Title: Continuing My Work
Author: xxThornxx
Rating: M
Genre: [Action/Suspense
Pairing: HONKS
Status: WiP
Summary: Albus Dumbledore isn't all he appears to be. Aged,he lacks the capability to fulfill the ambitions he once chased. Feeling he can't leave the world without knowing his dreams will be fulfilled,he takes Harry on as his fledgling.Dark!Dumbledore,Harry,HONKS
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2887466/1/ , http://forums.darklordpotter.net/viewtopic.php?t=2328

 

I like this fanfic, good idea and good characterization. Get a beta though cause their are some typos.

 

I dunno...

No slash -- check
Decent novel length -- nope
Independant -- no...
Dark!harry -- check
Harry/Ginny -- hopefully not
Interesting ideas? -- maybe, you need to develop them more
English -- quite a few errors, where are your commas man?

Rating out of 10 -- 7/10

Update soon, and brush up your english and you have a good story there.

 

Trident, your link does not work.

 

I need a beta, anyone interested? That should catch any grammatical errors I have. I'm normally not so careless when I post chapters and what not.

As for decent novel length, I just started the story man, I still need to find exactly where i'm going with it and get into my groove with it.

 

I like it so far, and Honks is always worth a read in my book. What can i say, I just love pink hair .

 

Eh? I tried it, it should work.... try again.

 

I am really intruiged by this... How regular will the updates be?

 

If you really are in need of a beta, I will do it for you.

 

sounds ok so fat but still too early to tell
one qestion though -
it said Dark!Dumbledore - is he going to make Harry his predecessor and still be Dark? ( i mean make Harry Dark...)

 

If it is a dark! Dumbledore story it has potential. Seeing a bad Dumbledore is always good, in my opinion.

 

A dark Dumbledore is always good in my book. Can't say it's cliché, can I?

 

Actually it kind of is, I have seen some of those kinds of fics. They have bad spelling, grammar, and are extremely hard to understand. Cliche in my book.

is my new word for cliche scince I just found out who he is!

 

Ive never seen a Dark!dumbledore, taking Harry with him to the realms of darkness. And that is why im really interested in this story. It could be...Great, or it could turn out to be ordinary. A Beta could help it on its way to greatness

 

Updated. Tell me what cha think.

 

Is Chapter 2 up on FF?

 

Chapter two is complete and up on here and FFnet. Leave me some feedback.

I didn't exactly like how I did this chapter but it took me forever so I just went with one.

 

It isn't long, but I liked the idea of Grindelwalds memories in the book. I think it would be better if you wrote longer chapters though.

 

Personally, I wasn’t very intrigued by this. The idea of a dark!Dumbledore
sounds promising, and the idea of the Grindelwald memory book was great, but the characterization was not that great. Sirius sounds very fake. Also, neither chapter is very long, and it took almost a month to write the second one. That implies that it will be a very long time before this story starts moving. A beta would also be a very good idea, as there are some spelling and grammar errors.

I know I sounded really negative, but it still could turn out to be a really great story. Honestly, it’s a little early to tell.

 

You need a beta, but i like your ideas.

Try putting out longer chapters...perhaps 5000 words or so. Dumbledore seems to approve of Harry learning the Dark Arts...give an explanationas to why he would suddenly allow that.

Good luck, and i hope you update faster if your chapters are gonna be this short.