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Cold Water by VioletAshkevron - T - HP/OC

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Zevrillion, Aug 1, 2005.

  1. Zevrillion

    Zevrillion Founder Retired Staff

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    Title: Cold Water
    Author: VioletAshkevron
    Rating: T
    Pairing: HP/OC
    Category: Drama/Ramance
    Summary: New Defense Against the Dark Arts professor Harry Potter strikes up an unlikely friendship with a shy Slytherin seventh year transfer student. But Addie's got a secret... one that the Death Eaters are willing to kill for...
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2424196/1/

    One of the better romance stories I have read.
     
  2. Vtigo

    Vtigo Second Year

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    You might wanna update your post, that link no longer works.
     
  3. Niffler Lord

    Niffler Lord Headmaster

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    I think the author's account has been removed. I couldn't find it either.
     
  4. bornagainpenguin

    bornagainpenguin DLP Archivist

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    Calls herself "Violet Spark" these days. Fic looks like its deleted. There is a copy in the DLP Archives for those who do not have a copy...

    --bornagainpenguin
     
  5. gamesguy

    gamesguy Muggle

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    Where in the archives exactly? I couldnt find it, can u link it please?
     
  6. Choronzon

    Choronzon Guest

    I can't find it in the archives, either. Anyone know where else there is a copy?
     
  7. The Terror

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    I'm reading the story now; I found it in a RAR file I downloaded. Let me know if you want it; it might take me a day or two, but I can send it.
     
  8. Richard

    Richard Supreme Mugwump

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    How long is it, and is it any good? Does Harry sound like a pussy in it like he did in the books?

    Richard.
     
  9. gamesguy

    gamesguy Muggle

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  10. uriel

    uriel Seventh Year DLP Supporter

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    was this story previously titled "forbidden" ?
    featured angsting DADA professor Harry getting involved with slytherin head girl.
    story was deleted from fanfiction.net awhile ago, was just wondering if it was the same story renamed.
     
  11. darklordmike

    darklordmike Headmaster

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    This story is complete, and as far as I can tell the only available copy is in the DLP Archives.

    Here's the set-up: Harry has defeated Voldemort and is now 20 years old. He returns to Hogwarts to teach DADA, and is immediately smitten with a new transfer student from America. She's a shy 7th-year who's placed, of course, in Slytherin.

    What is the young Miss Adhara Grey like? Here's one of her first conversations with Harry:


    And yeah, she continues that adorable stuttering for almost the entire story. Harry becomes enchanted with her right away, and she thinks he's just duh-reamy:


    But there's trouble in paradise. Adhara begins dating a Slytherin by the name of Kieran, who is related to Draco and hates Harry. The adorably shy but stunningly beautiful Adhara, who is in no-way an author-insert, seeks the help of her more 'experienced' roommates when it comes to love:

    Isn't that just precious? Adhara's such a sweetheart!

    But don't fear, dear reader; there's more to the lovely Adhara than meets the eye. It turns out there's a reason for her stutter, and for her cozying up to Kieran. I won't spoil anything for you, but there's a nefarious plot afoot (*cough* Draco *cough*), and it's up to the fearless Adhara to stop it!

    And ZOMG, you'll never guess who her real father is! Major dramaz! :awesome

    All told, this was an enthralling story that Twilight fangirls everywhere are sure to love.

    I give it a Stephenie Meyer out of 5.
     
  12. eXcalite

    eXcalite Seventh Year

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    you made me laugh:banana:
     
  13. Warlocke

    Warlocke Prisoner

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    Could be worse... Ever notice how many OCs in Harry Potter fanfic have the same name as the author's username?

    Yeeaaahh... try telling me again that your character isn't a self-insert/author avatar.

    Those amazing Mary-Sue eyes, that lustrous Mary-Sue hair, what unique and Mary-Sue-ish color are they?

    I'll tell you: Transparent. Completely transparent, just like the author's motives. It doesn't take a genius to figure out why so many OCs end up falling into the arms of both Harry and Draco (and Snape, and Lucius, AND Voldemort?!?). :eek:
     
  14. hereagain

    hereagain Guest

    dang it! rapidshare "claims" that there download server is filled up
     
  15. cold burn

    cold burn Third Year

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    Hold on... wasn't this like just in the 'For Review' thread? if so how does a story with one star end up in the library?
     
  16. Oz

    Oz For Zombie. Moderator DLP Supporter

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    Because it was posted before the library in its current form even existed.
     
  17. darklordmike

    darklordmike Headmaster

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    Yup, as Oz said, this one hasn't been up for review since 2005. But in case it wasn't clear from my review, this is easily one of the worst stories on the neglected list. It doesn't have a single redeeming quality.

    Deletion would be a very good thing.
     
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