddle for being a half-blood! How will Harry do it dear reader? By getting Rita Skeeter's help!

It's called a phone book, but alright. Of course, Tom the Barkeep is the one to help Harry with his problem.

Meanwhile...

Madam Malkin saw Harry before his first year, why is she eeping now? Now Harry gets free clothes! And Voldie?

Now for the will reading, where the usual suspects are.

So wait, the solution to Harry is to bribe his friend to no longer be jealous? Uh...*facepalm*

Hermione gets a library, Potter Law Violation.

Now they say that in the actual will reading? Sirius also thinks it's a good idea to give Ron money to keep his jealousy down? *Facepalms*

Ugh, this story was five chapters to read, and by the time I got to the end I considered it a good thing. The story has been abandoned, full of cliches, and everything else above I've already mentioned. Bloody Sabbath? Should be renamed Bloody Hell. Therefore, I rate this story a 1/5. Get this out of the Library ASAP.